Proposal 1: Improving the High Street
Content: 5/5
The proposal fully addresses the task, providing ideas for improving the high street, such as
adding greenery, pop-up shops, workshops, and food markets. The suggestions are relevant
and well-explained.
Examples like "introducing food markets" and "extending pedestrian zones" are clear and
support the main purpose.
Communicative Achievement: 4/5
The proposal maintains a formal tone and consistently uses polite and professional language.
While effective, the writing occasionally uses slightly informal expressions, such as "lots of
manners of upgrading it" and "giving the street a green ambiance."
o Improvement: Replace "lots of manners" with "numerous ways" and "giving the
street a green ambiance" with "enhancing the street with greenery to create a
welcoming environment."
Organization: 5/5
The structure is excellent, with a clear introduction, well-organized paragraphs, and a logical
conclusion.
Linking phrases like "to start with," "furthermore," and "in addition" effectively guide the
reader through the proposal.
Language: 4/5
The range of vocabulary is adequate, but the language could be more advanced with formal
phrases and inversions.
o Examples of improvements:
Replace "this could make it look better to our eyes" with "this would
contribute to a visually appealing environment."
Use inversions for formal style: Instead of "it could also make it look better,"
write "Not only could it enhance the aesthetic appeal, but it would also
create a sense of relaxation."
Overall Score: 18/20
Comments: The proposal is strong and well-written, meeting C1 standards. To achieve a
perfect score, the student should avoid informal phrases and incorporate more advanced
structures.
Proposal 2: Offering Free Training for Young People
Content: 5/5
The content is fully relevant, focusing on the need for free training to prepare young people
for work life. It explains how this would benefit both young individuals and businesses, with
examples like "reducing errors" and "ensuring opportunities for career progression."
Communicative Achievement: 4/5
The tone is mostly formal, but phrases like "being ready for it is difficult" are less formal.
o Improvement: Use more polished alternatives like "Being adequately prepared for
the demands of the workforce can be challenging."
The ending paragraph, "We appreciate your time and attention," could be more formal: "We
sincerely appreciate your consideration of this proposal."
Organization: 5/5
The structure is logical, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing key ideas, and
a conclusion summarizing the proposal.
Transitional phrases like "as we all know," "furthermore," and "with that" enhance
readability and coherence.
Language: 4/5
Vocabulary is appropriate, but there is room for more sophisticated expressions and
grammatical structures.
o Examples of improvements:
Replace "this ensures the workers develop the necessary skills" with "this
guarantees the development of essential technical and soft skills among
employees."
Use inversions: Instead of "depending on the case you are looking for," write
"Depending on the case for which you are searching."
Avoid redundancy: "Businesses would get well-trained employees" could be
rewritten as "Businesses would gain access to highly qualified employees."
Overall Score: 18/20
Comments: This proposal demonstrates a clear understanding of the task. A stronger
emphasis on formal phrasing and advanced grammar would elevate it to a higher C1 level.
Final Evaluation
Both proposals are well-written and meet the expectations of the C1 level. However, to excel further:
1. Incorporate formal expressions and inversions more consistently.
o Example: "Never before has such an initiative been implemented, which could
drastically improve..."
2. Avoid informal language and redundancy.
o Replace "lots of manners" with "numerous approaches" or "a variety of methods."
3. Use a wider range of advanced vocabulary and complex sentence structures.
Verdict: Carlota passes the C1 level criteria. Both proposals demonstrate competence and a clear
understanding of the task, but refinements in formality and linguistic sophistication are needed for
higher scores.
