Showing posts with label Caenus. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Caenus. Show all posts

Saturday, May 28, 2011

Made of Awesome Critique Contest

Hello all and welcome to The Oracle and The Muse for my entry into this Awesomesauce Contest!

Thank you to Shelley Watters over at Is It Hot In Here Or is it This Book for hosting this contest in which contestants are charged with posting their first 250 words of a finished manuscript in hopes of winning... (drum roll)... a 10 (TEN) Page Critique (and blip on the radar) from Judith Engracia, agent with Liza Dawson And Associates.

Please make sure you click Shelley's link above and visit all the entries and offer any critiques you deem necessary. Since you're here, please critique mine below.

Here is my entry:

Title: BANISHED
Genre: YA Historical Fantasy
Word Count: 62,000


Prince Caenus deflected a thrust from his friend’s sword. Dodging his friend’s advance, Caenus darted between fluted columns near the edge of the otherwise sparse palace courtyard. He sidestepped another advance while retreating several steps, but his friend’s sword point bit into Caenus’ ribcage.  Again.
No matter what he did, Caenus could neither escape his friend’s sword, nor his father’s searing gaze. During a lull in sparring action, the prince shot a brief sidelong glance toward where his father brooded. Disappointment bent the lines on his father’s forehead.
 “I need a strong son to reign when Hades darkens my doorstep!” The king barked. “You can’t beat your friend in a swordfight. You can barely ride a horse. When will you be strong enough to command the military?”
A shaft of sunlight streamed through thickening clouds and onto the royal palace. Kranos remained in the shadows. Studying. Assessing.
Caenus’ best friend and sparring partner cut off the prince’s evasive maneuvers. And again, wood beat against wood. Thrust. Swipe. Swing. Block. Dust rose from the ground in random clouds, kicked up by the rapidly moving feet of the young men. Their sparring swords danced against one another as familiar foes.
 “Is that your best, Caenus?” Galen ducked a half-hearted swing of his friend’s sword. “Is there no more fight in you than this peasant’s display of swordsmanship?” 
Galen knocked the sword from Caenus’ grasp and, with the flick of his wrist, guided the tip of his own sword to Caenus’ throat.

Tuesday, March 15, 2011

Delusional Doom Ides Of March Blogfest


Thank you to the illustrious Hart Johnson over at Confessions of a Watery Tart for hosting this Delusional Doom --- Ides of March Blogfest. Make sure you visit the other ill-fated stories of death-becomes-them. I just love the buttons for this blogfest. But of course I would. See above and below.

To set this scene up, in the second book of my Caenus trilogy, Caenus marries Kalliste and they've just returned home from the wedding. Kranos is announcing the news, but someone in the royal court has other plans.



            Long rectangular wooden tables dissected the cavernous reception hall built for small intimate gatherings of fifty people or less.  Silver wine goblets sat innocently at the top edges of the plates on the exquisitely set tables.  Invited guests slowly strolled into the room and mingled with one another while picking from the grape and fig platters that had been placed in random intervals along the length of the table.
           General Nikios paced in a corner, silently wondering about his own destiny.  He had hoped that Kranos would name him king for now, knowing that when Caenus was old enough, Caenus would assume rule. If I were king, he schemed, perhaps I could have the prince exiled and rule with absolute power. Perhaps send him on a modern wild fleece quest.
            Nautical mastermind, Akaikos, certainly desired the royal scepter and crown, however he knew that being the youngest of the generals, his chances would never look as good as they did right now. He had absolutely no desire to go to Samos, but how could he stage a coup… and whom would he recruit to support him?
            Diokles’s mind wandered, as he mingled through the crowd, thinking of what life would be like were he king. To be sure, Nikios topped the queue. How, then could he possibly create the necessary vacancy to take a more advantageous position in this royal race?

            Kranos and Alexis welcomed all guests into the hall.  Golan, finally feeling like his old self again after the long trip, had finally arrived. He approached and embraced first Caenus then Kalliste before turning the corner to enter the hall and embrace Alexis and Kranos. 
            A buzz permeated the hall. The air, filled with the scintillating aroma of roasted lamb and wine, crackled with such a high level of excitement and energy that no one saw the hand that grabbed Kranos’ wine goblet and slipped a poisonous concoction into it.
            Guests continued to enter the hall and locate their seating assignments. Once everyone was seated and ready for the reception to begin, Kranos stood from his throne of a seat at the middle of the table, directly beside Alexis. All chatter fell to the ground as the still muscular king stood.
            “Tonight we honor two great young men,” Kranos echoed through the silence.
            From his position toward the middle of the table, Golan turned and shot a look of pride toward Caenus who was sitting at one long end of the table.  The generals, seated together at the other end, each looked nervously at one another, trying to figure out who the second guest of honor would be.
            “These two men have shown both courage and valor in trying times, and have proven loyalty and allegiance to the kingdom of Iolkos,” Kranos continued.
            Golan next looked sidelong at each of the generals, who sat with their wives. He felt that surely the good king had something of import to say of one of the generals. He never suspected that the second guest of honor was in fact himself.  Caenus looked with dreamy admiration at his own beautiful new wife, who beamed with radiance.
            “To Iolkos!” Kranos said, lifting his goblet toward the rafters.
            “To Iolkos!” the guests roared back, echoing off the stone walls.
            “Take now your goblets in hand.  If they are not already filled with fine Samian wine, a gift from the esteemed royal family of Samos, let them now be filled.  For tonight, shall we first honor my son, Caenus…”
            Caenus stood as applause rang out, filling the hall to the rafters.
            “… And, to his wonderful new wife, Kalliste, the Princess of the Kingdom of Samos…”
            Applause continued to roar as she then rose to her feet, waving to all. 
            “…A marriage of empires, no doubt, but a marriage of hearts, first and foremost. Raise your goblets now until their bases are high in the air,” Kranos bellowed proudly, lifting his goblet and consuming the whole of its contents.
            When the roar subsided, Kranos continued, “Now… for the other great man I wish to honor this night.  Remember, I said that I wished to honor two great young men…”
            Caenus and Kalliste both replaced their seats, clasping one another’s hands tightly. The generals looked at one another with sidelong glances. Akaikos then shifted his gaze to Golan, still unsure of the direction Kranos would take.  Caenus also looked at Golan with a supportive smile then up at the generals, for he was not quite certain of whom his father would speak next.  Caenus wondered whether his father would speak of Golan’s bravery on the Aegean, or name a general to succeed as king.
            “I have taken on anotherrrr…” Kranos spoke slowly, slurring a bit, and taking a deep breath. “I have takennn…” Clearing his throat, he paused and then tried to continue. Kranos began feeling queasy and weak. Then his stomach felt as if it was being eaten out from the inside. Kranos clutched his stomach and, again tried to continue through the pain.
            “I have taken onnn anotherrr s-s-s…” That was all Kranos managed to get out before he crumpled to the floor, his crown clanking as it tumbled from his head.

