Name: Angel MO
Group: teacher29 class
Writing Topic
You had dinner at a new restaurant last week. You would like to write a restaurant review to post on your
school’s forum board.
· introduce the restaurant
· describe your dining experience
· comment on its food, menu option and service.
Write about 200 words.
Student's Writing
Today I to the Taiwan restaurant in The wan This Restaurant's name was Taichat braised pork rice out the
restaurant was Michelin restaurants I was very interested in this restaurant, so I date lunch But this
restaurant.
When I entered the restaurant , I felt the light was bright and warm, which makes it seem like spring has
arrived. The environment is clean and tidy, with the chais neatly arranged. The background music played
Iniwanese songs , which was not too loud and can help people relax the music and eating.
I Basil Crispy chicken and braised park rice. It was very expensive. I use $73 to buy this set menu. And the
staff at this restaurant provided very poor service. I had to short for a long time before they Came to helpme
order. And It was twenty minutes before the food was served to me .
This restant food was vend delicious. The Basil Crispy chicken were tried very a ispy and it werp emitting
grease. hicken had some Salty thuor but it doesn't overpower dicken own tate, I seen the meat not very large
but after 1 finishing the meal, I found some most was in the bowl ,
To conclude, This restaurant had some advantages and disadvantages of food wise, here's food was very
delicious and crispy. And the meal was plenty of rice. But the restaurant give food and the attitude of the
staff are To slow price were not cheap. If I had time and money in the future, I wal werp gad to come here
again to enjoy food.
Grammar Self Correction
The grammar and spelling mistakes in your essay are marked with underlines. Correct them in the
provided space on the right, using Example[1] as guide.
[ 1 ] I went to
[ ]
Today I to[1] the Taiwan restaurant in The wan This[2] Restaurant[3]'s name [ ]
was Taichat braised pork rice out the[4] restaurant was Michelin [ ]
restaurants I was very interested in this restaurant, so I date lunch But
[5] [6] [7]
[ ]
this restaurant.
[ ]
When I entered the restaurant ,[8] I felt the light was bright and warm, [ ]
which makes[9] it seem like spring has[10] arrived. The environment is clean
[ ]
and tidy, with the chais neatly arranged. The background music played
Iniwanese songs ,[11] which was[12] not too loud and can[13] help people relax [ ]
the music and eating[14]. [ ]
[ ]
I Basil Crispy chicken and braised park rice. It was very expensive. I
use[15] $73 to buy this set menu. And the staff at this restaurant provided [ ]
very poor service. I had to short for a long time before they Came[16] to [ ]
helpme[17] order. And It[18] was twenty minutes before the food was served
[ ]
to me .[19]
[ ]
This restant[20] food was vend[21] delicious. The Basil Crispy chicken [ ]
were[22] tried very a ispy[23] and it werp[24] emitting grease. hicken[25] had
[ ]
some Salty thuor but it doesn't overpower dicken own tate, I seen
[26] [27] [28] [29]
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the meat not[30] very large but[31] after 1 finishing the meal, I found some
most was in the bowl ,[32] [ ]
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To conclude, This[33] restaurant had some advantages and disadvantages of
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food wise, here[34]'s food was very delicious and crispy. And the meal
was[35] plenty of rice. But the restaurant give[36] food and the attitude of the [ ]
staff are To[37] slow price were[38] not cheap. If I had time and money in the [ ]
future, I wal werp gad[39] to come here again to enjoy food.
