3.

Environment: Some people think that individual efforts are essential to protect
the environment, while others believe that only governments and large
companies can make a difference.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing dispute over the responsibility of protecting the environment. While some
advocate for the role of the governments and large firms, others believe that individuals also play
a crucial role in conservating the environment. In my opinion, the individual efforts in
accompany with the authorities and the support of local companies would effectively contribute
to the sustainability of the environment.

Proponents of individuals endeavors contend the help from the local residents have cumulative
effects on environment conservation. Inhabitants could assist the governments in innumerable
ways such as reducing the greenhouse gases by utilizing public transport instead of private motor
vehicles. In addition, voluntary activities such as cleaning trash, or planting trees significantly
prevent the risk of climate change and health issues caused by pollution. Thus, the role of
individuals is an important factor contribute to the success of environment conservation.

On the other hand, some believe that the governments' policies and the assistance of large firms
are paramount as their influences on the society. For instance, by enhancing the facilities of
public transport such as shuttles or taxies and providing eco-friendly vehicles such as electric
bikes, authorities could curtail polluted gases emission from vehicles and also avoid traffic
congestion. Additionally, the financial support from local firms can be utilized for conducting
green campaigns, for example, sanitizing the cities or researching environmental-friendly
materials, to enhance the environment quality.

The writer's opinion is that protecting the environments is not the duty of an individual or a
specific group, but it is a global problem which can only be effectively solved by the mutual
effort of the society. Thus, the combination of governments strategies and the assistance of local
firms as well as the individual efforts from the residents would be more effective in solving the
problem. While the governments have the role of rolling out strategic programs to tackle with the
environment issues, the residents could make an effort by engaging in these programs while the
local companies could support the campaigns by their financial budget as well as their laboring
sources.

To conclude, sustaining the environment quality is a perplexing problem. Therefore, both

individuals endeavors and the interferences of the governments and the major firms are vital for
solving this problem.
4. Parenting: Some people believe that strict parenting results in better-behaved
children, while others think that a more relaxed and supportive approach is more
effective. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Finding appropriate teaching methods for the children has always been an ongoing discussion.
While some suggest that rigorous parenting would be beneficial for the children, other advocate
for a method which offers support and relaxation. In my opinion, despite the merits of both
views, I contend that a flexible approach with reward as well as punishment would be more
effective.

On the one hand, strict parenting strategies are advantageous for children as these strategies
instill the discipline and commitment which are crucial for academic study and pursuing future
careers. Additionally, the rigors in parenting methods enhance the study quality by enforcing
children to complete school tasks before engaging in recreational activities. Take Chinese
parenting methods, which foster a sense of self-discipline and determination, as an example,
students in this country could thrive in many professional sectors such as scientific research or
music career.

On the other hand, advocates for a flexible teaching method contend that the mutual
understanding and collective support between parents and their offspring are essential. This
teaching approach helps parents to forge strong relationships with their children throughout the
process of give and take. Also, children who engage in this educating method are given an
abundance of motivations which facilitate the learning process. For instance, children are
fostered to success in academic settings in order to fulfil their parents’ attempts.

The writer of this essay believes that a systematic method with proper reward and strict
punishment would offer innumerable advantages for children as well as parents. A merely strict
parenting method could shape children's personality; however, it poses a constant pressure on the
children which may cause potential health risks. Meanwhile, an approach with sole relaxation
and parental support may not build an independent personality as the children may rely on their
parents' efforts. Thus, it is crucial to have a rewarding and punishing method to nurture a child.

To conclude, tact and flexibility are indispensable in nurturing children. Therefore, it is

necessary to strike a balance between a strict approach and a supportive one in order to optimize
their benefits.

8. Animal Rights: Some people argue that animals should be treated with the
same respect as humans, while others believe they can be used for human
benefit, such as in scientific research.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Whether to deal with animals the same respect as humans or to regard them as a useful source in
life have always been an ongoing dispute. From my perspective, I contend that animals should
not be regarded as the sources which would bring benefits for humans, but they should be treated
as a companion in human life.

Proponents of paying respects to animal the same as to humans argue that animals play a vital
role in human life. With regards to the sentimental aspects, animals foster a sense of
companionship and act as emotional support, which help individuals to overcome work pressure.
Also, animals offer numerous benefits in many sectors such as investigating criminals or
detecting illegal weapons storage, thereby addressing the proliferation of crime rate and
facilitating the police jobs. Thus, animals are worth being treated with the same respect as
humans.

On the other hand, others advocate for the use of animals could be beneficial for human in
diverse sectors, especially in scientific experiments. A reason which upholds this belief is that
animals could be used as alternatives for dangerous experiments such as vaccinate trial, which
could reduce the potential risks of the process of trial and error on human. Also, research in
animals could be used for medical sector by helping the scientists to formulate vaccines, thereby
discovering effective treatment for contagious diseases. Therefore, animals should be regarded as
an integral instrument in human life.

