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Here are 3 center sentences and expansions that address the prompt in a more persuasive manner: 中心句1:长期投资青少年体育可以培养更多体育人才 拓展句:这样不仅可以提高国家体育水平,还可以在国际重大赛事中取得更好的成绩,提升国家软实力。 中心句2:从小鼓励儿童参与体育,可以养成他们终身的运动习惯 拓展句:这样不仅可以提高公众体质健康,

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Here are 3 center sentences and expansions that address the prompt in a more persuasive manner: 中心句1:长期投资青少年体育可以培养更多体育人才 拓展句:这样不仅可以提高国家体育水平,还可以在国际重大赛事中取得更好的成绩,提升国家软实力。 中心句2:从小鼓励儿童参与体育,可以养成他们终身的运动习惯 拓展句:这样不仅可以提高公众体质健康,

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课前预热:课程开始前,每天读两遍句子

1. Importing food from overseas has a beneficial effect on people’s well-being.


2. A healthy lifestyle is beneficial to one’s emotional well-being and physical fitness.
3. Computer skills are essential to many jobs.
4. Reading newspapers has formed an important part of life for many people.
5. Watching violent images can have a negative effect on one’s mental health.
6. Intensive farming technology can pose a threat to the environment.
7. It is possible for people to alter their food preparation methods.
8. Internet has made it easy for people to keep abreast of the newest information.
9. It is difficult for people from different culture backgrounds to empathise with each other.
10. Travelling overseas enables people to gain an insight into foreign cultures.
11. Public libraries have provided people with opportunities to expand their knowledge.
12. The public do not have the opportunity to close to nature.
13. The government should forbid people to buy gun.
14. Children sometimes are pushed to study hard.
15. The commercial bank is willing to lend money to these customers.
16. Students are unwilling to take up competitive sport if facilities are ill-equipped.
17. Some people consider it necessary to protect our environment.
18. Foreign language teachers should make every attempt to help students to improve cross-cultural
communicating ability.
19. An increasing number of people have chosen to work from home.
20. The boss can hire freelancers who have expertise in this subject matter.
21. The group have learned a lot of knowledge about the nature.
22. They are not familiar with the engineering technology.
23. It has never developed an expertise in assigning responsibilities.
24. Primary schools should lay emphasis on moral education.
25. People today give importance to wealth accumulation.
26. Most of us in the well-fed world give little thought to where our food comes from or how it's grown.
27. Industrialists should take advantage of new opportunities in China.
28. Advertisers can make optimal use of emotional stimuli with the aim of influencing people's brand
choices.
29. Children need to learn to accept the consequences of their actions
30. Poor education can lead to behavioural problems.
大作文类型判断及框架练习
大作文框架练习

作业示范
Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged 15 and younger. What is
your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries?

⚫ 题目问法:优缺点类
⚫ 题干类型:事实类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 15 岁以下人口增加
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:15 岁以下人口增加带来的坏处 1
主体段 2:15 岁以下人口增加带来的坏处 2
主体段 3:15 岁以下人口增加带来的好处

作业

Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead
of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
⚫ 题目问法: 优缺点类
⚫ 题干类型: 事实类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 修建专业设施训练运动员获得成功
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:修建专业设施训练运动员获得成功带来的坏处 1
主体段 2:修建专业设施训练运动员获得成功带来的坏处 2
主体段 3:修建专业设施训练运动员获得成功带来的好处

The gap between rich and poor is becoming wider, the rich richer, the poor even poorer. What has
caused this problem and how to solve this problem?
⚫ 题目问法:两个问题类
⚫ 题干类型:/
⚫ Discussion Issue: 贫富差距大
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:贫富差距大的原因 1
主体段 2:贫富差距大的原因 2
主体段 3:缩小平复差距的方法
大作文框架练习

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that are suitable and livable for
people in those times. What problems will this cause today and what can be done to solve these
problems?
⚫ 题目问法:两个问题类
⚫ 题干类型:/
⚫ Discussion Issue: 古老的城市/镇
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:古老的城市/镇带来的不好的影响 1
主体段 2:古老的城市/镇带来的不好的影响 2
主体段 3:解决办法 1

