Like so many why-choose authors, this author chose to have very dumb nicknames for the FMC. I've started to realize that the less mature authors use nLike so many why-choose authors, this author chose to have very dumb nicknames for the FMC. I've started to realize that the less mature authors use nicknames as crutches and this book further solidifies that point.
Four mates gave the following nicknames to ONE FMC: doe, sweetheart, omega, baby, my beautiful doe, naughty omega, beautiful omega, pretty girl, beautiful, my love, angel, my beautiful omega, and my beautiful mate.
The book was very formulaic; the ending with the ex was rushed and the situation with the parents didn't feel resolved at all.
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Like so many why-choose authors, this author chose to have very dumb nicknames for the FMC. I've started to realize that the less mature authors use nicknames as crutches and this book further solidifies that point.
Four mates gave the following nicknames to ONE FMC: doe, sweetheart, omega, baby, my beautiful doe, naughty omega, beautiful omega, pretty girl, beautiful, my love, angel, my beautiful omega, and my beautiful mate.
The book was very formulaic; the ending with the ex was rushed and the situation with the parents didn't feel resolved at all....more
There is a review of this book by someone called Gina that perfectly encapsulates how I felt reading Find Me Under the Stars.
Here is the review: This There is a review of this book by someone called Gina that perfectly encapsulates how I felt reading Find Me Under the Stars.
Here is the review: This book is about Charlotte who has a lot of trauma because of her mother’s death. (Her mother was diagnosed with breast cancer and her father never recovered after her death) Charlotte gets diagnosed with breast cancer herself, and as a result of her trauma breaks up with her boyfriend, and hides from all of her friends?
The plot is melodramatic, but could’ve been a great dramatic story. However, you do not see her trauma. You do not see her deliberating about how her mother’s death impacted her, you do not see her dads pain. You are told she has trauma, told her dad never recovered, but you don’t see any of this. Showing and not telling is the cornerstone of literature. What is the point of a story where I’m being told what happens instead of being shown.
The writing was so elementary, I 100% feel like I would’ve read this on fanfiction.net and close it because it wasn’t well well written. The writing in this book is similar one you’d read in a high school creative writing assignment.
You don’t get a sense of any of the characters because they’re not fully developed or even partially fleshed out.
Currently 9% in One star will be deducted from the overall rating because the author doesn't understand how seasons and hemispheres work; they also do Currently 9% in One star will be deducted from the overall rating because the author doesn't understand how seasons and hemispheres work; they also do not understand how the offseason works in hockey.
If it was summer in Toronto, when everyone left Toronto to go to Australia, it would be winter there.
**Book completed** Over 30% of the book was the group taking a 5 day vacation to Australia. This book is another example of an author jumping on a trend (in this case hockey romances) and not researching the subject. Ain't no way a group of hockey players goes on an international trip less than two weeks before the season starts. Did the author forget about training camp? Pre-season?
Also, the verbiage and syntax used when talking about the reigning Stanley Cup champions was wrong and felt very cringe.
Stanley Cup wasn't mentioned one time; just "the Cup." Did the author not know she could use the proper name for the greatest trophy in sports?
The book is riddled with double punctuation, comma splices and fragmented sentences.
One last thing: the book was boring. Like, there wasn't a plot. It was just two people fighting their attraction to each other until they didn't. No angst, no external or internal conflicts with long lasting plot implications, just reading about a people who like to have sex with each other. ...more
*Book completed* 2.5 stars This summarizes the FMC's personality. Please note, this is NOT an excerpt from the book but it could very well have come fr*Book completed* 2.5 stars This summarizes the FMC's personality. Please note, this is NOT an excerpt from the book but it could very well have come from there. MMC (Hudson): "Hey, Molly. Look at the beautiful white clouds in the sky" FMC (Molly): "I'm not looking up. Clouds aren't white and they aren't in the sky." MMC: "They are. They live in the blue sky." FMC: "Don't be stupid. The sky is green, not blue and clouds aren't seen in a green sky."
That is her entire schtick. She lies in the first chapter ALL the way towards the end of the book. She just lies. Lies about her feelings, events, she plays dumb, and she gets angry when called out on it.
**Spoilers in here** Currently 41% in, here are some initial thoughts: The first four years went by very quickly and during that time, personalities became toxic and no one showed any sign of character growth. Now that I'm in the middle of the story, the plot isn't moving. Like, at all. The FMC has a personality of a chihuahua, not sure exactly how old FMC and MMC are but they are acting like six year old children that can't sit on the same mat. The teammates even had to MAKE A BET just so the two could get along. They don't and continue to play childish games behind everyones back. There's also some terribly inaccurate information for hockey and how the behind the scenes work. Terrible repetition of information; in every chapter of the FMC's, we get hammered that the MMC is beautiful and a hockey legend. EVERY. CHAPTER. SEVERAL TIMES. We get it, he's hot. It's been six or so years since the FMC had her first public panic attack, and she still hasn't sought help? She hasn't found an identity outside of her brother? She hasn't grown a bit as a human? *rolls eyes* I'm hoping it gets better, but not sure how.
57% Finally, we get to the marriage in Vegas. And I gotta say, between 41% and now, the plot STILL didn't move. One day, I swear one day, we'll get a MMC who doesn't: 1. make a FMCV beg for sex 2. call her good girl and 3. doesn't become a Dom in the bedroom. Those three things are so overdone and it's become boring and predictable. The FMC's personality is best described as this: obstinate for the sake of being difficult. That's it. Oh, and we still have no idea what happened to her to make her have panic attacks. We've been with her for over six years and her past is STILL a mystery. I hope she develops a backbone and more personality before the book ends.
