Full-Length Mock Test-2 Writing Task Feedback
Report Writing Question:
The table below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart
shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
Your Answer:
The graphs illustrates the amount of carbon dioxide emission from different forms of transports in European
union and its expenditure on the different modes of transportation. Overall, the highest amount of CO2 per
passenger is emited from air transports and the highest amount of funds have been spent on the road
transportation systems.
As seen in the bar graph, the second highest CO2 release is from the pessanger cars which is near around 130
grams per pessanger. Maritimes and Rail are reported to have same amount of CO2 emission , 50 gms for a
kilometer traveled by an individual. While, the lowest CO2 release have been seen from the coaches.
According to the pie-chart, the second highest funds are being spen on Railways and than on public
transport. Despite emitting the highest amount of CO2 , the air transport receives only 1% of the total
costs. Other modes of travelling like intermodal, inland waterway, ports, airways and other receives either 1
or 2 percentage of overall budget of European Union.
Feedback (in the order of observations):
1. The structure of the report could be in 4 paragraphs: Introduction, Graph-1, Graph-2, and Overview.
2. Overview with a clear linker is attempted but in the same paragraph as introduction. Separate them.
3. Very good use of appropriate linkers to define theme of each paragraph.
4. Paraphrasing of the given problem statement done accurately to show good range of lexical resource.
5. Correct version: the graphs illustrate or the graph illustrates (subject-verb agreement)
6. Different forms of transport (rather than transports – usually the plurality goes before of and not after)
7. Correct abbreviation for grams would be: g/gm (we do not pluralize units. So, avoid writing gms, kgs etc.)
8. ‘CO2 release’ is a non-countable noun phrase so use ‘has been’ for subject-verb agreement.
9. Another common error is using homophones interchangeably. Misuse of ‘than’ at place of ‘then’ here.
10. List of incorrect spellings used or correct spellings used at incorrect places:
(emited, pessanger(2), gms, spen, than)
Full-Length Mock Test-2 Writing Task Feedback
Essay Writing Question:
Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or
negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Your Answer:
Online education is the on-going tren now a days. Many universities have implemented this trend of offering
online courses so that students can learn from their respective
homes. while there are also some negative researcs being carried on online courses.
Talking about the drawbacks of the universities offering online education, students may lose
the oppurtunity to coonect with new friends and socialize with them which may results
into an introvert behaviour of a student. There is also a lack of communication between students and mentors,
compared to when they study in a class. There are chances of students not getting proper space at home
while studing online or loss of internet connection. Some of them are just too lazy to gain knowledge by
themselves at home. It may also affect on one's eysight by constantly educating themselves from smartphones
or laptop.
Despite the negatives, I personally belive that online courses are more benificial in so many ways such as for
the students who are planning thei masters or post-graduate degree and are also working might not have time
to attend the classes, and so the best solution for them is to opt for an university providing online courses. The
key benifit of online courses is that it allows people to study in their flexible way. Futhermore, it also
eliminates the cost of transportation and accomodation. My university was 2 hours from my hometown which
costs 4 hours of total travelling and its high fess of transportation and due to this reasons half the
students accomodated in the university hostels which cost 60k per annum which is too expensive for any
lower to midle class families. All these extra expenditues can be saved by studying online courses. Also there
are few people above the age 30/40 who might feel shy going to class with yonger students but they can opt
for onlines courses and gain education.
To conclude, I believe that online learning are great advantageous in terms of flexibilty of watching lectures on
our time, no additional expenses, saving time and many more which is not possible in offline classes.
Feedback (in the order of observations):
1. The essay is written in 350 words. The wordier you are, the more chances of making errors. (300 Max.)
2. Although it is attempted, a clear Question Reference is missing. A question reference clearly answers the
question/command of the essay in 1 to 2 sentences.
3. An essay introduction has 3 essential components: a.) Topic Introduction – paraphrase of given problem
statement in your words but in academic English [1 to 2 sentences], b.) Question Reference – answering
the question or serving the order in essay rubrics briefly [1 to 2 sentences], c.) Essay Outline – one line
that states what you have written in the upcoming paragraphs [1 sentence only].
4. An essay outline (thesis statement) is missing in introduction.
5. Presented arguments on both the sides (negatives and positives), giving a balanced essay writing style.
6. The 4-paragraph structure of the essay is OK, but a separate paragraph could have been made from
‘Furthermore,’ linker in the second paragraph in order to allow for a third body paragraph [5-paragraph
essay]. Remember the rule that for a 4-paragraph essay Introduction: 40-45words, Body Para-1: 90-95
words, Body Para-2: 90-95 words, Conclusion: 35-40words.[5-paragraph essayBody Paras.:60-65words]
7. List of incorrect spellings used or correct spellings used at incorrect places: (tren, researcs, oppurtunity,
coonect, studing, eysight, belive, benificial, thei, ‘an’ university, benefit, Futhermore, accomodation, ‘this’
reasons, accomodated, midle, expenditues, yonger, onlines, flexibilty)