Some people argue that too much attention and too many resources have been given to the protection
of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
⚫ 题目问法:同不同意类
⚫ 题干类型:事实类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 更多的关注和资源给到野生动物和鸟类
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:不同意,更多的关注野生动物和鸟类的好处 1
主体段 2:同意,更多的关注野生动物和鸟类可能会带来一些坏处 1
主体段 3:同意,更多的关注野生动物和鸟类可能会带来一些坏处 2

Differences between countries have become less evident, so we can enjoy the same films, brands and
TV programs. To what extent do you think the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?
⚫ 题目问法:优缺点类
⚫ 题干类型:事实类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 国家差异减少
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:国家差异减少带来的好处 1
主体段 2:国家差异减少带来的好处 2
主体段 3:国家差异减少带来的坏处
大作文框架练习

Older people who need employment have to compete with younger people. What problems does this
cause? And what are the solutions?
⚫ 题目问法:两个问题类
⚫ 题干类型:/
⚫ Discussion Issue: 老年人和年轻人竞争
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:老年人和年轻人竞争造成的影响 1
主体段 2:老年人和年轻人竞争造成的影响 2
主体段 3:解决办法

Some people think that in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each
other,while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both
views and give your own opinion.
⚫ 题目问法:论述类
⚫ 题干类型:结论类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 相互依赖;变得独立
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:相互依赖的原因 1
主体段 2:变得独立的原因 1
主体段 3:我的观点-互相依赖的原因 2

Some people say that to prevent illnesses and diseases, governments should focus more on reducing
environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
⚫ 题目问法:同不同意类
⚫ 题干类型:结论类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 减少污染和住房问题;其他方法
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:减少污染和住房问题,可以预防疾病的原因 1
主体段 2:减少污染和住房问题,可以预防疾病的原因 2
主体段 3:其他方式也可以预防疾病
大作文框架练习

The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these sources of energy in remote
and untouched natural places. Do you think the advantages of locating oil and gas in these areas
outweigh the disadvantages of damaging these places?
⚫ 题目问法:优缺点类
⚫ 题干类型:事实类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 去偏远地区找石油
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:去偏远地区找石油带来的好处 1
主体段 2:去偏远地区找石油带来的好处 2
主体段 3:去偏远地区找石油带来的坏处 1
Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many
places? And how to increase its popularity?
⚫ 题目问法:两个问题类
⚫ 题干类型: /
⚫ Discussion Issue: 人们骑单车
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:人们很少骑单车的原因 1
主体段 2:人们很少骑单车的原因 2
主体段 3:让人们多骑单车的方法
大作文框架练习

The best way to reduce youth crime is to educate parents about good parenting skills. To what extent do
you agree or disagree?
⚫ 题目问法:同不同意类
⚫ 题干类型:结论类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 教育父母; 其他方法
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:教育父母可以减少青年犯罪的原因 1
主体段 2:其他方式 1 也可以减少青年犯罪
主体段 3:其他方式 2 也可以减少青年犯罪

Some people think there are not many things Individuals can do to resolve environmental problems,
while the others believe that in order to tackle environmental problems individuals also need to take
action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
⚫ 题目问法:论述类
⚫ 题干类型:结论类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 个人能解决环境问题;个人不能解决环境问题
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:个人解决不了环境问题的的原因 1
主体段 2:个人可以解决环境问题的原因 1
主体段 3:我的观点-个人可以解决环境问题 2

Some people argue that it is better to be unemployed than to be employed in jobs they do not enjoy.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
⚫ 题目问法:同不同意类
⚫ 题干类型:结论类
⚫ Discussion Issue: 做不喜欢的工作;不做不喜欢的工作
⚫ 框架构思:
主体段 1:不喜欢做的工作也做带来的好处 1
主体段 2:不喜欢做的工作也做带来的好处 2
主体段 3:不做自己不喜欢的工作带来的好处
中心句及拓展句练习

一、 同不同意类

改错练习
1.Many countries spend a lot of money preparing competitors to take part in major sports competitions
such as the Olympics, the football world cup etc, but it would be better to spend this money encouraging
children to take up sport from a young age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