Friday, February 11, 2011

"That's YAmore" Blogfest


Thanks to the Oasis For YA for hosting this lovey dovey mushy "That's YAmore" blogfest. Whether you write sci-fi or fantasy or dystopian or historical... it's difficult not to get caught up in a good romance. And with that in mind, this YAmore blogfest showcases, in 250 words, some of the best romantic scenes in YA WIP's anywhere in the blogosphere. Please click through the link above to visit the other participants.
This will probably be my final blogfest post from my Caenus WIP. (subsequent blogfests will likely feature other WIP's I have in the cooker.) In this scene, Caenus, who has been doggedly pursuing Adriande, finally gets his chance to kiss her.
****

Caenus and Adriande walked through one of the six arched openings to the ornately constructed fountain. Torches illuminated their steps. They descended a short stairwell to the basins to withdraw some water.
Cupping their hands and dipping them into the basin, they both took a few sips of water and then paused for a moment, turning to face one another in the half-light. Caenus tensed, sensing the perfect moment had come. His gaze locked on her. Neither moved an inch.
Go for it. It won’t get any better than this. Caenus grabbed her right hand with his left. He waited. She didn’t jerk away.
He extended his right hand upward. Caressing her shoulder, he slowly moved his hand to the back of her neck. Pulling her close, the space between them evaporated and their lips grazed several times before joining. A slight jolt of energy shocked Caenus, and held him frozen as she returned his kiss. His heart beat faster. She stole his breath.
Their lips broke contact. He inhaled deeply. Completely enveloped in her rose-petal and honeyed essence, Caenus struggled for words, but found none. After staring at one another for a collection of moments, Adriande giggled.
“You do something to me, Caenus of Iolkos,” she breathed.
When Caenus finally caught his breath, he responded, “Likewise.”
Adriande threw her arms around his neck and squeezed tightly. The embrace lingered as they simply enjoyed the closeness.
 “I’ll make you deal, Caenus. If you can win the games, perhaps I’ll come visit your Iolkos.” 

Monday, February 7, 2011

"It Was A Dark And Stormy" Blogfest


Thank you to Brenda Drake over at Brenda Drake Writes for hosting this "It Was A Dark And Stormy" Blogfest. That is such an awesome title for this contest, which calls forth everyone's first line from a finished manuscript. And yes there are prizes, so click through the link above to view the other entries.

So here is the first line from Caenus:

Prince Caenus deflected a thrust from his friend’s sword, feeling the heat of his father’s gaze needling his skin.

Friday, January 21, 2011

Birthday Bash Blogfest


Thank you to Tessa Conte over at Tessa's Blurb for hosting this Birthday Blogfest. And by the way... HAPPY BIRTHDAY TESSA!! Many Happy Returns!

In this blogfest we were to post a portion of our WIP that featured a birthday celebration. My selection is from my currently querying project, Caenus And The Quiver Of Artemis. Make sure you click through Tessa's link above to see the other entries.

*****

Standing beside a large tent, Kranos waved his hand for the boys to join him there. Bright blue flags flew all around the agora, marking the boundaries of the royal celebration. Four large urns sent flames toward the midnight blue encasing the heavens.
     The king embraced his son. "Welcome, Caenus. I have waited for this day since your birth. Let us enter the tent together."
     Galen ducked his head in first to give the father and son ample space for their grand entry. Next, Kranos and Caenus slipped through the tent flaps to a raucous applause by nearly seventy people. In attendance were aristocrats and wealthy merchants and their sons of varying ages. Also present were the three generals and their sons.
     Alexis, stunning queen of Iolkos, smiled widely as her son entered. She had been sitting on a kline, braiding her dark hair over her shoulder, but rose to her feet when Caenus walked in. "Happy birthday," she said embracing him warmly.
     "Thank you, Mother."
     Awash in sepia tones from flickering firelight, the tent’s interior smelled of bears’ claws and lions’ breath. At the far end of the tent, two boars roasted over a crackling spit. In the foreground, a long table divided the tent equally. Younger boys chased one another, while young girls filled water goblets from large amphorae jugs they could barely wield.
     The din died to a whisper as the king spoke, "Tonight esteemed guests, let us celebrate my son’s emergence into the majority. No longer a boy, but a man!"
     The tent erupted in rollicking cheers.
     "Here shall he prove his worthiness," the king continued. "Send forth six young men of comparable age to test my son."
     Here we go, Caenus thought. Galen ran up first, followed by five other similarly aged young men, some broader, some thinner than the prince.
     Kranos clapped his hands twice. "Bring in the wine!" Two young girls appeared carrying a goatskin of diluted wine, which they emptied in to six tall clay jugs.
     "To begin the celebration, each boy shall drain the contents of their amphora jug to honor Dionysus. First to finish shall receive an olive branch," the king bellowed. "Boys, take your places."
     Each young man surrounded one end of the long table, grasping tightly their jugs. I knew my father had something strange planned. Caenus inhaled deeply, looking into the excited eyes of his competitors.
     "Ready, Go!" Kranos belted.
     Each young man hoisted his amphora to his lips and chugged the measures of wine and water. Some spilled from the sides of their mouths, soiling their tunics.
     First to finish was a broad shouldered general’s son. He slammed the jug down on the table and threw his hands skyward in victory. A scrawny aristocrat’s son finished second. Caenus finished third. Galen next. Amidst a ringing of applause, Kranos presented the olive branch to the victor.
     What had that been about? What was it meant to prove? Caenus wondered.
     His belly swollen with wine, the prince sighed. He studied his father’s face for sign of disappointment that he hadn’t won the wine-drinking event, but the king’s face offered no signs to be read. Nevertheless, Caenus felt the sting of disappointment.
     "All right, boys," the king continued, not even acknowledging the guest of honor. "The next event shall be an arm wrestling challenge to prepare my son for the Isthmian Games."
     The crowd fell silent. The music even stopped.
     Alexis approached Kranos. "Is there something you need to tell me?" she asked, hands on her hips, her eyes narrowed.
     "About what?" Kranos replied, annoyed at the question.
     "You’re sending our last son to the games? To death?"
     "Yes!" Kranos spoke above her to the entire crowd. "As many of you know, Iolkos has had a poor showing at the Isthmian games, losing two princes in the process. Caenus is now eligible, and he too shall compete."
     "Look at him!" an unidentified voice sailed above the crowd’s din. “He’s not ready! He’ll never win!"
     Caenus’ posture shrank as a cacophony of chatter criss-crossed the tent.
     Kranos blared, "Caenus will prove once and for all if my blood is weak or not. The House of Kranos is in his hands. For if he does not return, then the Fates have already cast his lot."
     Alexis drew close to her son and grasped his hand tightly, the warmth of her love passing through Caenus’ skin. "I won’t let you send him!" Alexis spoke sternly.
     The crowd’s collective voice again hushed to a whisper.
     "What did you say?" the king growled.
     Alexis stood in front of her son, a lioness protecting her cub. “Haven’t we lost enough sons to the games?" Tears rivered down her flushed cheeks.
     "It’s not your decision! The future of Iolkos rests in his hands. If he doesn’t go and win, he’ll be viewed as weak, as will the whole lot of us. We’ll never see a season unencumbered by assaults against the kingdom. Epirus smelled the stench of my fallen sons when they attacked. Did they teach us nothing? Simply returning from the games is no better. He must return victorious to erase all doubts!"
     A single clap pierced the silence. Then another and another. The staccato applause rolled to a thunderous ovation of the king’s words. The enthusiasm bolstered Caenus, yet made him no more confident than he had been.
     "Let’s get on with it then," Kranos bellowed. "Young men take your places for the arm wrestling competition. To the victor, another olive branch."

