Project on Topic

Critical Creative Rewriting

Project making:Iliya Cheshmedzhiev

Evaluating : prof. Z Chervenkova
Project date 08.02.2023
Original text:
“The Patient cat
by Laura E Richards
HEN the spotted cat first found the nest, there was
nothing in it, for it was only just finished. So she said, “I will
wait!” for she was a patient cat, and the summer was before
her. She waited a week, and then she climbed up again to
the top of the tree, and peeped into the nest. There lay two
lovely blue eggs, smooth and shining.The spotted cat said,
“Eggs may be good, but young birds are better. I will wait.”
So she waited; and while she was waiting, she caught mice
and rats, and washed herself and slept, and did all that a
spotted cat should do to pass the time away.When another
week had passed, she climbed the tree again and peeped
into the[58] nest. This time there were five eggs. But the
spotted cat said again, “Eggs may be good, but young birds
are better. I will wait a little longer!”So she waited a little
longer and then went up again to look.

In there were five tiny birds, with big eyes and long necks,
and yellow beaks wide open. Then the spotted cat sat down
on the branch, and licked her nose and purred, for she was
very happy. “It is worth while to be patient!” she said.But
when she looked again at the young birds, to see which one
she should take first, she saw that they were very thin,—oh,
very, very thin they were! The spotted cat had never seen
anything so thin in her life.“Now,” she said to herself, if I
were to wait only a few days longer, they would grow fat.
Thin birds may be good, but fat birds are much better. I will
wait!”So she waited; and she watched the father-bird
bringing worms all day long to the nest, and said, “Aha! they
must be fattening fast! they will soon be as fat as I wish
them to be. Aha! what a good thing it is to be patient. At last,
one day she thought, “Surely, now they must be fat enough! I
will not wait another day. Aha! how good they will be!”So she
climbed up the tree, licking her chops all the way and
thinking of the fat young birds. And when she reached the
top and looked intonest, it was empty!! Then the spotted cat
sat down on the branch and spoke thus, “Well, of all the
horrid, mean, ungrateful creatures I ever saw, those birds
are the horridest, and the meanest, and the most ungrateful!
Mi-a-u-ow

Critical creative rewriting:

It was a lovely summer and everything was bright.There was
an interesting atmosphere near GreenDak town.A small town
with not many people but with good view and great nature
and atmosphere. There was one big tree and under that tree
a lovely little cat. She was looking sweet AND HUNGRY. She
was waiting for something. She was a patient cat and she
was waiting for her food.

As she was waiting a bird came to the tree and lay 3 eggs.
The cat said, “Eggs may be good, but young birds are better.
The cat was very patient , but also really hungry.She decide
to climb the tree and peep into the nest.She saw 4 eggs and
decided to wait and said: “Eggs may be good, but young
birds are better. I will wait a little longer!”So she waited two
weeks more and then again went up again to look for the
easy meal which she wanted to have .Suddenly a strange
sound has came from the tree.When the cat went to the tree
again she saw something curiosly good on the same tree.
In there were five tiny birds, with big eyes and long necks,
and yellow beaks wide open. They were so tiny that the cat
spotted them hard ,but was very happy at that time.

Then the spotted cat sat down on the branch, and licked her
nose and purred, for she was very happy.

“It is worth while to be patient!” she said.But when she

looked again at the young birds, to see which one she should
take first, she saw that they were very thin,—oh, very, very
thin they were! “I will wait until they become fatter ,birds are
always better if grow fatter” I will wait!”

The mother of the birds from other side spoted the cat
waiting for something and said “This cat must be waiting for
my babies to grow”.With this clever thinking The Birds
mother decided to make sure their babies not falling to the
paws of the cat this easy.Then the clever mother decided to
really make the birds grow and to learn them to fly.She start
bringing loads of worms to feed the birds. Another week
rolled and the little birds already knew how to fly.

The cat again waited; and she watched the mother-bird

bringing worms all day long to the nest, and said, “Aha! they
must be fattening fast! they will soon be as fat as I wish
them to be. Aha! what a good thing it is to be patient.

“Now is the time to trick this cat” The bird mother said to his
babies and flew with them to make another nest far away
from that sparkling litlle cat.

At last, one day the cat thought, “Surely, now they must be
fat enough! I will not wait another day. Aha! how good they
will be!”So she climbed up the tree, licking her chops all the
way and thinking of the fat young birds. And when she
reached the top and looked intonest, it was empty!! Then the
spotted cat sat down on the branch and spoke thus, “Well, of
all the horrid, mean, ungrateful creatures I ever saw, those
birds are the horridest, and the meanest, and the most
ungrateful! The cat sounds “Meaaaoowwwww

Critical commentary:
Changing structure and point of the author
The problems that I encountered with this literary work were mostly to
change the perspective of the author.The main focus was on this
“sweet cat and the tree”. In the middle of the text I really wanted to
change the point of view of the author and even added another
segment like The Bird Mother , wanted to see how she look at the cat.
I really count on my imagination adding this literary hero. Showing
the love of a mother trying to safe his little babies , was the main focus
. So we distinguished two main topics : “The true mothers love for
their babies” , “The avaricious cat which waits too long for food”.
Gaps and silence
I tried to add more to the atmosphere and replace some of the words.
If we have that look it is easy to just make statement about the subject
in the text. For that I distinguished the text into different parts and
then decided in which I have to add more information.
Decentering and Recentering
The first step was to find the centre of the text and then finding a way
to change the center from The Cat to The Birds view of the things.
The Birds Mother was not shown in the text so I added this element in
the whole text and also made INTERNAL and EXTERNAL
decentering/recentering in the literature.