运动员承受过高期待,压力过大
中心句:国家花钱培养运动员参加重要赛事 容易造成比赛失误

错误点:跑题。论述类题目应该写这个立场为什么是对的,而不是写这个观点错在哪里

有利于更多运动员取得好成绩
中心句:政府在体育赛事中投入资金 能提高国际影响力

错误点:空泛。没有讲清楚国际影响力具体是什么
有针对性,选手容易拿奖
中心句:为准备重要赛事的选手投资 为国争光

错误点:空泛。没有讲清楚为国争光具体是什么

劳民伤财
中心句:投资给重要赛事 导致其他基础建设的投入减少

错误点:说服力不够。应该尽量顺着题目论述,要么说儿童体育的好处,要么说竞技体育的好处。

孩子们会结交新朋友
中心句:花钱鼓励孩子们参加体育活动 能提高孩子们的社交能力

错误点:观点不唯一。很多活动都可以提高社交能力,为什么一定要选择这个呢?

中心句练习

中心句 1: 培养运动习惯
健康需求:鼓励小孩运动 身体健康

中心句 2: 对运动有兴趣
自我实现:鼓励小孩运动 以后成为优秀的运动员

中心句 3: 体育产业不断发展
经济:支持运动员 收入可以促进经济
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:鼓励小孩运动,身体健康

背景:小孩的行为和习惯和身边的设施、学校的教育关系密切

解释 1:学校里有体育课,老师可以教小孩如何运动,避免受伤,从小对运动感兴趣

解释 2:增加社区的设施,鼓励小孩运动

拓展结果:小孩会变得更开心和满足,增强体质

对比:政府花钱给专业运动员,孩子得不到充分锻炼的机会,还要花更多钱在医疗系统上

主体段 2

中心句:鼓励小孩运动,以后成为优秀的运动员

背景:小孩有天赋,但需要训练才可以展示

解释:孩子需要每天锻炼,每天参与一个体育项目,提高相关技能

举例:篮球运动员每天练习,才能熟练投篮、过人、运球

拓展结果:小孩未来成为世界知名运动员,取得成绩

对比:如果只投资给专业运动员,有可能会错过好苗子

主体段 3

中心句:支持运动员,收入可以促进经济

背景:政府请专业人员和专业设施去训练运动员,才可能获得名次

解释:大家会出钱去看比赛或者转播

解释:与此相关的行业也会发展

举例:比如卖纪念品,酒店和酒吧行业

拓展结果:提供大量就业机会
中心句及拓展句练习

改错练习

2. A longer prison term as a way of punishing those who break the law is not as good as other methods.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?

在监狱中他们可以重新改造,学习知识,锻炼劳动技能
中心句:触犯法律的人会进监狱 有利于他们出狱后自力更生

错误点:观点不唯一。不是只有在监狱里才可以提高技能
违法者在监狱中长期经受非自由状态
中心句:人会面临一个很长的刑期 容易产生绝望情绪

错误点:说服力不够。产生绝望情绪又怎么了呢?

政府财务压力增加,税率增加
中心句:增加入狱时间 纳税人压力增加,生活水平下降

错误点:说服力不够。犯罪的人是少数,不足以引起税率增加

犯罪者反省自我
中心句:通过处刑罚以外的其他手段 有益社会

错误点:说服力不够,空泛。入狱刑罚也会让人反省,反省了又如何有益社会?

中心句练习

中心句 1: 潜在罪犯和惯犯都会受到影响
解决办法-惩罚:刑罚有震慑作用 减少犯罪

中心句 2: 培训罪犯
解决办法-社区服务:社区服务 减少再次犯罪

中心句 3: 罪犯获得个人技能和工作能力
解决办法-教育:教育和技能培训 减少再次犯罪
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:刑罚有震慑作用,减少犯罪