In my opinion, it is crucial to treat animals fairly the same as humans, not just merely a source of
advantages. That is to say, interacting with pets, such as dogs, can creates a sense of belonging
and alleviates human stress, which reduces mental health issues. For instance, psychological
studies reveal that constantly interacting with cats promotes a positive energy which can help
prisoners to rehabilitate. Not only animals have cumulative effects on the mental life, but species
such as bees are crucial for agriculture industry due to their role in cultivating crops. Thus,
animals should be regarded as an important companion rather than a tool for experiments.

To conclude, animals play an indispensable role in many parts of human life. Therefore, they
deserve the same respects as humans instead of being solely treated as a means to an end.
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Introduction
Whether to deal with animals the same respect as humans or to regard them as a
useful source in life have always been an ongoing dispute. From my perspective, I
contend that animals should not be regarded as the sources which would bring benefits
for humans, but they should be treated as a companion in human life.

Feedback
  Task Response/Task Achievement: The introduction does not clearly state the writer's
position. It only mentions that animals should be treated as companions, but it does not
explicitly state whether the writer agrees or disagrees with the prompt's statement. The
introduction also lacks a clear thesis statement that summarizes the main arguments to be
discussed.
 Coherence & Cohesion: The introduction lacks a strong connection to the prompt. It does
not directly address the two opposing views presented in the prompt. Instead, it focuses on
the writer's personal opinion without providing any context or background information.
 Grammatical Range & Accuracy: The sentence "Whether to deal with animals the same
respect as humans or to regard them as a useful source in life have always been an ongoing
dispute" contains a grammatical error. "Have" should be replaced with "has" because the
subject "dispute" is singular.
 Lexical Resource: The vocabulary is adequate, but the sentence structure is a bit awkward.
The phrase "deal with animals the same respect as humans" is not idiomatic. The word
"contend" is used unnecessarily and can be replaced with a simpler word like "believe."

Rewrite suggestion

The debate regarding the treatment of animals is ongoing, with some advocating for
equal respect for animals and others believing they can be used for human benefit.
While I acknowledge the potential benefits of using animals in certain areas, I firmly
believe that animals deserve to be treated with the same respect as humans,
recognizing their intrinsic value and the vital role they play in our lives.

Body Paragraph 1
Proponents of paying respects to animal the same as to humans argue that animals
play a vital role in human life. With regards to the sentimental aspects, animals foster a
sense of companionship and act as emotional support, which help individuals to
overcome work pressure. Also, animals offer numerous benefits in many sectors such
as investigating criminals or detecting illegal weapons storage, thereby addressing the
proliferation of crime rate and facilitating the police jobs. Thus, animals are worth being
treated with the same respect as humans.

Feedback

 Task Response/Task Achievement: The paragraph effectively presents the first view of the
prompt, arguing for equal respect for animals. It provides clear and relevant examples, such
as emotional support and assistance in crime prevention. However, the paragraph lacks a
strong concluding sentence that summarizes the main point.
 Coherence & Cohesion: The paragraph is well-organized and logically structured. The use
of transition words like "with regards to" and "also" helps to connect the ideas smoothly.
However, the paragraph could benefit from a more direct connection to the prompt's
statement about equal respect for animals.
 Grammatical Range & Accuracy: The sentence "Proponents of paying respects to animal
the same as to humans argue that animals play a vital role in human life" contains a
grammatical error. "Animal" should be "animals" because it is plural. The phrase "paying
respects to animal" is not idiomatic.
  Lexical Resource: The vocabulary is adequate, but the sentence structure is a bit complex
and could be simplified. The phrase "with regards to the sentimental aspects" is a bit formal
and could be replaced with a simpler phrase like "emotionally."

Rewrite suggestion

Those who advocate for treating animals with the same respect as humans argue that
animals play a crucial role in our lives. They provide companionship and emotional
support, helping us cope with stress and loneliness. Furthermore, animals contribute to
various sectors, such as law enforcement, where they assist in detecting criminals and
illegal substances. These contributions demonstrate the significant value of animals and
highlight their deservingness of respect.

Body Paragraph 2
On the other hand, others advocate for the use of animals could be beneficial for
human in diverse sectors, especially in scientific experiments. A reason which upholds
this belief is that animals could be used as alternatives for dangerous experiments such
as vaccinate trial, which could reduce the potential risks of the process of trial and error
on human. Also, research in animals could be used for medical sector by helping the
scientists to formulate vaccines, thereby discovering effective treatment for contagious
diseases. Therefore, animals should be regarded as an integral instrument in human
life.

