Jai M {Cat Crazy Dragon }'s Reviews > Phoenixfall

To continue, or not to continue?? [There are 9 of them 😱]

Definite improvement over B1 - we’ve moved into a mostly solid 3⭐️ 😂

What didn’t work:
*Still too many spelling and grammatical errors, though way less repetition [very greatful].

*I approved of her suspicions of the guys attraction and motivations, but not her response to them.
-At least 2 guys made blatant comments in B1 that were easily interpreted as ‘we want you because of the type of witch you are’, while one briefly and flatly lost interest in her when she revealed how weak her magic was.
-But running back to those she spent the last 4 years running AWAY from? I’m guessing the author needed a way to reintroduce her family after they’ve been so absent for 4 years… Wrong way to do it.

*Her exploration of her burgeoning magics at the beginning was interesting, with the great potential for humour, then…just stopped. WTF? She’s all scared over the supposed hunter threat, but doesn’t practice the one way she can help and not be a walking victim to be used against them??

* (view spoiler)[ We finally meet some hunters who spout ridiculous statements, and NOBODY questions them about them? How they are finding the guys? Who is training them? Where they are coming from? Basically any useful info [this despite the on the nose constant reference to 3 of the guys being in WWII…soldiers who don’t use any strategy, reconnaissance, or intelligence gathering, how the fuck did they survive?]. (hide spoiler)]

*Arrrgh! The FMC has: the back of her head bashed into a wall, gets her face bitch slapped, jumps-falls from a second story window into some bushes, has a large glass splinter in her hand [that causes drippy bleeding], gets singed by Daddy’s lightning, runs and trips through dark and scratchy woods, and lastly, gets thrown on her ass into the ground by her own lightning. All within approx 4 days, but has NO cuts, lumps, or bruises when she strips naked in front of MMC1… 😳😤

* 😮‍💨 Gets her neck chewed on, to the point of needing first aid, but then we hear nothing more about it, except as a reference to angst over…

*Yeah, like another reviewer commented, several continuity errors.

*Same issue as B1. We get flashes of action and story at the beginning, more at the end, and a whole heap of nothing filler in the middle [except for 1 ridiculous hunter confrontation, over way too briefly].

*Damn, I keep thinking of more things to add… (view spoiler)[Daddy dearest tries to KILL her, and she has one comment freak out over it when it happens, then, nothing 😵🤨 seriously? (hide spoiler)]

Sooooo, what did work:
*The FMC does improve maturity wise, at least in comparison to B1 😅

*WAYYYY less cringe dialogue [thank you 🙏].

*We did get to see SOME hunter action..

*I’m surprisingly still interested in the story-plot [🤷‍♀️].

*Despite the errors, it was easier to read through..

*No Virgin Trope, YaY [though it was referenced in some cringe jokes several times 😫].

Yeah, I’m reaching. I’m trying to remember why or what I thought was good about this? 😂 The thing is, I finished it, and easily enough as well. I’ve had other books that pissed me off less, but was unable to finish them. HuH.
For all that was wrong with this, it wasn’t boring [even with all that filler]. While it WAS aggravating at times, again, I didn’t hate to the point of needing to skim or stop.

So. It was by no means brilliant, or even good realistically 😂, it also wasn’t bad [damned with faint praise 🥱😅].

Ohh, also, Werewolves who are not Wolfy 😫😭 SO over that!!