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                                                                  PLAGIARISM
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 Contextual	Spelling                                              8
 Confused	Words                                                   4
 Misspelled	Words                                                 4
 Grammar                                                          5
 Determiner	Use	(a/an/the/this,	etc.)                             2
 Incorrect	Verb	Forms                                             2
 Wrong	or	Missing	Prepositions                                    1
 Punctuation                                                     20
 Punctuation	in	Compound/Complex	Sentences                       14
 Comma	Misuse	within	Clauses                                      6
 Sentence	Structure                                               2
 Incomplete	Sentences                                             2
 Style                                                           62
 Inappropriate	Colloquialisms                                    55
 Wordy	Sentences                                                  3
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 Kubiak-	Persepolis
            Kennedy	Kubiak
            Honors	9	English
            Teacher	Mr.	Bradley
            26	September	2017
            Persepolis	Reflective	Essay
                                                                                   1
            				How	would	you 1	feel	if	your 2	home,	the	place	you 3	                  Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                   2
            were	born	and	raised	in	changed	almost	all	the	time.	And	                  Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                   3
                                                                                       Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            that 4	it	put	you 5	and	your 6	family	in	danger	and	they	had	          4
                                                                                       [And	that → Moreover,	that]
            to	send	you 7	away?	Well 8	Marjane	and	her	family	live	in	             5
                                                                                       Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            Iran	When	she	was	about	ten	is	when	it	all	started	for	her.	           6
                                                                                       Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                   7
            Her	parents	would	protest	about	what	they	believed	in	but,	                Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                   8
            that	left	Marjane	to	try	and	figure	out	what	is	going	on	and	              [Well,]
            try	to	have	her	own	mind	set 9.	So	she	would	imagine	god	
                                                                                   9
            and	talk	to	him,	she	wanted	to	become	a	profit 10	but	she	                 Possibly	miswritten	word:	mind	set
            drifted	away	from	that.	But	when 11	she	thought	she	was	
                                                                                  10
            right	about	all	that	went	wrong	her	parents	or	someone	else	               [profit,]
                                                                                  11
            would	tell	her	differently	and	changed	her	whole	mined.	                   [But	when → However,	when]
            She	could	only	trust	her	grandma	and	her	uncle 12	Anoosh.	
            Ever	since	Iran	wanted	to	change	its	government	to	make	it	
            better,	it	has	not	gone	very	well.	A	lot	of 13	death,	and	
                                                                                  12
            misery	that	has 14	happen	in	this	place.	Iran	is	a	very	strict 15	         [uncle,]
            place	as	everyone	around	the	world	has	said	and	is	a	
                                                                                  13
            horrible	place.                                                            [A	lot	of → Much]
                                                                                  14
            				Iran	is	a	very	strict 16	place, 17	because	they	have	all	these	        [has	to]
                                                                                  15
            rules	where	if	you 18	don’t 19	follow	you 20	might	die	or	be	              Weak	adjective:	strict
            badly 21	hurt.	These	rules	are,	if	you 22	don’t 23	wear	the	
                                                                                  16
            veil 24	you 26’ll 25	be	hurt	by	men	because	it	will	turn	them	             Weak	adjective:	strict
                                                                                  17
            on.	Or	they 27	will	arrest	you 28	for	not	going	by	the	law.	               [place, ]
                                                                                  18
                                                                                       Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            Women	must	also	have	it	go	over	their	whole	body 29	but	it	           19
                                                                                       [don't → do	not]
            doesn’t 30	have	to	go	over	their	face.	Men	also	have	their	           20
                                                                                       Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            own 31	attire	that	they	have	to	wear,	they 32	also	have	to	           21
                                                                                       Overused	word:	badly
                                                                                  22
            have	a	beard.	If	you 33	say	something	your 34	not	supposed	                Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                  23
            to	say	you 35	will	get	arrested, 36	if	you 37	are	a	man	and	               [don't → do	not]
                                                                                  24
                                                                                       [veil,]
            you 38	disrespect	a	women 39	you 41’ll 40	go	to	jail.	If	you 42	      25
                                                                                       [you'll → you	will]
            do	any	real	life 43	drawings	will	also	get	you 44	into	trouble.       26
                                                                                       Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                  27
            				In	Iran 45	their	country	is	a	government	and	religious	                [Or	they → Alternatively,	they]
                                                                                  28
            controled 46	country.	Where	if	you 47	sleep	with	one	or	more	              Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                  29
                                                                                       [body,]
            men	you 48	are	a	prostitot.	Marjane’s	friends	asked	her	if	           30
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            she 49	ever	done 50	the	dirty,	and	when	she	tells	them	how	              [doesn't
                                                                                     [own] → does	not]
                                                                                32
            many	times	and	men	she	did	it	with	they	blew	up	on	her.	                 [wear,	they → wear;	they]
                                                                                33
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            On	page	116	persepolis 51	2.	That	made	Marjane	go	into	             34
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            depression 52	where	she	wouldn’t 53	do	anything	with	her	           35
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                36
            family.	She	would	stay	inside	and	watch	tv	and	sleep	and	                [arrested, ]
                                                                                37
            stay	in	her	room.	When	she	got	on	her	medicine 54	it	made	               Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                38
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            her	happy,	but	it	only	lasted	for	so	long	then	it	would	wear	       39
                                                                                     [a	women → women]
            off.	When	her	parents	went	on	a	trip	she 55	tried	to	kill	          40
                                                                                     [you'll → you	will]
                                                                                41
            herself,	she	tried	to	herself	but	all	it	was	a	little	dot.	Then	         Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                42
            she	tired 56	to	drink	vodka 57	and	took	her	pills	then	went	to	     43
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                     [real	life → real-life]
            sleep	but	she	woke	up	and	was	tripping	badly.	When	she	             44
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            went	back	to	the	doctors 59	they 58	told	her	that	she	should	       45
                                                                                     [Iran,]
                                                                                46
            have	died 60	but	she 61	was	lucky	that	she	didn’t 62.		After	            [controled → controlled]
                                                                                47