Thursday, January 13, 2011

ARTFUL THURSDAY: Let's Get Ready To Rumble-- Arena as Art!


Given that the Isthmian Games figure largely in my current WIP, today's Artful Thursday takes a peek at Ancient Greek arenas, theatres, and stadiums. My MC Caenus travels from Iolkos to Corinth to compete in these fierce games. Follwing is a smattering of what he likely found when he arrived.

Enjoy.

p.s. It's all right if you allow the same jitters and nervous anxiety to inhabit your soul as you try to *feel* what Caenus must have felt.














Thursday, November 11, 2010

ARTFUL THURSDAY: Graceful But Deadly- Centaurs

Since I have been deep into writing a series of scenes in my WIP "Caenus" involving a centaur, Kheiron (Chiron), to be exact... I figured this week's Artful Thursday should be devoted to the centaur (from Ancient Greek: Κένταυροι – Kéntauroi). These images range from the historical to the fantastical. Enjoy.



















Thursday, October 7, 2010

"At First Sight" Blogfest Entry


Do you remember what it was like the first time you saw someone who made your heart skip... your cheeks flush... your knees buckle... your stomach flutter?

"At First Sight" is a Blogfest hosted by Jacee Drake that explores that *moment* or collection of moments when two people first meet and time stands still. Following is an excerpt from my WIP where Caenus first meets the luminescent but mysterious Adriande.

***

While watching Golan lose another arm wrestling match, Caenus’ eyes rose in time to notice a group of young ladies inconspicuously entering the taverna. Hooded cloaks draped their heads and shoulders, understandable at this time of evening, as the night breeze that swept in from water could send shivers, even in the summer. The cloaks also helped to hide their femininity, as women were not typically in the streets at this time of the evening, certainly not in an establishment of that sort.
The hoods, however, failed to completely cover their faces and their beauty was evident to anyone paying attention. A brown waterfall of hair spilled from one lady’s hood, framing a small round face.  The second lady’s hair had been well tucked. The third had hair the color of fire and a short lock poked defiantly from the top of her hood to fall gently across her forehead. She quickly repositioned her hood to conceal the stubborn strand, but it refused to go willingly.
The young ladies sat down at a corner table, requesting bread, olive oil and water. The red-haired beauty shot furtive looks around the room as if she was looking for someone, expecting someone. Caenus kept one eye on them and one eye on Golan, seeing that he got into no trouble.
By no means had he come to the games to chat up local girls, but strangely, he felt compelled to act. As the night wore on, Caenus seized an opportunity to talk to the fire-haired maiden. 
“Trying not to be seen?” Caenus asked, slipping up to her from behind, noting her dull gray laborer’s cloak.
“Apparently it’s not working,” she replied dryly.
Taken aback by her cold delivery, a curiously confused expression wrinkled Caenus’ face. She radiated a warm glow like freshly stoked embers, luring him, begging him to keep talking. He paused a moment then tried to elicit a warmer response, “Are you here for the games?”
“Obviously you are,” she responded, shooting a glance at the fever yellow, contestants’ headband wrapped loosely around Caenus’ forehead.
“All right, let me guess...  You think the games are for meatheads and showoffs with nothing better to do with their time and their lives. Am I correct?”
“Impeccably.”
“It’s full of young nobles sent to impress their king fathers and princess brides-to-be, yes?”
“Perceptive.”
“Well then, I suppose it’s a good thing I’m not royalty, eh?”
She shot a glance toward him, raising a naturally arched eyebrow. “You’re not? Everyone in the games is a prince of something or another, are they not?”
“Not me.  I’m here for the glory alone- a poor goat herder from Iolkos creating a name for myself and looking to win favor from the gods,” he replied, which was not terribly far from the truth.
“You don’t look so poor.” She gestured to his well-constructed attire.
“Borrowed,” he replied matter-of-factly. “Solicit, scrounge, and steal. It’s a hard life on the streets of Iolkos.  Nothing you’d know about.”
     “Borrowed, eh? That’s funny,” she chuckled, looking around the room for her friends who had wandered off. “Well, nice meeting you...” she offered with an emotionless pause, urging him to fill in the name blank.
“Caenus,” he beamed with confidence. “And you are?”
“Adriande,” she deadpanned. Her emerald eyes contrasted with her fire-hued tendrils and alabaster skin. She turned on her heels to leave.
Caenus smiled to himself, smitten with his new acquaintance. Lost in thought, he watched the girl exit. Certainly, she must be here to watch the games. For who in Corinth could escape the magnetic pull of the games?  And, if she indeed intended to watch the contests, perhaps I could impress her enough to somehow gain her company again. I think there’s more to her than met the eye. If I ever see her again, I’ll know for certain. 
 

