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DOCUMENT SCORE
Nutt - Persepolis 50 of 100
ISSUES FOUND IN THIS TEXT
72
PLAGIARISM
9%
Contextual Spelling 9
Misspelled Words 6
Confused Words 2
Commonly Confused Words 1
Grammar 9
Misuse of Modifiers 3
Wrong or Missing Prepositions 2
Determiner Use (a/an/the/this, etc.) 1
Misuse of Quantifiers 1
Faulty Subject-Verb Agreement 1
Incorrect Verb Forms 1
Punctuation 27
Punctuation in Compound/Complex Sentences 15
Comma Misuse within Clauses 6
Closing Punctuation 3
Misuse of Semicolons, Quotation Marks, etc. 3
Sentence Structure 1
Incomplete Sentences 1
Style 26
Inappropriate Colloquialisms 26
Vocabulary enhancement No errors
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Nutt - Persepolis
Sydney Nutt
Honors 9 English
September 26, 2017
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How Different it Can 1 Be? [it Can → Can it]
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If the text had been written in a different time or place or Unoriginal text: 25 words
language or for a different audience, how and why might it chris123689.wordpress.com/ib-portfol…
differ 2?
In these books Persepolis 1 & 2 by Marjane Satrapi, I 3
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believe that Marjane's world is completely 4 different from Personal pronoun in formal writing
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a different perspective. We see her story as a girl trying to Overused word: completely
understand what is going on and find out why she is so
understanding. But Marjane 5 sees as her trying to find out
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what’s going to happen next, and when can everything be [But Marjane → However, Marjane]
not so limited. Her priorities have to be her religion and
culture first, 6 if it is not things could happen to her.
Marjane is confused on who to be and what to follow, she
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does not know to be modern like her family or religious [first, ]
like her society. As a kid 7 Marjane would get in trouble a
lot 8 and she would keep getting in trouble to the point
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where she needed to leave the country, at the time in the [kid,]
8
book the war was going on and her mistakes were not in 9 [lot,]
the right time. When she was in Austria Marjane did not fit
in with everyone else, for her to fit in she had to educate
her herself. During her time in Austria she became a
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different person and did things that was 10 wrong, but in [not in → not at]
the end 11 Marjane was not what she wanted to be, so to be
herself again 12 she went back to Iran.
Men and women in Iran interact and act different 14 13
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than people in America, people who grew up in a different [was → were]
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country than Iran see and understand things different about [end,]
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their religion and culture. For example on page 146: [again,]
Marjane stated, “One evening before the college closed,
one of the supervisors paid me a visit.”
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Her supervisor asked, “what are you doing here so late?” Possibly confused word
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Marjane replied, “I’m 15 drawing.” [different → differently]
Superviser 16- “Why are you looking at this man?”
Marjane- “Well, because i'm 18 17 drawing him.”
Superviser 19- “yes, but you're 20 not allowed to look at him,
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it's 21 against the moral code.”
Marjane- What would you 23 have me 24 do? Should I 25
draw this man while looking at the door 22???!!”
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Superviser 26- “Yes.” [I'm → I am]
16
Marjane couldn’t 27 even look at a man just to draw, 28 [Superviser → Supervisor]
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when Americans can do that and much more. Another [i'm → I'm]
18
[i'm → i am]
example is when Marjane’s mom got attacked on page 74 19
[Superviser → Supervisor]
Mom- “Two guys...Two bearded guys!.. 29Two 20
[you're → you are]
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fundamentalist bastards... 30The bastards.. 31The [it's → it is]
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Ebi- “calm down darling, calm down, What did they do?” Personal pronoun in formal writing
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Personal pronoun in formal writing
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[Superviser → Supervisor]
M- “Mom 33” 27
[couldn't → could not]
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[draw, ]
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Mom- “They insulted me. They said that women like me 35 [guys!.. → guys!.]