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Tips for self-correction
[1] Missing auxiliary verb [2] Punctuation error [3] Capitalization mistake
[4] Incorrect word form [5] Punctuation error [6] Verb tense mistake
[7] Incorrect word form [8] Unnecessary space [9] Verb tense mistake
[10] Verb tense mistake [11] Unnecessary space [12] Verb tense mistake
[13] Incorrect word form [14] Incorrect word form [15] Verb tense mistake
[16] Capitalization mistake [17] Incorrect word form [18] Capitalization mistake
[19] Unnecessary space [20] Incorrect word form [21] Incorrect word form
[22] Verb tense mistake [23] Incorrect word form [24] Spelling mistake
[25] Incorrect word form [26] Capitalization mistake [27] Incorrect word form
[28] Incorrect word form [29] Verb tense mistake [30] Missing auxiliary verb
[31] Punctuation error [32] Unnecessary space [33] Capitalization mistake
[34] Incorrect word form [35] Verb tense mistake [36] Vocabulary error
[37] Incorrect word form [38] Verb tense mistake [39] Incorrect word form
Grammar Self-correction Answers
Today I to[1] the Taiwan restaurant in The wan This[2] Restaurant[3]'s name [ 1 ] I went to
was Taichat braised pork rice out the[4] restaurant was Michelin [ 2 ] wan. This
restaurants I[5] was very interested in this restaurant, so I date[6] lunch But[7]
[ 3 ] restaurant
this restaurant.
[ 4 ] rice. The
When I entered the restaurant ,[8] I felt the light was bright and warm,
[ 5 ] restaurants. I
which makes[9] it seem like spring has[10] arrived. The environment is clean
[ 6 ] dated
and tidy, with the chais neatly arranged. The background music played
Iniwanese songs ,[11] which was[12] not too loud and can[13] help people relax [ 7 ] lunch, but
the music and eating[14].
[ 8 ] restaurant,
made
I Basil Crispy chicken and braised park rice. It was very expensive. I [ 9 ]
use[15] $73 to buy this set menu. And the staff at this restaurant provided [ 10 ] had
very poor service. I had to short for a long time before they Came[16] to
[ 11 ] songs,
helpme[17] order. And It[18] was twenty minutes before the food was served
[ 12 ] were
to me .[19]
[ 13 ] could
This restant[20] food was vend[21] delicious. The Basil Crispy chicken
[ 14 ] eat
were [22]
tried very a ispy
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and it werp [24]
emitting grease. hicken
[25]
had
[ 15 ] used
some Salty[26] thuor but it doesn't overpower dicken[27] own tate,[28] I seen[29]
the meat not[30] very large but[31] after 1 finishing the meal, I found some [ 16 ] came
most was in the bowl ,[32] [ 17 ] help me
[ 18 ] it
To conclude, This[33] restaurant had some advantages and disadvantages of
food wise, here[34]'s food was very delicious and crispy. And the meal [ 19 ] me.
was[35] plenty of rice. But the restaurant give[36] food and the attitude of the [ 20 ] restaurant's
staff are To[37] slow price were[38] not cheap. If I had time and money in the
[ 21 ] very
future, I wal werp gad[39] to come here again to enjoy food.
[ 22 ] was
[ 23 ] easily
[ 24 ] was
[ 25 ] The chicken
[ 26 ] salty
[ 27 ] the chicken's
[ 28 ] taste.
[ 29 ] saw
[ 30 ] meat was not
[ 31 ] large, but
[ 32 ] bowl,
[ 33 ] this
[ 34 ] wise. Here
[ 35 ] had
[ 36 ] gives
[ 37 ] is that the
[ 38 ] was
[ 39 ] would be glad
Better Writing Self-Refinement
Write the refined sentence on the line.
You: Today I went to the Taiwan restaurant in The wan.
You: This restaurant's name was Taichat braised pork rice.
You: The restaurant was Michelin restaurants.
You: I was very interested in this restaurant, so I dated lunch, but this restaurant.
You: When I entered the restaurant, I felt the light was bright and warm, which made it seem like spring
had arrived.
You: The environment is clean and tidy, with the chais neatly arranged.
You: The background music played Iniwanese songs, which were not too loud and could help people relax
the music and eat.
You: I Basil Crispy chicken and braised park rice.
You: It was very expensive.
You: I used $73 to buy this set menu.
You: And the staff at this restaurant provided very poor service.
You: I had to short for a long time before they came to help me order.
You: And it was twenty minutes before the food was served to me.
You: This restaurant's food was very delicious.
You: The Basil Crispy chicken was tried very easily and it was emitting grease.