解释:刑罚意味着失去自由,这是理性的人所不能接受的后果。

解释:这同时会影响他们以后的人生

举例:比如未来就业、婚姻等。

拓展结果:他们因此不会犯罪,因为担心受罚。

主体段 2

中心句:社区服务,减少再次犯罪

解释:社区服务可以让一些人犯法的人受到劳动的训练

举例:特别是犯轻微罪行的人

拓展结果:在劳动教育后能够成为守法公民

对比:如果他们入狱,长期离开社会,那么出狱后可能再犯罪

主体段 3

中心句:教育和技能培训,减少再次犯罪

解释:青少年罪犯或者是初犯因为缺乏社会经验或社会地位低而违犯法律

拓展结果:如果他们可以找到工作,或者知道法律责任,他们就不会犯罪

对比:监狱将违法者和社会隔离,阻碍了违法者获得工作技能,重回社会。
中心句及拓展句练习

二、论述类

改错练习

3. Some people think reading newspapers is the best way to learn about news, while others
think a more effective way is through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
信息经过审核审批
中心句:报纸是国家发行的 肯定是有效信息

错误点:说服力不够。国家发行也未必完全准确

有很多传播方式
中心句:互联网 了解更全面

错误点:角度过窄。互联网只是其它媒体的一个例子,不能作为总的观点

节约纸张
中心句:其它媒体方式更有效 减少浪费

错误点:跑题。题目关注的是获取信息的有效方式

中心句练习

中心句 1:
看到专业新闻人员的新闻报道
安全需求:阅读报纸 信息可靠

中心句 2:
有照片、声音、视频
安全需求:其它媒体 更加可信

中心句 3: 信息渠道丰富
安全需求:使用其它媒体 对新闻事件的了解更加深入
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:阅读报纸,信息可靠

背景:报社从业者是专业人员。

解释 1:新闻行业有自己的行业规范

解释 2:记者接受培训,遵守新闻发布流程

举例:采访不同的人,审核字数

对比:社交媒体普通人随意发布

主体段 2

中心句:其它媒体,更加可信

背景:新闻文字居多,容易扭曲事实

解释:视频和声音难以伪造

举例:比如官方新闻节目

拓展结果:传递的信息能更让人信服

主体段 3

中心句:使用其它媒体,对新闻事件的了解更加深入

解释 1:请一些人做访谈,及时对事情有后续报道

举例:比如可以通过电台或者网络

解释 2:社交媒体可以讨论,网民不断发帖提供信息

对比:报纸新闻一般是编辑和记者决定,见报后报道比较少
中心句及拓展句练习

改错练习

4. Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings
many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss on both
sides and give your opinion.

外国公司增加
中心句:商业往来 本地公司倒闭

错误点:跑题。题目侧重身份、文化方面的内容,不能说经济方面。
各国人民都可以在外资或合资企业里工作
中心句:发展商业文化交流 提高就业水平

错误点:跑题。和文化关联不大。

中心句练习
中心句 1:
认同相互间的文化传统
社会需求:商业文化往来增加 多方面合作

中心句 2:
模仿富裕国家的传统
文化:商业文化往来增加 影响国家本身的特点

中心句 3: 人们对自己的文化和传统引以为豪
文化:商业文化往来增加 不断去保护自己的文化
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:商业文化往来增加,多方面合作

解释 1:开商业会议,去海外留学旅游,一起交流工作

举例:做事方式、生活习惯、价值观等

解释 2:说话和行为比较尊重人,才可以建立好的合作关系

拓展结果:捕捉商机,解决各种问题

主体段 2

中心句:商业文化往来增加,影响国家本身的特点

解释 1:羡慕外国的生活习惯和传统

举例:比如从很多外来的电影和书籍中得知信息

解释 2:跨国企业有自己的文化和工作习惯,影响当地人

拓展结果:自己的文化和习惯弱化

主体段 3

中心句:商业文化来问增加,不断去保护自己的文化

背景:国家与国家之间文化不同,人们对其他文化很感兴趣

解释:很多人会看到外国人对自己国家的文化比较重视

举例:比如在亚洲国家,西方人会过来吃当地的美食,看当地文艺表演,买纪念品,看历史建筑等

拓展结果:人们付出努力去保护自己的文化和传统,增强身份认同
中心句及拓展句练习

三、优缺点类-positive/negative

改错练习

5. Organized tours to remote places and communities are becoming more and more popular. Is it a
positive or negative development for local people and the environment ?