Tuesday, October 5, 2010

TUESDAY TIDBITS: What's Your Best Pitch?

I know that for many of you, the question above is colored by MLB's "Hunt for October." Images of Nolan Ryan, Randy Johnson, and Pedro Martinez (pictured below) come to mind. I certainly understand... 'tis the season, after all!


But, I am not talking about heaters, sliders, change-ups,  breaking balls, or knuckle balls. I am talking about Pitching Your Story to an agent or editor. It's likely more nerve wracking than standing on the mound as Albert Pujols walks to the plate with 2 outs. An MLB pitcher has a stable of pitches at his disposal, not to mention three strikes to get you out.

When you pitch to an agent or editor you have ONE (1) chance to make an impression. Sound daunting...? It is!

Never fear, though, I have found three very sound posts that helped me distill my pitch. Hopefully they can help you as well.

How To Write A One Sentence Pitch

How To Write The One Sentence, One Paragraph, and Two Paragraph Pitch

11 Questions For Crafting A Pitch

I am participating in a pitch contest over at Market My Words and here is my 2 sentence pitch:

"When a prince in ancient Greece is forced by his father to compete in the games that already claimed his brothers' lives, he tangles with a brash competitor who'll stop at nothing to win. The prince's biggest test comes when he falls for a mysterious local girl at the games who spirals him toward a fight-to-the-death for her hand."

That's what I'm entering, so any comments you all have would be appreciated. By all means, tell me what you think.

Saturday, October 2, 2010

"They're People Too" Blogfest Entry


 Thank you to Tessa Conte over at "Tessa's Blurb" for hosting this blogfest entitled "They're People Too!" In this blogfest we were charged with personifying an abstract concept. As some who've read my snippits before can attest, I like bringing the weather to life.
 The following entry is from my third book in my "Caenus" trilogy. 
 ***
At the Iolkosian base on the shores of Ares’ Altar, campfires pitched flames skyward as guardsmen gazed, keeping vigilant watch for any movement.  Their eyes, great deceivers, told them the untruth that all was calm. Only their fluttering hearts could have detected reality. All but too late, as if they realistically had had a chance to defend themselves at all.
            With shocking brutality, Boreas, the vicious winged god of the north wind combined with Kaikos, god of the northeast wind, and the Anemoi-Thuellai tempests, spewing a devouring compilation of storm winds down upon the Iolkosian base camp. Appearing as four, immense, ghost-white mares stampeding across the rough, uneven plain, the wicked Anemoi-Thuellai disintegrated into an invisible fury that wrought swift havoc on the unsuspecting marines and ships.
            The winds churned the earth, howling like rabid wolves, destroying everything in their paths, and tearing blades of grass from the soil.  Men flew in to the air, crashing to the ground like rain. Boreas ripped tents to shreds, leaving them to drift in the air.  The ships were pushed back over the sharp rocks, tearing the hull bottoms. Kaikos crashed the ships together like children’s toys, splinters strewn across the beachhead.  When the display of brute strength ended, nothing stood. Not a tent. Not a ship. Not a man. Nothing.
            And, as quickly as they had appeared, the winds returned from whence they’d come, clearing the night sky.  The stars shone down unhindered upon the devastation.  Selene’s moon begrudgingly illuminated the remains.

Sunday, September 26, 2010

My First SCBWI Conference

Soooo, I have just returned from attending my very first SCBWI Carolinas conference. Wow! I am so inspired! In fact I've never been so inspired to toil lovingly on/ at my craft. Out of respect for the presenters and conference goers who paid money to go to the conference, I won't tell the specifics of what I learned... but I feel like a pirate who has just returned to his cove with trunks and sacks full of treasure.

I learned about Plot and Pacing from a masterful author, Alan Gratz. I enjoyed the nuggets dropped by Liz Waniewski, editor at Dial, on what editors look at when new projects cross their desks. Elizabeth Dulemba spoke on breaking into the children's market...(she made an iPad app of her picture book... How Cool Is That?!?!?!) Super Agent Chris Richman from Upstart Crow Literary spoke on whether or not you *need* an agent... and why you probably do! A pleasant surprise, was hearing and meeting Fran Slayton, award winning author, who now lives in Charlottesville, VA... My Home Town!! Holla! Lastly Alvina Ling of Little, Brown spoke eloquently on the differences between Literary fiction and commercial fiction... 'cause I *sure didn't know before I heard her speech.

All in all I had an awesome time. Though, one moment in particular made me feel like I was at my first junior high school dance... and had to walk all the way across the *empty* dancefloor to ask the prettiest girl in the school to slow dance. (DRUMROLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL)
I read (volunteered to read) a portion of "Caenus" at an open mic. O.M.G. I mean seriously... my hands were shaking... palms sweaty... throat dry... voice cracking... but I made it through! Why? Beacuse I was determined to not leave there with a regret. That didn't help me heart thundering beneath my oxford. But I'm glad I did it!

I'm so glad I went and eagerly await the spring one. Actually I'm planning on going to the national SCBWI conference in NYC. That will be a *whole 'nother level* of nervousness!!

See you there!

Friday, August 27, 2010

"Word Painting" Blogfest Entry

Thank you to Dawn Embers for hosting this Word Paint Blogfest. Please visit her Blog to see all the other Blogfest participants.

This entry is from the second book in my current series of WIP's. The Neapolitan Empire has been offended and is retaliating by sending some vessels to wreak havoc on their enemies. I hope you enjoy.

***

            The next evening, after a full day of preparations and loading of supplies and munitions, Demas stood atop a platform nearly twenty hands high.  Below him, at attention, stood the captains and crews of the six Invisibles and a twenty trireme fleet.

            “Tonight, men, you embark on an important mission.  Let stealth be your shipmate, and cunning be your companion as you wage distress and suffering upon the Iolkosians and Samians!” Demas demanded.

            A dull rumble of spear handles tamping the ground filled the crisp, dusk air.