You: The chicken had some salty thuor but it doesn't overpower the chicken's own taste.
You: I saw the meat was not very large, but after 1 finishing the meal, I found some most was in the bowl,
You: To conclude, this restaurant had some advantages and disadvantages of food wise.
You: Here's food was very delicious and crispy.
You: And the meal had plenty of rice.
You: But the restaurant gives food and the attitude of the staff is that the slow price was not cheap.
You: If I had time and money in the future, I would be glad to come here again to enjoy food.
Better Writing Suggestions
In this section, your teacher or AI will offer alternative suggestions to enhance your writing. Some sentences
from your essay will be listed, alongside improved versions of these sentences.
Note that this does not imply your original sentences are incorrect; we are simply providing alternative
phrasings to support your learning.
1. Today I went to the Taiwan restaurant in The wan.
→ Today I visited a Taiwanese restaurant located in The Wan.
Explanation: The original sentence used 'the Taiwan restaurant' which is incorrect; 'Taiwanese restaurant' is
the proper adjective form. 'The wan' should be capitalized and referred to as a place. The sentence was made
more natural and clear.
2. This restaurant's name was Taichat braised pork rice.
→ The restaurant's name was 'Taichat Braised Pork Rice.'
Explanation: The sentence used past tense 'was' which is awkward when introducing a restaurant. Also,
proper nouns like the restaurant's name should be capitalized and put in quotes for clarity.
3. The restaurant was Michelin restaurants.
→ This restaurant is recognized by the Michelin Guide.
Explanation: The original sentence is grammatically incorrect ('Michelin restaurants' is plural and used
awkwardly). The revision clarifies that the restaurant has Michelin recognition, which enhances clarity and
correctness.
4. I was very interested in this restaurant, so I dated lunch, but this restaurant.
→ I was very interested in this restaurant, so I decided to have lunch there.
Explanation: The original sentence contains unclear phrasing ('dated lunch, but this restaurant'). The
improved sentence uses a clear verb 'decided to have lunch' to express the intention.
5. When I entered the restaurant, I felt the light was bright and warm, which made it seem like spring
had arrived.
→ When I entered the restaurant, I noticed the bright and warm lighting created a cozy
atmosphere, making me feel as if spring had arrived.
Explanation: The original sentence is generally understandable but can be enhanced by better word choice
and sentence flow to sound more natural and descriptive.
6. The environment is clean and tidy, with the chais neatly arranged.
→ The environment was clean and tidy, with the chairs neatly arranged.
Explanation: The word 'chais' is a typo and should be 'chairs.' Also, maintaining consistent past tense ('was'
instead of 'is') fits the narrative better.
7. The background music played Iniwanese songs, which were not too loud and could help people relax
the music and eat.
→ The background music played Taiwanese songs softly, creating a relaxing atmosphere for
diners.
Explanation: 'Iniwanese' is a typo for 'Taiwanese.' The sentence is awkward with 'could help people relax
the music and eat,' which is confusing. The improved sentence is concise and clear.
8. I Basil Crispy chicken and braised park rice.
→ I ordered Basil Crispy Chicken and Braised Pork Rice.
Explanation: The original sentence is incomplete and contains typos: 'I Basil Crispy chicken' lacks a verb,
and 'park' should be 'pork.' The improved sentence corrects these issues and completes the thought.
9. It was very expensive.
→ The meal was quite expensive.
Explanation: The original sentence is very short and vague; adding 'meal' and 'quite' makes it more precise
and expressive.
10. I used $73 to buy this set menu.
→ I spent $73 on this set menu.
Explanation: 'Used $73 to buy' is awkward phrasing. 'Spent $73' is a more natural and common expression
regarding payment.
11. And the staff at this restaurant provided very poor service.
→ However, the staff at this restaurant provided poor service.
Explanation: Beginning the sentence with 'And' is less formal. Using 'However' expresses contrast better,
improving the flow and professionalism of the review.
12. I had to short for a long time before they came to help me order.
→ I had to wait a long time before the staff came to take my order.
