Characters design have full of holes.
These superpower teenagers should have the most complex characters but they are not. Simple, predictably inconsistent characters.
For instance, the girl with superpower changing people mind, she is beautiful and why on earth she is the most loving and caring person in the story. She should be the most spoiled, arrogant, manipulative, toxic, cunning, scary person. Just imagine if a girl is pretty and can manipulate anyone to what/how she wants with a finger click, what kind of person will become. The whole thing just doesn't make sense.
Personas are all over the place, not consistent. It's more the personalities changing from one place to another to suit the story. It should be the other way round that the consistency of surreal, self-centered characters with their own agendas that drive the story.
Should be a power struggle with some twists. Getting to the truth shouldn't be high in agenda. It should be how to cheat, how to steal the vaccines to climb to the top for their own reasons, vengeance, dominate the world, rescue someones, etc.
For instance, the girl with superpower changing people mind, she is beautiful and why on earth she is the most loving and caring person in the story. She should be the most spoiled, arrogant, manipulative, toxic, cunning, scary person. Just imagine if a girl is pretty and can manipulate anyone to what/how she wants with a finger click, what kind of person will become. The whole thing just doesn't make sense.
Personas are all over the place, not consistent. It's more the personalities changing from one place to another to suit the story. It should be the other way round that the consistency of surreal, self-centered characters with their own agendas that drive the story.
Should be a power struggle with some twists. Getting to the truth shouldn't be high in agenda. It should be how to cheat, how to steal the vaccines to climb to the top for their own reasons, vengeance, dominate the world, rescue someones, etc.
- kuan-joe
- Nov 6, 2023