            “I am aware that I may be sending some of you to Hades’ doorstep over the coming days, however, the fleet that sails this night is but a sample of what shall await our guests when they most assuredly return our favor. The heart of but one of our marines beats as strong as that of five Iolkosians.”

            Spear thudding again drummed up and down the port.

            Waving his hands in the air to quiet his congregation, Demas continued, “I heard an old proverb once, one you would do well to keep in mind: Two lions paced hungrily atop a mountain bluff overlooking a group of antelope.  The one lion said to the other, ‘If we run down there as fast as we can, we are each guaranteed to get at least one or two of them.’  The second lion replied, ‘Nonsense! We are going to walk down there and get them all!’

            The men before Demas erupted into riot of thudding and the clanking of swords against shields accented by whistles and shouts.

            “For King and Empire!” Demas blared loudly into the deafening response.

            “King and Empire!” the mass roared in kind, before turning toward their respective ships.

            Demas watched as the crews of the six pentekonters and twenty triremes boarded their vessels set against a breathtaking, fiery horizon.  Helios’ chariot pushed low to the edge of the heavens, behind clouds it had set ablaze, illuminating from the rear.  The coral and fuchsia sky in the west reflected off the surface of the Aegean, turning it into a blinding mirror, before dissolving into a darkening lilac. Persimmon tendrils spun off, spidering into an indigo haze on the eastern side of the heavens.

            In one hour’s time, each of the twenty-six Neapolitan vessels had put to sea. Pulling out of the military harbor, one following the next, they passed one of the oldest lighthouse on the northwest corner of Thassos, then a small, torch lit fishing wharf of a small village from which a narrow, sandy road wound up into the countryside. Soon, the clear waters of the northern Aegean lapped against each hull.  The fleet of long oars sailed together for hours before splitting around Lemnos, three Invisibles and ten triremes toward each destination; Iolkos and Samos.  The mission over the coming days was simple; to wreak havoc, cause damage, anger and alarm, ensure that their flags were seen, inciting revenge filled hearts, then retreat and escape… in that order. 

Monday, August 9, 2010

Changes Blogfest Entry

  Thank you again for Elizabeth Mueller for hosting this "Changes" Blogfest. I have another entry over at my alter ego, Scott Noir's lair.

In this scene, from the second installment of the trilogy,  Caenus and Kalliste have both been changed by love.

 ***
Iolkosians filled the streets along the waterfront in celebration as the ships pulled into the inner harbor. Caenus, donning his royal raiment and Kalliste in her white silk robes with crimson trim, stepped into their wedding chariot again and paraded through the stone-paved streets, weaving through each of the grids. As the betrothed serpentined through the crowd, onlookers and well-wishers threw confetti and shouted blessings of prosperity, in some cases, impeding the horses’ progress. Caenus did not mind the frequent stops, however, because these were all his friends and family… and most importantly, Kalliste’s extended family now. In return, the happy couple waved warmly.
            Grasping Kalliste’s hand tightly, feeling the tingle of new love’s warmth emanating through her palm, Caenus reveled in the glory his new bride afforded him. He radiated from within, feeling sweetly suspended in a euphoric state, illuminated by the goddess who stood beside him.  His bride’s beauty stole his breath every time he turned to look at her along the ride.
            And for her part, Kalliste felt as if she had joined her mate of a previous life… as if the gods had somehow placed her back within the land of the living to once again experience all of life’s pleasures. She was not certain of how she could feel so strongly for someone she had known so briefly. From Corinth to this moment had been a whirlwind, sweeping all involved into a pleasant summer’s storm of pain-balanced pleasure.  For, the pain of being forced to marry someone unworthy of her heart’s blessings… and having that ordeal end tragically… only to then fall for the one who felled the man she was to wed… to then nearly perish, herself… and to find out that her truest love nearly perished as well… all the way to the immense pleasure that anticipation affords…  the sweet anticipation of marriage to her truest love… the pleasures of exploration both the night following the wedding and the day after… and the night yet to come… and many more nights to come… Caenus mirrored his bride’s emotions in so many ways, having experienced his own storm of sorts… having been right there beside his sweet girl for much of it all.
            Later in the evening, Helios’ chariot had driven its light below the western horizon as Mount Pelion shadowed the first night back in Iolkos.  After visiting the sanctuary within the palace to receive continued blessings from the gods, Caenus and Kalliste walked to the private bathhouse.
            Once the servants had heated the water sufficiently, Caenus banished them.  Kalliste sat on a marble bench a few feet away from the bath and began to remove her sandals. Caenus walked over and knelt in front of her.  He ran his fingers through her flame-red tresses, looking into her eyes and becoming lost once again… lost in the moment between divinity and mortality… lost in the moment between whether the mind registers pain or pleasure… lost in the moment between lightning and its accompanying thunder.
            He unpinned her chiton and slowly removed her silk robes, laying the finely constructed garments on the smooth marble beside her.  He then allowed her to disrobe him, his cloak hitting the floor in a heap. Hand-in-hand they descended the stairs into the in-ground bath.
            “How is it that I have been so blessed?” Kalliste cooed, running her hands over Caenus’ muscular shoulders and arms.
            “Are you the only one so blessed, my sweet?” Caenus responded, with a wink.

            “It is amazing, is it not? How the gods guided us together across this great pond we call the Aegean… how we fit together so tightly as puzzle pieces.  I press my heart against yours, chest-to-chest now… do they not beat in unison? Do you not feel that? How peculiar a sensation that is?”
            “Neither the muses nor the fates could ever have written the intertwining of our lives any better,” Caenus responded. “But, let us be careful not to squander this moment with the words created by mortals to describe this event conjured by the gods. For it is, you know… tonight, and every other night that I can embrace you, is a night afforded us by the gods.”

Saturday, July 31, 2010

"Milestones" Blogfest Entry

 This is my entry for the Milestones Blogfest hosted by Donna Hole. Thank you to Donna for hosting.
 The set up for this scene is that it's the final showdown in the Isthmian Games in Ancient Greece, a sword fight to determine the victor. Our protag, Caenus competes against Makedon, our bad boy antag. In this instance it is Makedon who is achieving the Milestone. 