Explanation: 'I had to short' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'wait.' The improved sentence uses the
correct word and clarifies the action.
13. And it was twenty minutes before the food was served to me.
→ The food took twenty minutes to be served.
Explanation: The original sentence starts with 'And,' which is better avoided. The revised sentence is more
concise and neutral.
14. This restaurant's food was very delicious.
→ The food at this restaurant was very delicious.
Explanation: The original sentence is understandable but slightly awkward; moving the possessive phrase
improves clarity.
15. The Basil Crispy chicken was tried very easily and it was emitting grease.
→ The Basil Crispy Chicken was tender and flavorful, though a bit oily.
Explanation: 'Was tried very easily' is unclear and awkward; likely intending to convey that the chicken was
tender or easy to eat. 'Emitting grease' is also awkward; 'a bit oily' is a more natural phrase.
16. The chicken had some salty thuor but it doesn't overpower the chicken's own taste.
→ The chicken was slightly salty but did not overpower its natural flavor.
Explanation: 'Salty thuor' is likely a typo; probably meant 'salty flavor.' Additionally, verb tenses were
inconsistent. The improved sentence fixes vocabulary and grammatic consistency.
17. I saw the meat was not very large, but after 1 finishing the meal, I found some most was in the
bowl,
→ Although the pieces of meat were small, I found the portion quite satisfying after finishing the
meal.
Explanation: The original sentence is confusing due to grammar errors and unclear wording. 'After 1
finishing' and 'some most was' are unclear. The revision clarifies the idea with proper grammar.
18. To conclude, this restaurant had some advantages and disadvantages of food wise.
→ To conclude, this restaurant has both advantages and disadvantages in terms of food quality.
Explanation: The original sentence has incorrect phrasing 'disadvantages of food wise.' The improved
sentence corrects this to a natural expression, using plural forms and clarifying meaning.
19. Here's food was very delicious and crispy.
→ Its food was very delicious and crispy.
Explanation: 'Here's food' is ungrammatical and unclear; the possessive pronoun 'Its' correctly relates to the
restaurant.
20. And the meal had plenty of rice.
→ Moreover, the meal included a generous portion of rice.
Explanation: Sentence beginning with 'And' is informal. 'Meal had plenty of rice' is factual but can be made
more descriptive and formal.
21. But the restaurant gives food and the attitude of the staff is that the slow price was not cheap.
→ However, the food service was slow, the staff's attitude was disappointing, and the prices were
not cheap.
Explanation: The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. It mixes several ideas unclearly. The
improved sentence separates these issues and expresses them clearly.
22. If I had time and money in the future, I would be glad to come here again to enjoy food.
→ If I have time and money in the future, I would be glad to visit this restaurant again to enjoy
their food.
Explanation: The original sentence uses 'had' which suggests a past subjunctive, but here future possibility is
better expressed with 'have' (present simple). Adding 'their' before 'food' clarifies ownership.
Scores
Content: 2.5/7.0
Language: 3.0/7.0
Organization: 2.5/7.0
Total Scores: 8.0/21.0
AI Comments
Content
1. Task Relevance: The essay covers the basic points of the task by introducing the restaurant, describing
the dining experience, and commenting on the food, menu, and service. However, some parts are unclear or
incomplete, which affects clarity and relevance.
Suggestion: Clarify key information such as the restaurant’s name and location at the beginning. For
example, "Last week, I had dinner at a newly opened Taiwanese restaurant called Taichat Braised Pork Rice
in The Wan."
2. Idea development: Some points are mentioned but not fully developed or supported with adequate detail.
For example, the description of the food and service could be clearer with more examples or explanations.
Suggestion: Develop your ideas by explaining why the service was poor or why the food was delicious. For
example, "The staff took a long time to take my order and seemed inattentive, which made the experience
less enjoyable."
3. Creativity and imagination: The essay includes some creative descriptions, like comparing the lighting
to spring and mentioning Taiwanese background music. This adds a nice touch to the review.
Suggestion: Enhance creativity by using more vivid adjectives and sensory details. For example, "The
crispy basil chicken was bursting with flavour, and the rich aroma of the braised pork rice was irresistible."