城市人口增多
中心句:组织郊外旅游 居民在城市可获得的公共资源少

错误点:逻辑不够。没有必然的因果关系。
带去新事物新思想
中心句:去偏远地方旅行 当地人被影响,选择进城拓宽眼界

错误点:空泛。开拓眼界具体好处是什么呢?
当地景点拥挤
中心句:组团旅游 当地人不能去景点放松

错误点:说服力不够。当地人不是只能去景点放松。

中心句练习

中心句 1:
给当地人带来收入
经济:去遥远地方旅游 有助于当地经济发展

中心句 2:
提高当地人的意识
文化:去遥远的地方旅游 有助于文化和环境保护

中心句 3:
破坏环境
环境:去遥远的地方旅游 影响当地生态
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:去遥远地方旅游,有助于当地经济发展

背景:这些地方可能是经济死水,当地人从事农业,生活在贫困线以下

解释 1:游客来这里会进行消费

举例:如当地的食物、住宿服务和手工艺品

拓展结果:居民生活水平受益,有可能放弃破坏环境的传统生计。

主体段 2

中心句:去遥远的地方旅游,有助于文化和环境保护

背景:与外界隔绝,当地人意识不到环境和文化的珍贵

举例 1:他们有时不顾一切开发资源

举例 2:年轻人没有意识到他们祖先发展的手艺、工艺、习俗的经济价值,当地传统消失

拓展结果:如果他们想让自己的孩子过上舒适生活,就应该保护他们从前辈那里继承的东西

主体段 3

中心句:去遥远的地方旅游,影响当地生态

背景:一些社区可能会支持激进的发展计划,实现旅游收入最大化,但忽略长期影响

举例:兴建娱乐设施、酒店以配合各种旅游活动的需要

拓展结果:如果生态系统破坏,游客转移注意力到其它目的地,当地人最终会受到影响。
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改错练习

6. People today can shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet instead of face to face
communication. Is it a positive or negative development ?

人们消费更方便
中心句:在网上购物 促进经济增长

错误点:角度过窄。不能只写 shopping
选择更多
中心句:在网上购物 更容易买到合适的商品

错误点:角度过窄。不能只写 shopping

中心句:电脑购物、工作与交流 损伤视力

错误点:说服力不够。交流和用电脑不同,打游戏也伤眼睛,但不代表在交流

和朋友随时保持联系
中心句:网络交流 关系亲密

错误点:跑题。题目说的是 shop 和 work

中心句练习
中心句 1:
增加效率
经济:使用网络(而不是面对面)去交流和做其它事情 收入更高

中心句 2:
减少交通运输的需求
环境:使用网络(而不是面对面)去交流和做其它事情 减少污染

中心句 3: 人和人联系减少
社会需求:使用网络(而不是面对面)去交流和做其它事情 人觉得疏远,不再团结
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:使用网络(而不是面对面)去交流和做其它事情,收入更高

背景:在这个竞争激烈的世界里,效率很重要

解释 1:在网上与客户和供应商交谈,有效开展业务

解释 2:在电子商务网站下订单,让产品送货上门,缩短时间

拓展结果:生产力可以使他们领先对手,并迅速满足客户需求

主体段 2

中心句:使用网络(而不是面对面)去交流和做其它事情,减少污染

背景:在线交流工具的发展,如视频聊天,可以使人们实时交谈,而不经历任何延迟

解释 1:他们不需要亲自拜访客户,也不需要在实体店购买想要得东西

解释 2:越来越多的人可以远程工作或在舒适的家里购物

拓展结果:车辆废气排放减少,可以减轻或预防相关环境问题

主体段 3

中心句:使用网络(而不是面对面)去交流和做其它事情,人觉得疏远,不再团结

背景:有些人变得越来越不爱交际

解释 1:他们可能觉得没有必要和同事或者商业伙伴交往,也没有必要与街角便利店服务员交流

解释 2:他们甚至错过了与家人一起购物的机会

拓展结构:科技可能把人隔离开来,并在他们之间建立一种孤独感
中心句及拓展句练习

改错练习

7. Many parents in these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you
think advantages of the development outweigh its disadvantages?

能规避孩子留在家中成为问题儿童的风险
中心句:在国外工作的父母带着家人一起去国外生活 有利于提高社会稳定性

错误点:跳跃。为什么问题儿童导致社会不稳定?是哪个社会?