The fifth stage of the games had reared its head, a rarity revered by the gods for its significance. Its very necessity spawned a din of chatter from Corinth to Olympus, deities clamoring to favor the victor. Two soldiers, nigh evenly matched, were pitted in a clash of sword and sandal, of will and might. And, though Zeus frowned upon it, the gods could scarcely tear themselves away from spending ardor on the two greatest warriors in the land. From Apollo and Artemis to Ares and Athena, gods and goddesses alike descended in spirit and form to witness the event.
This fifth stage had been solely reserved for circumstances of relieving a tie in the preceding four. At the previous two Isthmian Games, Makedon had dominated the initial four stages, a feat easily accomplishable by a young man of his talents and pedigree. His father, Hypatios of Neapolis, had enjoyed similar success in his youth, a veritable legend at the games. All was to say that Makedon was known by many of the gods. As yet, Caenus was not.
The unlikely and unknown challenger to this year’s crown of laurels, Caenus now knocked at the door of myth and legend… fate and destiny, threatening to dethrone the defending champion. Perhaps the previous day’s encounter with the elderly gentleman and Caenus’ subsequent victory were part of a larger divine design… almost as if there were immortal forces at work.
The entire arena floor had been cleared. No circles, no rings, and no rules bound them, save the condition for winning. The first contestant to draw blood from the other’s torso with their sword would be the victor.
Stepping to his commencement line in the center of the arena floor, Makedon motioned his hands upward, roiling the crowded cauldron to a fevered pitch. His sinewy muscles glistened with the oil he had applied as he took up his xiphos, double-edged, single-handed sword wielded by many common soldiers, and assumed a ready position opposite his foe.  Caenus stepped to his line, focused, determined. Acutely aware of the significance and potential audience, he picked up his xiphos sword, and set his feet. After confirming that each contestant was ready, the judge dropped his hand to initiate the stage and swiftly removed himself from the arena floor.
The competitors began a fierce melee dance. Their swords clanked and sparked, dust swirling with every slide of their feet. Helios’ unyielding rays stung the contestants’ skin as they used nearly every inch of the arena floor in avoiding each other’s blade.  Caenus struck first on Makedon’s right shoulder after the Neapolitan had overextended himself.  A simple flesh wound, earning no points.
Caenus struck again shortly after the first wound with a stab to Makedon’s right thigh.  In a simultaneous move, Makedon sliced a gash in Caenus’ right arm.  Exterior and perimeter wounds were not only fair, but also expected.  With two experienced and skilled swordsmen, an interior torso wound would be extremely difficult to achieve.  Smart strategy sought to inflict minor wounds in an attempt to wear the opponent down until they lowered their guard enough to allow the victorious wound.  That said, at no time was it permissible to inflict a killing wound, punishable by death in return.
The contestants continued in like manner for longer than the crowd had anticipated, its angst growing by every passing moment, their chants and cheers growing louder and louder.  Caenus competed with ferocity, his sandals never quite allowing a severe cut to be made, though he had caused several strategic strikes. Weakened and frustrated, Makedon sensed the momentum of the match swinging away from him. An image of his father’s scowl flashed before his eyes and he knew the wrath he would face if he were to lose. So, his mind concocted a devious plan.
As any great warrior, Caenus smelled that moment when victory was nearest and he lunged for Makedon, narrowly missing the torso, striking his opponent’s forearm.  Makedon fell, turning away from his opponent. Theorizing that Makedon’s torso would be exposed when he turned back around, Caenus closed for the chance he had longed for. Victory was so close he could smell its savory aroma, taste its sweetness like summer fruit. He’d win his father’s respect and Adriande!
But then Makedon wheeled around with a hand full of dust and sand, tossing it directly into Caenus’ eyes.  Momentarily blinded, Caenus was unable to prepare for Makedon’s slice at his midsection, spilling a small amount of blood to the guilty sand.
            At that moment, Ares chuckled from high upon his Thracian throne, pleased at his protégé’s resourceful approach to victory. So too smiled Hephaestus from deep within his forge on famed Lemnos. Athena, however, cast a disdainful glare upon the arena, as did fleet-footed Hermes.
            “You filthy coward!” Caenus yelled from behind a dusty veil.
            Makedon laughed. “You are the one with dirt on your face… and you call me filthy?”
            Caenus lunged toward his face with careless abandon. Makedon’s sword tip halted his progress. “Easy now… Shall I widen the wound?”
            By then, Corinthian judges and guardsmen had surrounded them in an effort to cool their tempers.
            “You cheated! You cheated because you knew you could not defeat me fairly?” Caenus yelled.
            With Caenus sufficiently restrained, Makedon remarked, “Cheat? I did no such thing. All is fair in love and war. Always remember that.”

Wednesday, June 30, 2010

"Bickering" Blogfest Entry

Thank you to Kristen at "Take It As It Comes" for hosting this Blogfest. Following is a scene involving a bit of bickering between some of my characters. Hope you enjoy.

