Student Name: Michael

Adding Suspense

DIRECTIONS: Add a healthy dose of suspense to the otherwise suspense-less scene on the second
page of this worksheet. Consider using a tried and true technique for heightening the
excitement, such as foreshadowing or plot complications that delay the scene’s climax and
resolution. Use the steps below to create materials for your job at American Suspense Works.

Suggested Project Steps

1 Analyze the lack of suspense in a scene submitted by a world-famous author.
2 Revise the scene to add suspense, using tried and true techniques.
3 Create a visual representation that shows the development of suspense in the scene.

Step 1: Analyze the lack of suspense in this scene submitted by a world-famous author. In the
space below, describe the narrative structure of the text selection. Explain why it lacks suspense.

Scene:
For the very first time, Annalise Famkavich was home alone for the entire night. Her parents
were out at a church event. Her sister, Petra, was spending the night at a friend's. Her brother,
Andrus, lived on campus at the state university, which was a two hour drive away.

The Famkavich home was a huge, hulking structure that was set back from the sidewalk on a
large, wooded lot. The house was bordered on the south by a forest preserve, and on the east
and west by the pastures of neighboring farms. Directly across the street from the house, to the
north, was an abandoned church, surrounded by a large, rambling cemetery.

Getting through the night was quite an experience for Annalise. The next morning, she told her
parents everything that had happened. They were alarmed and not sure whether to believe
Annalise's version of events, but they assured her that they would never leave her at home alone
again.

Your Analysis:
The Famkavich home was a huge, hulking structure that was set back from the sidewalk
on a large, wooded lot. The house was bordered on the south by a forest preserve, and
on the east and west by the pastures of neighboring farms. In my opnion, it's sentence
have lack of suspense because it's just introduce the Annalise's house .
 Got Suspense?

Step 2: Revise the scene to add suspense, using tried and true techniques. Add some
foreshadowing and plot complications. Try to increase the reader’s excitement and anticipation
with your revision. (Start by copying and pasting the original scene on the previous page. Then
add to it, delete or replace text, and cut and paste to rearrange details.)
For the very first time, Annalise Famkavich was home alone for the entire night. Her
parents were out at a church event. Her sister, Petra, was spending the night at a
friend's. Her brother, Andrus, lived on campus at the state university, which was a two
hour drive away. The main character, Annalise now that I tell you it's looking the door.
The winds blow strong, strong, and stronger and Bang! Evert leaf throw down. Her eyes
is more beautiful ever so that can make the adventure with her home start now. The
Famkavich home was a huge, hulking structure that was set back from the sidewalk on
a large, wooded lot. The house was bordered on the south by a forest preserve, and on
the east and west by the pastures of neighboring farms. But now she walkind down
slowy, rate heart increase, everything heavy. And she comes with TV, it's tool it's help
her to forget everything. She agree and sit down on TV and turn on, but heard the
sound: Grrr... She's fear but carefully she listening again. Oh! It's just a black cat to take
mouse. She trying to mood and see what happend today on Tv. Everything turn off, and
house throw her out the street. She shock, and looking around and asked for herself:
What happened? It's dream! Yeah, just dream. She trying to get up but she can't. She
punch herself to wake up but can't be. She nervousness and her mood is down. And
she , she surprise. Directly across the street from the house, to the north, was an
abandoned church, surrounded by a large, rambling cemetery. She don't want go go
this church, but have power that want she to come. She start to walking in this church,
she go in and look the church now is very beautiful but no one people in there, she
thought. She going around the church and try touch a book in there. The space
changing. And she going with the dark space with the black cat take mouse she look
before. Black cat look her, only look her, look like the statue. She try to walk, but black
cat see her when her walk. And she saw with big black cat face to nearly and eat her .
Arghhhhhhhhhhh! She roared. But now, she back with her home. No cat, and no church
in there. She decrease stress but in her dream, she saw the old church so she try to
find information church named Kansta. She research and she shocked with information.
That old church is destroy causes fire in 18th century. But now is 20th century. And ave
shocked with she see this website have black cat in image. The heart run quickly and
door opened, with the heard noise: Hi, honey. I come back. When door opened, she
trying to hidden but when her mom called her, he trying to run with her mom and cried
and she told all of position with her parents. Getting through the night was quite an
experience for Annalise. Their parents its caculated that their back home next morning
but they feel everthing it's strange and go home. When her parents hear it, they fear
and no never put her again. But black cat to look her and parents. She feeling and look
this way she feels black cat but nothing. She promise, that she try to improve herself
that can help her never met black cat again.
 Got Suspense?

Step 3: Create a visual representation that shows the development of suspense in the scene. You
can draw a diagram below, or you can use other digital tools or programs to create your visual
representation.