接触先进技术和观念
中心句:父母带着家人,工作在国外 提高自身水平,职业前景好

错误点:跑题。重点不是父母工作出国工作的好处
家庭成员在当地生活
中心句:父母带家庭在其他国家工作 带动经济发展

错误点:跑题。重点不是去国外工作的经济的影响
缓解本国的教育压力
中心句:父母带孩子去国外 社会稳定

错误点:说服力不够。并不是全国人民携家眷出国工作

中心句练习
中心句 1: 在小孩成长中扮演重要角色
社会需求:带小孩出国 确保小孩的健康成长

中心句 2:
生活愉悦
社会需求:带小孩出国 不想家,工作专心

中心句 3:
家人适应不了国外环境
社会需求:带家人出国 不开心
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:带小孩出国,确保小孩的健康成长

背景:小孩没有知识和经验、技能,需要大人的照顾和指导

解释:父母每天和孩子在一起,能够提供关心呵护

举例:情感、营养、知识的需求

拓展结果:长大后,人格更健全,生活更幸福

主体段 2

中心句:带小孩出国,不想家,工作专心

背景:父母觉得自己有责任照顾孩子

解释:不用担心孩子的安全

解释:生活更有方向感,工作更有动力

举例:看孩子做作业,和他们一起玩,吃饭

拓展结果:工作取得更好成绩,享受更好生活

主体段 3

中心句:带家人出国,不开心

背景:语言差异,文化差异,习惯不同

解释:孩子觉得压抑与孤独

举例:很难和同学交流,遭遇霸凌,成绩不好

拓展结果:抑郁症,父母自身工作也受影响
中心句及拓展句练习

四、两个问题类

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8. Many young people change their jobs or careers every few years. What are the reasons for this? Do
the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

辞职不需要担心生计
中心句:年轻人扶养父母压力小 可以没有后顾之忧换工作

错误点::逻辑不通。没有压力就换工作,不合理
人们因为各种各样的原因失业
中心句:商业社会变幻莫测 频繁换工作

错误点:跑题。失业和主动换工作不同

工作久了会枯燥
中心句:年轻人喜欢新鲜感 频繁换工作

错误点:说服力不够。以前的年轻人为什么不换工作呢?
需要离家近
中心句:工作离家远 频繁换工作

错误点:说服力不够。因为工作地点的问题,不需要频繁换工作

中心句练习
中心句 1: 工作中不断去发现自己的优点和缺点
自我实现:更希望实现自己的才华 换工作

中心句 2:
希望收入高
经济:物质社会 换工作

中心句 3:
很难提高自己的专业才能
自我实现:经常换工作 职业不能发展
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:更希望实现自己的才华,换工作

背景:经济发展,温饱容易满足

解释 1:年轻人会思考对工作的更多要求

解释 2:换工作完成不同任务,熟悉不同行业

举例:一个工程师去咨询公司看是否做管理

主体段 2

中心句:物质社会,换工作

背景:大家追求物质财富,希望早点致富

解释:工作一两年,觉得晋升或加薪难,失去耐心

举例:哪怕是一些做专业工作的人,比如老师公务员,也会嫌收入低

拓展结果:主动寻求更好的工作,直到满意

主体段 3

中心句:经常换工作,职业不能发展

背景:专业才能需要专注,投入时间精力

举例:专业工作

解释:频繁换工作缺少积累

拓展结果:提升的机会没有,收入也很难提高
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改错练习

9. Older people who need employment have to compete with younger people. What problems does this
cause? And what are the solutions?
退休年龄延长,老人继续工作
中心句:科技医疗水平发展,人们寿命延长 老年人和年轻人工作