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should be pushed up against a wall and fucked. And then 36 31
Unnecessary ellipsis
[bastards.. → bastards.]
thrown in the garbage.” “...And that 37 if I 38 didn't 39 want 32
Unnecessary ellipsis
that to happen, I 40 should wear the veil… 34”
Ebi- “Forget about those morons let's go home…”
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Marjane’s life is completely 41 different in some ways, she [Mom.]
a person has to act different 42 because she has to but we do
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it because we want to. But as 44 I 45 said before they act and Unoriginal text: 39 words
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interact different 46 for their religion and culture. 43 35
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In Iran 47 the people have to follow different rules/laws [And then → Moreover, then]
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than Americans do. Marjane and all the other women were [And that → Moreover, that]
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Personal pronoun in formal writing
restricted to wear the things to cover up, if they didn’t 48 it 39
[didn't → did not]
would be a shame. On page 3-4 Marjane says: 40
Personal pronoun in formal writing
“Then came 1980: The year it became obligatory to wear
the veil at school. 49”
She had to wear the veil at school, but in America 50 we can
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wear anything we want. Some people barely wear Overused word: completely
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anything 51 but in Iran 52 it is bad 53 just to wear jeans, 54 If [different → differently]
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the women in iran 55 do not cover up like they should Sentence fragment
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[But as → However, as]
people would be ashamed of them and wonder why they 45
Personal pronoun in formal writing
are acting like a ‘slut’. 56 They have to follow these 46
[different → differently]
47
rules/laws to be what the government wants, and if they do [Iran,]
not 57 they could get tortured.
People in iran 58 have limits on what to buy, like their
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clothing. A time 59 in the book Marjane wanted a tape [didn't → did not]
recorder just to listen to music, but that is banned 60 so she 49
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They are limited to a lot of 61 stuff, but mostly stuff from a
western culture was forbidden. Another time in the book 50
[America,]
she wanted a poster to hang on her wall but that was also 51
[anything,]
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forbidden 62 so her parents snuck it through airport security, [Iran,]
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they put it in her dad's coat and made it look like he had Overused word: bad
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[jeans, ]
broad shoulders. Marjane had to go through a lot just to 55
[iran → Iran]
have fun and not get caught, she 63 risked things a lot 56
[slut'. → slut.']
throughout the book. But she 64 risked everything because
she wanted to have a kind of normal 65 childhood, but she 57
[not,]
really 66 couldn't because a lot of 67 things are forbidden to 58
[iran → Iran]
have a normal 68 childhood. 59
[A time → Time]
Their 69 is a big difference on 70 how Americans see
people in Iran, it 71 is mostly about their religion and 60
[banned,]
culture and why they act so different. They interact
different, can not 72 buy the same stuff, are not allowed to 61
[a lot of → much]
wear the same clothing, and have to wear the veil. Women
are shamed in Iran if they do not wear what they are
supposed to, and people have to follow the rules, if they 73 62
[forbidden,]
don’t 75 74 they could get punished. You 76 should know this
because it is a big deal on how people see the life of an
Iranian and how different people can be, and be judged on
by the stuff they read. Marjane's life was not the easiest 77 63
[caught, she → caught; she]
but she explained how she got through it and what she 64
[But she → However, she]
made out of it. She got made fun of because of her 78 social
class, 79 and struggled to get by all the mistakes she had, 65
Overused word: normal
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but it made her who she is 80 and she knows her identity Overused word: really
67
now. She witnessed a lot of 81 things like deaths, drugs, [a lot of → many]
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Overused word: normal
etc 82. and Americans complain about every little things 83 69
[Their → There]
when people in Iran are just trying to live. Americans have 70
[difference on → difference between]
71
the freedoms to a lot 84 and we should appreciate it, [Iran, it → Iran; it]
Marjane showed the way she grew up and the 72
Possibly miswritten word: can not
complications, she showed that we are different in many
ways.
73
Repeated word
74
[don't,]
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[don't → do not]
76
Personal pronoun in formal writing
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[easiest,]
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[class, ]
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[is,]
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[a lot of → many]
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etc in formal writing
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[things → thing]
84
[lot,]
