Lorraine Freire
Professor Valerie
FMS 115
28 April 2021
Critical Reflection
This project is an extension of my original project because I was able to create a
message I wanted to share for the world in a different style. Many people understand visual
communication, others understand more through songs, others prefer speech, some prefer
poems. I decided to target a group of people that are attracted to poetry because the message
from the original also includes a visual and they can see both ends of it. Now, not only could I
attract a certain audience with the art piece, but also who like poetry, and if I hope to have the
whole world hear me, I have to try to reach people who understand that specific way. Everyone
is different, and I believe in a system that we all try to learn in where we find the easiest way to.
This remediation allowed for me to make my little audience circle a little bit bigger.
My go to rhetorical canon was mainly focused on of course the delivery of my message,
my story, and how I want it to impact my audience. How I deliver it and in what way has a big
effect on how people are inspired and motivated, and that’s how I wanted to approach this. My
rhetorical appeal was obviously pathos, I wanted to create an emotional relationship with my
peers and audience. I want to connect on a deeper level that society doesn’t clearly allow us to.
To share my story and create these connections allows for everyone to see that they aren’t
alone. I have learned that the majority of my fears and my thoughts come from thinking of “why
does this happen to me, or why is it me that has to go
through this” when in reality it’s not just me. We all have those thoughts and we all suffer
through many struggles and yes they are our own struggles but if we share how we have
overcome our struggles it might just have saved a kid's life. My story is my story, but my story
could help many kids who have not found easy answers. I could be their answer.
This project has allowed me many opportunities to take this message into the next level,
and I appreciate it all. I have really learned a lot about myself and who I want to become. I want
to help people feel safe, I want to help people not feel alone and not have to live in fear that they
have been cursed with a horrible life that they can’t seem to break out of. I have felt like that and
I have been able to push through it by sharing my story and allowing others to raise their voices
and say “that happened to me too” some even are so scared that they say “if you were
someone who gets beat by your mom who could you tell”. Those kids are trying to say
something without actually saying something. They don’t want to expose themselves, but they
are screaming for help. With my story I want those kids to not have to scream for help, they
could use my story to help themselves find help and even find ways to cope with their feelings
or why they have certain feelings. I said a lot about how everything is constantly changing, and
change is my favorite and mosted hated word. But with this word it could bring so many
answers to the table and I want to speak upon it. Things will always be constantly changing,
even if you are set with a job, family, and a house, things will always be happening to you and
around you. And you can’t stop it because that is what life is about. Life is a roller coaster. It
wouldn't be fun if it was just riding down a straight track forever, nor would you learn anything.
Mistakes, and things that happen to you will always make you better and make you do things
differently with better outcomes. I have loved this time to reflect and really appreciate this
opportunity to bring my thoughts and ideas to life. I will carry this for a very long time.