错误点:跑题。没有问老年人为什么工作
救助经济困难的老年人
中心句:政府要完善养老保险机制 让困难的老人老有所依

错误点:跑题。不需要重点讨论怎么帮助老年人,而是解决和年轻人竞争的问题
老年人缺钱
中心句:生活压力大 不得不参与竞争

错误点:跑题。没有问老年人为什么工作

体力不如年轻人
中心句:老年人和年轻人一起工作 影响工作效率

错误点:跑题。题目中是假设,并没有说已经找到了工作

中心句练习
中心句 1:
有些很难找到好工作
基本需求:老年人年轻人竞争 生活水平受影响

中心句 2: 年轻人很难找到工作
自我实现:老年人年轻人竞争 不能学以致用

中心句 3:
减少竞争
奖励:政府提供资助 各自生活更好
中心句及拓展句练习

拓展句练习

主体段 1

中心句:老年人年轻人竞争,生活水平受影响

解释 1:老年人记忆和学习能力下降,接受新东西比较慢,很难学习新技能

解释 2:体力不是很好,不能加班

解释 3:影响健康

拓展结果:没有积蓄

主体段 2

中心句:老年人年轻人竞争,不能学以致用

背景:人们在工作中会不断积累经验

解释 1:老年人有经验

解释 2:有时候还能接受低一点的收入

对比:年轻人相比之下缺乏经验,对财富期望高,没有竞争力

拓展结果:年轻人没有工作,失去信息,浪费天赋

主体段 3

中心句:政府提供资助,各自生活更好

解释 1:给年轻人一些支持,可以创业或接受教育,不至于和老年人竞争

背景:利用年轻人的创业精神或者是在大学里提高他们的工作能力

解释 2:提高社会福利

举例:政府增加养老金免费医疗

拓展结果:让老年人安心养老,把更多机会给年轻人
中心句判断及拓展
大作文开头段练习

1. As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree
or disagree?

可参考替换词

Making money:make a profit


Social responsibilities:social obligations
题目问法 同不同意类-Agree/disagree
Businesses have always sought to make a profit, but it is becoming increasingly
改写题目
common to hear people talk about the social obligations that companies have.
I completely agree with the idea that businesses should do more for society than simply
我的观点
make money.

2. Older people who need employment have to compete with younger people. What problems does

this cause? And what are the solutions?


可参考替换词

Older people:elderly people

Need employment:seek employment,in need of a job

Compete with:fight for a position,beat young people


题目问法 2 个问题类
Young job-seekers today have to fight for jobs with competitors who are in their fifties
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or even sixties.
There are some problems arising from this trend, and government action is necessary.
我的观点

3. Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology is now replacing their

functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


可参考替换词

Maintaining public libraries:keeping public libraries

A waste of money:a wasteful use of money


Replacing their functions:substitute for...
题目问法 同不同意类-Agree/disagree
The operation of libraries requires substantial investment and many people today tend
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to read books online rather than in libraries.
While the Internet may have become an important source of knowledge, it is still
我的观点
necessary to keep libraries operating.
大作文开头段练习

4. People today can shop,work and communicate with others via the Internet instead of face to face
communications. Is it a positive or negative development?
可参考替换词
Today:in this day and age,in the digital age
Shop,work and communicate with others:carry out numerous tasks,handle the demands of modern life
Via the internet:online,on the web,on the Internet
Face to face communication:face to face meetings,meeting face to face
题目问法 优缺点-Positive/negative
In the digital age,the Internet technology has allowed people to carry out numerous
改写题目
tasks,including shopping,without meeting others face to face.
It is by and large a positive development,despite the potential impact on social
我的观点
connections.

5. Organized tours to remote places and communities are becoming more and more popular. Is it a
positive or negative development for local people and the environment?
可参考替换词
Become more and more popular:there has been a trend
题目问法 优缺点-Positive/negative
There has been a trend towards organizing tours to visit some communities far away
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from urban areas.
I would perceive this as a positive change, as long as local authorities have policies in
我的观点
place to minimize the environmental impact.

6. Many parents in these days work in other countries, taking their families with them. Do you think
advantages of the development outweigh its disadvantages?
可参考替换词
Many:a large number of
Parents:working couples/parents
Take with family:live with their children overseas
题目问法 优缺点-Advantage/disadvantage
改写题目 There are numerous couples who work and live with their children in foreign countries.
I believe that it has advantages, although families may not be able to integrate into the
我的观点
local community.
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7. Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the
use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, has been encouraged. Is this
trend a positive or a negative development?
可参考替换词
Be used in:rely on
Encourage:promote
题目问法 优缺点-Positive/negative
There are many countries which rely on fossil fuels to generate electricity, but other
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countries have promoted the consumption of clean energy sources.
Although there are some obstacles of energy development, I would argue that there are
我的观点
far more benefits of this change.

