Talk:Illicit Affairs/GA1
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Reviewer: Pamzeis (talk · contribs) 13:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this one. Will try not to screw anything up. Pamzeis (talk) 13:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
Prose
editand some picked it as an album highlight
— is this lead-worthy? If it's only "some" critics?It received a silver certification from the British Phonographic Industry (BPI).
— I also don't think this is lead worthy; it's not particularly impressive (for Swift, at least)- I've moved some stuff around in #Background and composition, which I hope you don't mind. You can revert me if you disagree
Swift recorded an stripped-down
— what does "stripped-down" mean??
It means that there are fewer instruments used for a particular recording compared to the original. If this still confuse you, I would remove it. Gained (talk) 14:16, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
journalists described it
— is "it" referring to the song or Swift's performance or the song's bridge or Swift's performance of said bridge?her 2018 single "Getaway Car"
— I don't think it's necessary to say "Getaway Car" was a single—it was only one in Australia and New Zealand (so it's not really well known as a single) and being a single wasn't a defining characteristic (if that makes sense)lauded of how Swift "outdone herself"
— doesn't seem grammatically correct to me. If it is tho, then it doesn't read very wellIn a 2022 review
— it's not exactly a review; I think it would be more accurate to refer to this as a ranking
Done all except where noted. Gained (talk) 14:16, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
Sourcing
editCritics often praised
— Source?
Done Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
- Is Richard from WP:MEDIUM a subject matter expert?
They are a member since 2018 but that's it, so I ommited it. Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
- Are Beats Per Minute and Sputnikmusic reliable?
Both reviews are included in Metacritic, which aggregates reviews from "major" mainstream critics to provide ratings of albums. Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
- Spotchecks (Version reviewed):
- fn 1: doesn't seem to support
after the cancellation of a concert tour in support of her previous studio album Lover (2019)
- fn 13:
- fn 19:
- fn 31:
(though "vocally astounding" tells the reader a lot more about what the critic thought than "marvellous" IMO)
- fn 1: doesn't seem to support
Good point. Gained (talk) 14:36, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
- fn 37:
- fn 37:
Done all except the fn 1 and where noted. Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
Other than that, I think this article's good to go. Ping me in any replies! Pamzeis (talk) 13:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Pamzeis, I have addressed all of your comments except fn1, which I will be doing tomorrow. Gained (talk) 14:25, 7 October 2023 (UTC)
- @Pamzeis, I have remove fn1 and its info because I don't think it will disturb anything to the article. Gained (talk) 02:29, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
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Second look
editWent through the article a second time and made a few copy-edits. I have one comment tho:
her fury takes it down in the process
— is a bit confusing. What is "it"? How does fury take something down? What process?
That's it! If you could clarify that for me, I think this would be good to go! Pamzeis (talk) 05:48, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
Done. I hope it makes sense. Gained (talk) 06:29, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
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Third look
editLooks good! Passing the article. Pamzeis (talk) 11:20, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
- Thank you! Gained (talk) 11:33, 8 October 2023 (UTC)
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