Review:
Using
clear
language
Make
the
following
sentences
clearer
and
less
verbose.
Some
strategies:
- Use
simpler
or
more
appropriate
words.
o Try
avoiding
words
with
-tion
or
-ality,
or
other
long
suffixes.
o Use
caution
when
relying
on
a
thesaurus:
better
to
stick
with
words
youve
wielded
before
- Replace
of
with
another
preposition,
a
modifier,
or
a
possessive
o bright
colors
of
the
painting
bright
colors
in
the
painting
o history
of
art
art
history
o a
friend
of
my
father
my
fathers
friend
- Get
rid
of
redundancies
and
unnecessary
words
o Relating
to
the
topic
of
relating
to
OR
on
the
topic
of
o It
is
the
belief
of
the
author
nothing.
o Will
in
the
future
be
will
be
o Each
year
annually
each
year
OR
annually
The
object
of
the
Bic
Crystal
Pen
was
in
the
past
shown
and
exhibited
at
the
location
of
the
Museum
of
Modern
Art
in
the
year
of
2004,
within
the
larger
context
of
the
museum,
in
the
role
of
being
part
of
an
art
exhibit
with
the
title
Humble
Masterpieces.
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On
a
daily
occurrence,
we
use
and
utilize
such
items
and
their
ilk;
the
probability,
however,
is
that
we
render
them
the
most
minimal
quantity
of
attention.
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Using
active
instead
of
passive
voice
Level
1:
Change
the
passive
to
active
voice.
1. The
building
was
designed
by
the
architect.
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2. Several
common
items
were
featured
in
the
new
exhibit,
such
as
Scotch
Tape
and
Post-It
Notes.
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3. Shelter
was
provided
to
the
refugees
by
Shigeru
Ban
Architects
as
part
of
a
sustainable
temporary
housing
project.
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Level
2:
Keeping
some
instances
of
passive
voice
Once
its
easy
for
you
to
change
passive
to
active
voice,
you
may
notice
that
sometimes
it
doesnt
make
sense
to
do
so.
For
example:
Passive:
Several
calls
were
made
to
the
police.
Active:
Someone
or
some
people
made
several
calls
to
the
police.
-
Why
is
this
active
version
not
as
good
as
the
passive?
Passive:
Origami,
although
a
fine
art
in
its
own
right,
has
also
been
analyzed
by
mathematicians
and
engineers
as
a
numerical
problem.
Active:
Mathematicians
and
engineers
have
analyzed
origami
as
a
mathematical
problem,
although
it
is
also
a
fine
art
in
its
own
right.
- Why
is
this
active
version
not
as
good
as
the
passive?
Hint:
what
is
the
most
important
noun
in
the
sentence?
Sometimes
passive
voice
is
appropriate.
List
some
instances
where
passive
voice
might
be
appropriate:
A
plan
for
using
active
and
passive
voice
judiciously:
1) Master
level
1avoid
passive
voice
whenever
possible.
2) Master
level
2use
passive
voice
where
it
makes
sense
to
do
so.