4. Audience awareness: The essay shows an attempt to address readers on a school forum, but the tone and
clarity sometimes make it hard for readers to stay engaged.
Suggestion: Write clearly and maintain a friendly, engaging tone suitable for fellow students. For instance,
"If you enjoy Taiwanese food and don’t mind paying a bit more, this restaurant might be worth a try."
Language
1. Sentence structures: The essay mainly uses simple sentences, with several incomplete or awkward
sentences. Complex sentences are rare and often incorrect.
Correction: “I Basil Crispy chicken and braised park rice.” => “I ordered the Basil Crispy Chicken and
braised pork rice.”
Correction: “And the staff at this restaurant provided very poor service.” => “The staff at this restaurant
provided poor service.”
2. Vocabulary: The word choice is sometimes inaccurate or repetitive, and there are frequent spelling errors
that affect word clarity.
Correction: “Braised park rice” => “braised pork rice”
Correction: “It was very expensive.” (repetitive and vague) => “The meal was quite expensive, costing $73
for the set menu.”
3. Tone: The tone fluctuates between informal and awkward, and sometimes it feels too casual or unclear
for a review intended for a school forum.
Correction: Replace “If I had time and money in the future, I wal werp gad to come here again to enjoy
food.” with a clearer and more natural sentence like: “If I have time and money in the future, I would gladly
come back to enjoy the food again.”
Organization
1. Overall structure: The essay has a basic structure—introduction, description, and conclusion—but the
ideas are unevenly distributed, and some paragraphs lack clear focus. The introduction is confusing, and the
conclusion is somewhat repetitive.
Suggestion: Organise the essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction that names the restaurant and location,
a paragraph describing the dining environment and service, a paragraph on the food and menu, and a
conclusion summarising overall impressions. For example:
- Introduction: "Last week, I had dinner at Taichat Braised Pork Rice, a new Taiwanese restaurant in The
Wan."
- Environment and service: "The restaurant was bright and welcoming, with Taiwanese music playing softly.
However, the service was slow and inattentive."
- Food and menu: "I ordered the Basil Crispy Chicken and braised pork rice. The chicken was crispy and
flavorful, but the dish was quite expensive."
- Conclusion: "Overall, the food was tasty, but the high price and poor service may make me think twice
before returning."
Overall Comments
The essay shows a willingness to describe the dining experience creatively but is held back by unclear
expression, grammar mistakes, and organisational issues. Focusing on clearer sentence construction and
better organisation will greatly improve readability and impact. Make sure to proofread for spelling and
word choice to enhance clarity. Keep practising by planning your essay structure before writing.
AI Personalized Model Essay
A Review of Taichat Braised Pork Rice Restaurant
Last week, I had dinner at a new Taiwanese restaurant called Taichat Braised Pork Rice, located in The
Wan. This restaurant is famous because it has been recognized as a Michelin restaurant. I was very
interested in trying it, so I decided to have lunch there.
When I entered the restaurant, I noticed that the lighting was bright and warm, making the atmosphere feel
like a fresh spring day. The environment was clean and tidy, with chairs neatly arranged. The background
music was soft Taiwanese songs, which was not too loud and helped customers relax while eating.
I ordered the Basil Crispy Chicken and Braised Pork Rice set. It was quite expensive; I spent $73 on this
meal. Unfortunately, the service was poor. I had to wait for a long time before the staff came to take my
order, and it took about twenty minutes before the food was served.
The food was very delicious. The Basil Crispy Chicken was crispy and spicy, although a little greasy. The
chicken tasted salty but not overwhelmingly so, and it retained its original flavor. The portion of meat was
not very large, but after finishing the meal, I realized there was still some sauce left in the bowl, which was
very flavorful.
To conclude, this restaurant has both advantages and disadvantages. The food was tasty and crispy, and the
meal included plenty of rice. However, the service was slow, and the prices were not cheap. If I have time
and money in the future, I would be glad to visit this restaurant again to enjoy its food.
