Topic: Class: Date:
Revision process Pre-AP English 10 Tuesday Oct. 25
Content Objectives: Language Objectives:
Students will be able to Students will revise sentences in their
incorporate quotations into rough drafts to more seamlessly
their writing. incorporate quotations and in-text
Students will be able to citations into their essays.
identify dead words and Students will identify dead words within
substitute them with more their rough drafts and provide one
precise language. another with feedback on more precise
alternatives.
Key Vocabulary: Materials (including supplementary and
adapted):
Content Vocabulary: PowerPoint presentation detailing
appropriate ways to incorporate
Cross-Curricular Vocabulary: quotations into writing
Revision Examples of dead words and appropriate
In-text citations substitutes to make language more
Direct quotes precise
Higher-Order Questions:
How can eliminating dead words or less precise language help me to better
illustrate my arguments to the reader?
Lesson Sequence Activities
1) Vocabulary chapter 4
warm-up Building Background
2) Students will highlight a
list of dead words in their Explicit Links to Past Learning: In discussing the
writing. Handouts will be importance of incorporating quotations into
provided with a list of writing, I will remind students of their group
these words such as I presentations from a couple of weeks ago in
think, good, bad, etc. which they provided specific evidence to support
their ideas. I will explain that they are now
performing a similar task, but in writing rather
than orally.
Lesson Sequence Student Activities (Check all that apply for
3) Students will pair and activities throughout lesson):
share the number of dead
words they had in their Scaffolding: Teacher Modeling Guided
essays. (Small Group/Partner)
4) I will introduce the concept Independent (I watch and
of dead words to the respond; You do independently)
students and inform them
that in order to strengthen Grouping: Whole Class Small Group
their arguments and Partners Independent
writing, they should
replace uninteresting Language Processes: Reading Writing
words with more precise Listening Speaking
language.
5) I will model some suitable Strategies: Hands-on Meaningful
alternatives to dead words Links to Objectives
on the overhead projector.
6) Students will practice in Review and Assessment (Check all that
pairs with some dull apply):
sentences to incorporate
more precise language. Individual Group Written Oral
7) I will then show students
ways in which they can (Include methods of assessment throughout
incorporate quotations into Lesson Sequence)
their writing so to create
flow and show connections Review Key Vocabulary: How and When?
between their ideas and I will go over the concept of dead words with
this supporting evidence. the students in the warm-up activity before they
8) Students will highlight the find these words in their own writing. I will
two quotations they used explain how they can detract from the full effect
in their essays and of their writing.
reassess whether they are
seamlessly incorporated Review Key Content Concepts: How and When?
into their writing. I will review the concept of revision at the
9) Students will spend the beginning of class following the warm-up
rest of the period working activities. I will tell students that today we will
independently on their be continuing the revision process that we
papers to incorporate more began last class.
precise language and
introductions to their
quotations. Review of all content and language objectives:
How and When?
I will keep my objectives posted on the dry
erase board so that they are visible throughout
the lesson. I will review them with the students
following the vocabulary warm-up in step 1.