            that 63	she	decided	to	do	something	with	her	life	now 64	so	             Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                48
            she	started	a	new	look	and	started	working	out.	She	started	             Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                49
                                                                                     [she	is	 or 	she	was]
            her	own 65	class	that	she	instructs,	she	really 66	started	a	new	   50
                                                                                     [done → did]
            change.		                                                           51
                                                                                     [persepolis → Persepolis]
                                                                                52
            				In	america 67	if	you 68	do	any	of	this	not	everyone	judges	          [a	depression	 or 	the	depression]
                                                                                53
            you 69	like	they	do	in	Iran.	Like	if	you 70	date	other	men	and	          [wouldn't → would	not]
                                                                                54
                                                                                     [medicine,]
            “do	it”	you	won’t 71	be	judge 72	like	you	would	if	you	lived	       55
                                                                                     Unoriginal	text:	8	words
            in	Iran.	If	you 73	do	drugs	not	all	people	are	disappointed	in	          ktwheretonext.blogspot.com/
                                                                                56
            you 75	, 74	but	some	people	will	be.	America	and	other	                  Possibly	confused	word
                                                                                57
                                                                                     [to	drink	vodka → of	drinking	vodka]
            countries	have	their	own	rules 76	but	they	aren’t 77	having	        58
                                                                                     Unoriginal	text:	8	words
            civil	wars	going	on	in	their	country.		They	can	keep	more	               strongerfasterhealthier.tumblr.com/po…
                                                                                59
            peace	and	less	destruction,	they 78	can	have	more	normal	                [doctors,]
                                                                                60
                                                                                     [died,]
            lives.                                                              61
                                                                                     Repeated	word
            				This 79	is	why	Iran	is	way	more	strict	and	ruling	              62
                                                                                     [didn't → did	not]
                                                                                63
            dictatorship	than	everyone	else,	and	how	their	world	is	a	               [that,]
                                                                                64
            third	world	country	with	all	their	war	and	death	and	misery.	            [now,]
                                                                                65
                                                                                     [own]
            Why	most	people	their	want	to	move	because	they	want	to	            66
                                                                                     [really]
            get	away	from	all	that.	So	I 81 	can	see	why	the	author		           67
                                                                                     [america → America]
                                                                                68
            wrote 82 80	about	her	life	growing	up	because, 83	she	wants	             Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                69
            people	from	all	over	the	world	to	understand	that	if	the 84	             Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                70
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            think	their	life	was	hard.	That	it	wasn’t 86 85	they	didn’t 87	     71
                                                                                     [won't → will	not]
            look	over	their	shoulder	all	the	time	to	see	what	was	              72
                                                                                     Possibly	confused	word
                                                                                73
            gonna 88	happen	that	day.	That	you 90	didn’t 91	have	to	start	           Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                74
            wearing	a	veil	everytime	you 92	go	outside	of	your 93	                   [you	, → you,]
                                                                                75
                                                                                     Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
            house. 89	Or	have 94	to	pray	every	day	and	lie	to	people	just	      76
                                                                                     [rules,]
            to	look	like	you 95	are	following	your 96	government.	In	           77
                                                                                     [aren't → are	not]
            America 97	if	you 98	don’t 99	want	to	stand	for	our	flag	or	our	    78
                                                                                     [destruction,	they → destruction;	they]
                                                                                79
            pledge	of	allegiance	then	you 101're 100	not	going	to	jail	or	           Unclear	antecedent
                                                                                80
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            get	punished	or	even	killed.	This 102	is	my 103	reasonings	       81   Unoriginal	text:	8	words
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                                   en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Ossett
            why	Iran	is	a	way	more	strict	country	compared	to	                82
                                                                                   [author		wrote → author	wrote]
            others 104	and	this	book	explains	it	in	her	way	of	how	bad	it	    83
                                                                                   [because, ]
                                                                              84
            is.                                                                    Possibly	confused	word
                                                                              85
                                                                                   [wasn't,]
                                                                              86
                                                                                   [wasn't → was	not]
                                                                              87
                                                                                   [didn't → did	not]
                                                                              88
                                                                                   Slang
                                                                              89
                                                                                   Sentence	fragment
                                                                              90
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                              91
                                                                                   [didn't → did	not]
                                                                              92
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                              93
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                              94
                                                                                   [Or	have → Alternatively,	have]
                                                                              95
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                              96
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                              97
                                                                                   [America,]
                                                                              98
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                              99
                                                                                   [don't → do	not]
                                                                             100
                                                                                   [you're → you	are]
                                                                             101
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                             102
                                                                                   Unclear	antecedent
                                                                             103
                                                                                   Personal	pronoun	in	formal	writing
                                                                             104
                                                                                   [others,]