80% We FINALLY get a bit of the FMC's backstory. However, it was rushed, not detailed and I felt like not a lot of effort went into the story. Plus, the FMC left out a lot of details about her past. This part was a major letdown.
One of the reasons why I DNF'd the book was due to the nicknames of the FMC. Her name is Lillianna. Here are some of the names we heard her being callOne of the reasons why I DNF'd the book was due to the nicknames of the FMC. Her name is Lillianna. Here are some of the names we heard her being called in the first 19%: lilly, lills, Flower, baby, babe, il mio cuare, baby girl, dirty girl, shorty and lillypad.
There was WAY TOO much dialogue. Not enough scene building.
PSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." NotPSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart." This author, alongside other KU authors refuse to pay for a proper editor are very confused on this very simple rule. If the author cannot afford a good editor, Google exists.
The author has a very toxic relationship with ellipses. Someone should tell the author that it's okay to use correct punctuation for a sentence....more
There are two serious formatting/editorial issues as of 01/24/2025 First, a chapter repeats itself. And second, there is a chapter mislabeled on whose There are two serious formatting/editorial issues as of 01/24/2025 First, a chapter repeats itself. And second, there is a chapter mislabeled on whose POV it's from.
The FMC was very very annoying. So many times she had to be convinced to eat, sleep, rest or allow her husband to help her was aisine. I get wanting to write a strong female lead, but there is a fine line between strong/independant and just being headstrong for a plot device.
This would have been a 3.5 star review, but the formatting errors prevented that. ...more
There was too much dialogue; not enough showing (only telling); didn't feel the connection or love between tOh boy. This book was so very problematic.
There was too much dialogue; not enough showing (only telling); didn't feel the connection or love between the MC's or the kids; the majority of the emphasis was put on Josie and not the other two; communication was nonexistent; and the biggest flaw, the authors lack of knowledge about hockey.
IS IT TOO MUCH TO ASK FOR AN AUTHOR TO WATCH A COUPLE GAMES OF HOCKEY BEFORE THEY WRITE ABOUT IT?
Ain't no way a player LEAVES THE ICE during a pre-game warmup (Hello? Plexiglass?), WALKS UP CONCRETE STEPS WITH HIS SKATES ON, whips his NHL jersey off to give to his woman, WALKS BACK DOWN THOSE SAME STEPS, STILL WITH HIS SKATES ON to then rejoin his teammates, PUNCHES one of his teammates and continues on.
NO. So much no. First, pregame skates and workouts are all filmed. THERE IS EVIDENCE EVERYWHERE OF THAT ON YOUTUBE. Second, no player is vaulting over the plexiglass to get to the stands. Third, THE BLADES WOULD BE DULL OR BUSTED if he spent that amount of time walking on concrete. Fourth, THERE WOULD BE MASSIVE FINES for not only punching his teammate but leaving the ice AND removing his jersey. MMC's punishment? One period bench. No. Just no.
And the first time the MC's were intimate came out of left field and was 100% not believable. It was so cringe. ...more
Currently 26% in: In the beginning, I really admired the way that the FMC was written; strong, resilient, and intelligent. However, she is beginning toCurrently 26% in: In the beginning, I really admired the way that the FMC was written; strong, resilient, and intelligent. However, she is beginning to lose that independence and making very dumb decisions. Her inner monologue: "I don't want anything to do with my scent matches." What she does instead: surrounds herself with their business and submits to their (the mates) proposals. It was nice to have hope that we would get a strong female lead, but that hope is slowly eroding. So far the dumb ass nicknames are: omega, little omega, lamb, kid, and pretty girl. Also, the formula for RH mates is also present in this book: the dominate one (who is probably into BDSM, that's a prediction on my end), the golden retriever and the one who hates the FMC for [insert dumb reason].
53% in: Only about 4 or 5 days have passed since Emme was caught, and everyone in her life has betrayed her so far. She keeps saying things like "I can't trust them or their actions" yet she simpers to them (her mates) every single interaction. I miss the strong FMC from the first ten pages. Where did she go?
Completed Well, I saw that cliffhanger coming from a mile away. Also saw Finley saying the "she is toxic and will tear us apart so I have to stop her from bonding with my mates" line because this book follows the formulaic shifter RH men trend. Ya know, it's okay if not all men want to bond to an omega, but give actual reasons not imaginary ones. The first 90% or so of the book, 5-6 days had passed since Emme arrived at the compound. THen all of a sudden a week flies by. I said it earlier, and it bears repeating: I missed the Emme from the first chapter. She had personality, spunk and seemed like a fun girl. However, she was lost and her personality never returned.
Updated list of very dumb and not at all original nicknames: little omega, omega, pretty girl, lamb, darlin' girl, freckles, sunshine, shortcake, sweet omega, baby, my sweet omega.
I'm pretty sure that Fin and Hunter don't even know Emme's name. They just call her by her designation, as if that is all she is. ...more
The biggest problem I have with interconnected series are the constant updates on everyone else. I don't care about people who aren't the MC's. I alsoThe biggest problem I have with interconnected series are the constant updates on everyone else. I don't care about people who aren't the MC's. I also say this knowning I am in the minority. Once an author (like Nicole) has a huge series with a lot of people, the further the stories go, the more pages are dedicated to all of the catch up the author feels like the story needs to progress.
Two separate occasions the FMC said something akin to the following: "The hockey world is waiting for three women to fail, saying our desires and bodieTwo separate occasions the FMC said something akin to the following: "The hockey world is waiting for three women to fail, saying our desires and bodies will rule us. Let's not give them the satisfaction." Or "I can't let hormones get in the way of leading this team."
So I stopped at 33% when that is exactly what the FMC did. She put an entire franchise, her sisters, her reputation at risk because she wanted someone.
One day we'll get a FMC who doesn't have BBS, but alas that day is not today. ...more