8. Many young people change their jobs or careers every few years. Do the advantages of this outweigh
the disadvantages?
可参考替换词
Change their jobs:look/apply/search for a new job
题目问法 优缺点-Advantage/disadvantage
Many young people frequently search for a new job either for advancing their career or
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simply for making more money.
This may may bring more opportunities and a higher income to them, although
我的观点
sometimes it prevents them from developing expertise.

9. Some people think reading newspapers is the best way to learn about news, while others think a
more effective way is through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
可参考替换词
Reading newspapers:reading print newspapers, print media
The best way to learn about news:the most important source of news
A more effective way: a better way
题目问法 论述类-Discussion
There are some people who believe that print newspapers are not as good as other
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media as a source of news.
我的观点 I support this view, although newspapers still have their loyal readers.
大作文开头段练习

10. Children today are under increased educational, social and commercial pressures. What are the
causes and solutions?
可参考替换词
Under increased pressure:face mounting pressure
题目问法 2 个问题类-Cause/solution
It is true that children in today's world face mounting pressure, such as the need to achieve
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high grades at school and the urgency to achieve success in their careers.
The changing social value is behind this trend and it is important to help children build
我的观点
the right world view.

11. Many people think cheap air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people freedom
to travel further. However,others think this leads to environmental problems,so air travel should be
more expensive in order to discourage people from travelling by air. Discuss both views and give your
own opinion.
可参考替换词
Cheap air travel:low-cost travel
Travel further:travel across borders
题目问法 论述类-Discussion
改写题目 Low-cost air travel has enabled us to travel across borders more frequently than before.
I think cheap flights can benefit the masses, although we should avoid unnecessary
我的观点
journeys.

12. It is argued that we are living in a throw-away society: people throw away what they use in daily
life, instead of recycling or reusing them. Why has this happened and how to address this issue?
可参考替换词
Throw away what they use:use products only once
Recycling or reusing them:keeping these items for a long time
题目问法 2 个问题类-Cause/solution
People are likely to use products only once instead of keeping these items for a long
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time.
It is important to understand why this throw-away culture has developed and how to
我的观点
reverse this trend.
大作文开头段练习

13. Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture,
while others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
可参考替换词
Government funding:public/government money
Support art and culture:support the art or cultural industry
题目问法 论述类-Discussion
改写题目 Some people do not agree with pouring public money into the art or cultural industry.
In my opinion, it is necessary to keep them well-informed about the benefits of
我的观点
supporting art or cultural activities.

14. More and more young people from wealthy countries spend a short period of time in communities
in poorer countries doing unpaid work (teaching and building houses) Why have they chosen to do
this? Who is likely to benefit from this kind of work?
可参考替换词
Wealthy countries:rich/affluent countries
Spend a short period of time:a short-term programme
Poor countries:impoverished countries
Do unpaid work:work as volunteers
题目问法 2 个问题类
The number of international volunteering programmes has increased significantly
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throughout the world.
The media have a role to play in driving this trend and it is evident that both volunteers
我的观点
and disadvantaged people can benefit from this development.
大作文开头段练习

15. Many countries spend a lot of money preparing competitors to take part in major sports
competitions such as the Olympics, the football world cup etc, but it would be better to spend this
money encouraging children to take up sport from a young age. To what extent do you agree or
disagree?
可参考替换词
Spend a lot of money: support financially,invest heavily in
Competitors:athlete,sports professionals
Sports competitions:sports/international events
Encourage:support,motivate,generate interest in
题目问法 同不同意类-Agree/disagree
Professional sport has been supported financially by the government in many parts of
改写题目 the world, and athletes who have the potential to win medals or championships in large
events are paid handsomely.
This policy can benefit the public to some extent, although governments should also
我的观点
create a helpful environment for children to play sport.

16. Many people are moving from rural areas to big cities. Why has this happened? To what extent do
you think it is a good trend?
可参考替换词
Move from rural areas to big cities:migrate to cities
题目问法 2 个问题类
改写题目 These days many people from rural areas have chosen to migrate to cities,
believing that they are more likely to find employment and enjoy a better quality of life
我的观点
in urban areas, but the movement of population can cause many problems.

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