“Are you alright, M’lord?” Golan asked, “You look as though Hades has appeared to you.”
“I think I just want to go lie down for a while,” Caenus replied, coughing. “Should be pretty exciting tomorrow, eh?”
“I should say so.”
They strolled back to their lodging rooms.  Passing a taverna, Golan asked, “Do you want to pass time for a while in here, grab a little something to eat?”
“Not really. The last time we came here, trouble found me.”
“I know. Last night was wild. Say, where’d you disappear to last night anyway? I turned around and you were gone.”
Caenus’ eyes began to sting. “I just stepped out to clear my mind and soothe my lungs with clean air,” Caenus said, thinking back to what really had happened.  After strolling the city streets, the young men finally arrived at the lodging rooms.
Inside the room, Caenus decided that if he could not tell his best friend, whom could he tell.  Besides, as he began to feel the strength of his convictions building within him, he knew that honor lay in declaring himself to his friend.
Breaking the silence, Caenus turned to his friend and declared, “It was me.”
“Who? What? What was you?”
“Today… Makedon’s challenge today… it was me he was referring to.”
“Impossible!” Golan exclaimed. “I was with you all night, I’ll stand up for you, M’lord.”
“Not all night… Do you remember when I said I stepped out for a moment?” Caenus asked with his heart and soul consumed with guilt. “Well, I talked to Adriande… er, Kalliste behind a temple last night.”
“Who is Adriande?” asked Golan, trying to piece it all together.
Caenus explained, “Adriande is Kalliste, and Kalliste is Adriande. They are one and the same.  I first met her at the Games in Corinth where she lied to me, telling me her name was Adriande. I really felt as though our souls meshed, but then she disappeared. I’ve no idea why I never told you of this before. I guess I thought that I would never see her again and that it wouldn’t matter… and then I saw her…”
“Yesterday, in the great hall at the feast,” Golan finished his friend’s sentence.
“Yes,” Caenus responded with a drooped demeanor.
“Ahhh, my friend… she was breathtaking yesterday, was she not? Sooo, you met her in Corinth? When did you find time?”
“It’s complicated… an much to cumbersome…”
Golan remained silent while his mind searched rapidly to fetch any memories of the girl at the games. None surfaced.
“So then, when I saw her last night, many dormant emotions came rushing back.  Without a doubt, Golan, I have fallen for her. Besides, she does not love him.  It was all arranged… their marriage. She does not love him!”
“Did you ever conceive of the possibility that she could have been playing games with you both, fully expecting this day to arrive?” Golan questioned.
“Oh no, not her. You don’t know her as I do! You have not talked to her!” responded Caenus forcefully.
“Women are devious.  She already lied to you once.  Wha…”
“She does not love him!!” Caenus shouted.
“She really set you up, my friend.  She has your loin cloth hanging on her wall and you do not even realize it.”
“You’re jealous aren’t you?” Caenus snapped. “You can’t conceive that a girl as beautiful as Kalliste could be interested in me!”
            “She does appear as a goddess, my friend…”
            “You are jealous!”
“What you see is a loyal friend who places no value on the lady companions of his friends.  I can’t believe you would accuse me of such.” Golan paused. “As a matter of fact, where was she today? Who should say she did not go back and tell Makedon everything just to ignite the flames of revenge? Did you ever consider that?”
Tears threatened to form in Caenus’ eyes, but could not push past the rage. Waves of anger and hurt washed over him at the possible truth of Golan’s words.  What bound Caenus like leather straps across his body, was the fact that he did love her… no matter what.
The two friends went to their separate corners, the chasm between them expanding. Golan stormed from the room, angered that his friend would ever choose a girl over his loyal friendship. He walked the streets until nightfall. Finding Poseidon’s Poison again, he dipped inside to soak his frustration in wine.

"Secret" Blogfest Entry

Thanks to Tara at Midnight Ink for hosting this Blogfest. Read below and discover my characters' secrets. Shhhh... My entry follows:


A grove of tall trees enveloped the temple toward the western edge of the city under the defensive wall’s shadow.  A dull glow emanated from within the temple, but Caenus did not enter.  He found the rear of it in short order, though it was so dark back there that Selene could not even see it.  He waited just long enough to curse his folly in coming, when he saw the hooded girl return.  Slender fingers emerged from under the cloak and lowered the hood… it was she!
“Caenus, I needed to see you.” Her rubied lips spoke softly, reddish-blonde hair framing her alabaster face. 
Caenus snapped. “Is that so? And, for what possible reason? You’ve obviously made your choice, Adriande… or is it… Kalliste?”
“Listen, I don’t have much time, and I have volumes to explain. I think I owe you at least that,” she said in hushed tones. “You have every right to be upset, but there are reasons… reasons for everything… First of all, my real name is Kalliste.  I am from Samos, the princess of King Dimitri and Queen Sybilla. I did not reveal my true identity to you in Corinth because I did not want anyone to know I was at the games.”
“Quite an elaborate lie… saying that you lived in Corinth!” Caenus responded coldly. “How did you even know so many details of that foreign city?”
“My father has worked hard to build trade routes throughout the Aegean. And, since he had no sons, he always treated me as if I was to be queen of Samos one day. So, I was forced to learn all the trade routes. Corinth was a frequent stop in our travels.”
“So why have you summoned me here, endangering my liberty in this hostile city?” Caenus’ voice crackled with short patience.
“To summarize, I have been arranged to marry Makedon for two years.  My father wanted me to marry a strong warrior prince to someday assume command over the military in Samos. But… I wanted to know if true love existed beyond the confines of arranged unions. I just wanted to see if there were any normal men in the world, outside of the circles in which I had normally traveled. My affections are not strong for royal men.  The pool of eligible princes has always tended to be arrogant and self-centered. I would just as soon marry for love than for kingdom and empire.”
“What happened to you at the games? We shared a nice evening and then you disappeared. And furthermore, I ran into Makedon tonight… he said you told him about us? What gives?”
“Yes, my love… that day at the festival in the agora… he saw me talking to you! I had to tell him something. So I did. I told him you were an inconsequential goat herder who was trying to bark up a claimed tree… that you meant nothing.”
“Inconsequential, eh…?” His tone rose.
“Lower your voice. Someone might hear you. This kingdom has spies who roam like devil ghosts. But… but, don’t you see…? After that, I had to leave Corinth. He would have seen straight through me… He would have seen the extent that I had fallen for you.”
“But, what of the night we spent touring Corinth by chariot?”
“I risked everything to see you that night! If you remember, I kept pulling my hood tightly around my head…”
“So were they all lies… those sweet words you so delicately dripped into my ears?”
Taking his trembling hands in hers, she gazed deep into his core. “Would I be here tonight, if they were lies?”
“Well, you have my attention…”
“When I first met you, my dearest Caenus, I let myself believe, if even for those short days, that the fantasy of an alternative could be a reality.  You have the qualities I desire most in a mate.  I don’t want to marry him. I want to marry a normal man like you… with out all of this,” She opened her arms, referring to the Empire of Neapolis.
Caenus’ anger dissipated. He found himself engulfed in the emotion of the moment. “We can run away together, tonight, and live normal lives.”
Her face lit up. “I don’t need all of this… lands, kingdoms, empires, royal alliances…  I could leave it all behind in an instant if I thought you loved me.  I would be a goat herder’s wife for the promise of love eternal.”
“Oh sure, look how much good that did Helen and Troy,” Caenus laughed.
“I guess that did end badly, eh?”
“I must tell you something, though.” Caenus paused, a nervous flutter clutching his chest. “I am not… I am not really a goat herder from Iolkos. I am the prince of Iolkos. And, I apologize for not tel…”
Kalliste laughed. “Ahhh, but I knew that. I played along simply because you were trying to seem normal… that… is what won my heart. Most princes aim to impress with all of their pomp. And, as I said, I don’t care so much for all of that.”
“Perhaps stealing you away in the night isn’t the best plan. The last thing our kingdoms need is to fight a needless war against each other. Besides, there is but one thing to do when two men love the same woman.”
Kalliste raised her eyebrows.
“Winner takes all, fight-to-the-death.”
“What? No! That is ridiculous!”
“I am serious.  I’ll challenge him tomorrow.”
“Absolutely not!  All are here to attend a wedding not an arena event!”
“No other option exists.  It seems to be the will of the gods. Since that day in the final stage of the tournament, the gods have seemingly willed another meeting between us… Makedon and me.  You once spoke to me about fate and destiny.  Well, I now hold them both in the palms of my hands.”
Ears perked, Ares cracked a smirk from his throne carved high in the Thracian peaks.
“Look at yourself!  You are becoming just like him, all that I detest,” she spoke through her tears. “I would expect that sort of bravado from Makedon, but not from you.  For Makedon, holding fate and destiny is to hold possessions and titles.”
They paced back and forth silently, meandering around the burial plots behind the temple.  “These men here,” Caenus began. “Did they exit this life having accomplished all they set out to accomplish?  Did they end up with the ones they truly loved? And, if they did not, of what importance was all else that they had?”
Kalliste shuffled quietly in the dark silence that swirled around them since the last word had been spoken.  Breaking the uncomfortable pause, Caenus sighed. “I have too much respect for our families… surely all out war would ensue. Did it not for the Greeks and Trojans?”  He took a long pause and continued, “My heart bears so much affection for you that I would rather see you marry another man in the safety of peace, than to throw our kingdoms and armies into the cross-fire between the gods who seemingly will this marriage and those who would oppose it in a test of power.  Ares and Hades would love a fierce to-the-death battle to drool over, possibly leading to all-out war across our vast lands.  Hades is always searching for new souls to claim.”
“Yes, and the God of War is a truly skilled instigator,” she added.
“Then, it is settled,” he said amiably, belying his true feelings. His face softened, demeanor saddened, for he had yet again lost to Makedon. The pain stung even more this time, the finality more unbearable. He felt as though someone was tearing his heart from his chest. But he also knew the alternative. And, besides, if fate and destiny were truly at play, and the gods intended for he and Kalliste to be together, then the opportunity would show its face in some other way. Conversely, if it was not meant to be… then, it simply was not meant to be. “I will show my support at the ceremony tomorrow with prayers and blessings of good will for you both.”  They hugged warmly in the crisp night air.  Kalliste turned, flipped the hood of her cloak over the top of her head and disappeared around the corner.  A sudden, cold breeze whipped through the trees. Steps away from turning the corner himself, he felt a peculiar sense that he was not alone.  His eyes, well adjusted to the darkness, scanned the unfamiliar landscape, but seeing nothing, he continued around the corner and returned to his lodging for some needed sleep.