Feedback

 Task Response/Task Achievement: The paragraph effectively presents the second view of
the prompt, arguing for the use of animals in scientific research. It provides strong reasons,
such as reducing risks in experiments and discovering new treatments. However, the
paragraph lacks a clear acknowledgment of the ethical concerns surrounding animal testing.
 Coherence & Cohesion: The paragraph is well-organized and logically structured. The use
of transition words like "on the other hand" and "also" helps to connect the ideas smoothly.
However, the paragraph could benefit from a stronger concluding sentence that summarizes
the main point and connects it back to the prompt's statement about using animals for
human benefit.
 Grammatical Range & Accuracy: The sentence "Others advocate for the use of animals
could be beneficial for human in diverse sectors" contains a grammatical error. "Human"
should be "humans" because it is plural. The phrase "advocate for the use of animals" is a bit
formal and could be replaced with a simpler phrase like "support using animals."
 Lexical Resource: The vocabulary is adequate, but the sentence structure is a bit complex
and could be simplified. The phrase "a reason which upholds this belief" is a bit formal and
could be replaced with a simpler phrase like "one reason is." The word "vaccinate" should be
"vaccination."

Rewrite suggestion

Conversely, some argue that using animals in scientific research can benefit humanity.
They suggest that animals can serve as substitutes for dangerous experiments, such as
vaccine trials, mitigating the risks to humans. Additionally, animal research has the
potential to lead to significant medical breakthroughs, such as the development of
vaccines and treatments for infectious diseases. While acknowledging the potential
benefits, it's crucial to consider the ethical implications of animal testing and ensure that
it is conducted humanely and responsibly.

Conclusion
In my opinion, it is crucial to treat animals fairly the same as humans, not just merely a
source of advantages. That is to say, interacting with pets, such as dogs, can creates a
sense of belonging and alleviates human stress, which reduces mental health issues.
For instance, psychological studies reveal that constantly interacting with cats promotes
a positive energy which can help prisoners to rehabilitate. Not only animals have
cumulative effects on the mental life, but species such as bees are crucial for
agriculture industry due to their role in cultivating crops. Thus, animals should be
regarded as an important companion rather than a tool for experiments. To conclude,
animals play an indispensable role in many parts of human life. Therefore, they deserve
the same respects as humans instead of being solely treated as a means to an end.

Feedback

 Task Response/Task Achievement: The conclusion restates the writer's opinion but does
not provide a clear summary of the main arguments presented in the body paragraphs. It
also lacks a strong concluding sentence that effectively summarizes the overall message of
the essay.
 Coherence & Cohesion: The conclusion is not well-connected to the body paragraphs. It
does not effectively summarize the main points discussed in the essay. The transition word
"thus" is not appropriate in the context of the sentence.
 Grammatical Range & Accuracy: The sentence "That is to say, interacting with pets, such
as dogs, can creates a sense of belonging and alleviates human stress, which reduces
mental health issues" contains a grammatical error. "Creates" should be "create" because
the subject "interacting" is plural.
 Lexical Resource: The vocabulary is adequate, but the sentence structure is a bit complex
and could be simplified. The phrase "not just merely a source of advantages" is a bit
redundant. The word "cumulative" is not appropriate in the context of the sentence.

Rewrite suggestion

In conclusion, while acknowledging the potential benefits of using animals in scientific

research, I firmly believe that animals deserve to be treated with the same respect as
humans. They provide invaluable companionship, emotional support, and contributions
to various sectors, highlighting their intrinsic worth. Therefore, we must prioritize their
well-being and recognize their rightful place as companions rather than mere tools for
human benefit.

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Task Type: Discussion (Discuss Both Views)
Key Tips

 Present both sides of the argument fairly and objectively.

 Use clear and concise language to explain each view.
 Provide strong evidence and examples to support your arguments.

Suggested Structure
 Introduction: Briefly introduce the topic and state that there are two opposing views.
o Topic Sentence: The debate regarding the treatment of animals is ongoing, with
some advocating for equal respect for animals and others believing they can be used
for human benefit.
 Body Paragraph 1: Present the first view, arguing for equal respect for animals.
o Topic Sentence: Proponents of treating animals with the same respect as humans
emphasize the vital role animals play in our lives.
 Body Paragraph 2: Present the second view, arguing for the use of animals in scientific
research.
o Topic Sentence: Conversely, some argue that using animals in scientific research
can benefit humanity.
 Conclusion: Summarize the main points of the essay and restate your opinion.
o Topic Sentence: In conclusion, while acknowledging the potential benefits of using
animals in scientific research, I firmly believe that animals deserve to be treated with
the same respect as humans.