Sunday, February 14, 2010

Caenus and Kalliste: A New Beginning

As most of you who follow me know, I am re-writing Caenus and The Quiver of Artemis. Hell, it may even have a new name by the time it's done. What it will also have is more intense action and more developed relationships. And... more romance. Oh, rest assured, it's still PG-13 on the romance front. But their love is more intense. (I do have an alter ego Scott Noir... but he's not touching this story!)

So in the spirit of Valentine's Day and all, I decided to reveal a bit of what I'm re-writing... a teaser if you will. To set it up: Caenus has already met his fire-haired love interest at the Isthmian Games, and felt the bite of her sharp tongue and indifference, as she is over and done with egotistical princes. A few days later, Caenus notices her at a festival and decides to charge the windmill yet again.
 

I present to you... Caenus... and Kalliste (posing as Adriande)
He approached the beauty, who ate with her friends from an over-sized fivefold cup offering wine, cheese, honey, bread, and olive oil. As he approached and opened his mouth to speak, she slowly turned to look at him. Her torch-lit emeralds cast a spell upon him and not a word escaped his parted lips. She smiled broadly, flattered as much by his genuine attraction as by his humility, a trait she found scarce in other young princes.

Her friends both looked at her with arched brows. After a pause, she nodded them away and turned back to the Iolkosian.

"Caenus... is it?"
"Yes M'lady." he fumbled nervously.
"Has my name took leave of you this quickly?"
"No, no, nooo... Adriande... see, I remembered."
"Pretty brave of you to punch that bull in the nose, eh? Were you not afraid of that terrible beast?"
"Survival calls for many tactics," he began. "W-w-wait a moment... you were watching that contest?"
"Yes, I saw a little..."
"What of the race yesterday... did you see that as well?"
"Not much to see really, except the beginning and end..."
"D-d-did you see the end?" he interjected, his voice pitched highly.
"Quite a finish, I must say," she smiled. "You may just win this thing, eh?"
"Well..." Caenus cast his eyes downward. "Makedon... he is a divine warrior it seems."

Adriande rolled her eyes, shifting them furtively from side to side. She paused, chewing her olive oil saturated bread end. After washing it down with a sip of wine, she spoke slowly, "I shall make you a deal. If you can best him... if you can win these games... I shall clasp your hand in marriage."

Caenus' heart stopped, rejecting fully what his ears knew he had heard. The only life he felt was the energy he absorbed from her eyes looking straight into his. The only air he breathed was the air she exhaled before his face. What she had said was that... he could win the crown of laurels, his father's respect, and the hand of the goddess before him? When his heart began again, a trickle of perspiration divided his brow.

"M'lady, I now ha..."
"Please... call me Adriande."
"Adriande... I now have more motivation than should be allowed a single man."
"Indeed you do."

A wry smile brought a twinkle to her eyes as she gazed deeply into his. Detecting no ego, no agenda, and no malice... none of the attributes so loathed in Makedon... she decided that if this goatherder could actually win the games, he would be well worth the trouble that was certain to come. His eyes had invited her into his unguarded core and held her captive. Who was she kidding... win or lose... she was his. He just did not know it yet.

"May the gods favor your victory, Caenus. Fare you well tomorrow." She lightly grazed his muscular upper arm and then turned to rejoin her friends.

Caenus barely breathed in the moments it took her to leave him. A warmth brewed in is soul, fire radiating outward in concentric rings. He had fallen headlong under her spell, yet he still knew frighteningly little about the mystery girl.

Where did she live? Who was her father? And how, as radiant as she looked, did she have no claims against her? Caenus sensed he was being led into a hornet's nest, but he cared not.