I have a self-imposed ban on reading any book that includes the words "knot" or "pucking" because it's low hanging fruit, ya know. And the books are uI have a self-imposed ban on reading any book that includes the words "knot" or "pucking" because it's low hanging fruit, ya know. And the books are usually predictable and full of errors. But I broke that ban with this book because I had hopes that this would be the one FMC that held strong in her beliefs as an Omega. I should have known better; I should have stuck with the ban.
There is nothing unique or noteworthy about this book. The FMC comes from a troubled place that hates Omegas, she escapes, her suppressants run out (oh no! Who saw that coming?) and bam! she finds her scent matches and she is magically healed from 5+ years of abuse over two weeks. Oh and, the world gets saved. *rolls eyes* This is the same plot that cane be found in any other Omega + schooling novel.
The author does SOOOOO much telling and not enough showing, and then decides to summarize the same conversation and observations chapter after chapter. This book could have easily been 200 pages.
Most wet paper towels are stronger in their belief system than this FMC.
The MMC's have no distinct personality. The one MMC has to stay away from the FMC because of [insert dumb reason here] and is magically fixed after one boxing session.
There are A LOT of plot holes and general inconsistencies throughout this book. The first major one, the MMC's state that they back legislation to bring rights back to Omegas. Yet, they don't do anything proactive about it. They also believe that Omegas should have the right to choose anything they wish. Yet, they go back on that "revolutionary" thinking by not giving the omega choice in what to wear, what she should eat, when she should eat, almost never calling her by her name (only by designation)having her beg for anything sexual, and the greatest crime is when they infantilize her with her dumbass nicknames. Another inconsistency that was very prominent is with the MMC's inability to form a complete sentence. The author is trying to get us to believe that these three MC's, who own a billion dollar company, are unable to complete a full sentence or thought? They also don't listen to their instincts when it comes to Elliot even when they lecture the FMC on how she should listen to her instincts. The FMC's body also showcased another plot inconsistency: she went from skin and bones, being able to count the vertebrae on her spine, collarbone sticking out; then magically, two weeks later one of the MMC's says that she "has curves in all the right places." IN TWO WEEKS? But that is later cleared up by a different MC when he says "she is still too skinny." Well, which one is it?
Maybe the rules how how to format terms of endearments are different where the author lives, but in most cases terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart."
The author chose the latter when using the dumbass nicknames for the FMC: Sweetness, Baby Girl, Little One, and Little Mouse. *rolls eyes* Really? Little one and baby girl? Or anything "little?" They treat her like such a child that it almost makes me wonder if the MCs have a problem with the FMC being 23-25 years old. The author credits three editors for this book, but how did they allow such flagrant abuse of ellipses, commas and hypes to pass the final round of edits? There are over 270 errors, from incorrect capitalization, to egergerious (and incorrect) ellipses use, and many comma splices all of which have been reported to Amazon.
Unfortunately, this author chose to use deceptive book stuffing practices for this novel. Each chapter begins with an image and the chapter title that takes up either ALL of that page or 95% of the page leaving a lot of white and unused space. So, on Amazon the page number is listed at 397, but due to the way that the author chose to book stuff, the page count should really be around 340-345 pages.
Because of the chapter book stuffing, formatting errors and grammar issues, I reported the full book to Amazon due to low quality. ...more
There was too much dialogue; not enough showing (only telling); didn't feel the connection or love between tOh boy. This book was so very problematic.
There was too much dialogue; not enough showing (only telling); didn't feel the connection or love between the MC's or the kids; the majority of the emphasis was put on Josie and not the other two; communication was nonexistent; and the biggest flaw, the authors lack of knowledge about hockey.
IS IT TOO MUCH TO ASK FOR AN AUTHOR TO WATCH A COUPLE GAMES OF HOCKEY BEFORE THEY WRITE ABOUT IT?
Ain't no way a player LEAVES THE ICE during a pre-game warmup (Hello? Plexiglass?), WALKS UP CONCRETE STEPS WITH HIS SKATES ON, whips his NHL jersey off to give to his woman, WALKS BACK DOWN THOSE SAME STEPS, STILL WITH HIS SKATES ON to then rejoin his teammates, PUNCHES one of his teammates and continues on.
NO. So much no. First, pregame skates and workouts are all filmed. THERE IS EVIDENCE EVERYWHERE OF THAT ON YOUTUBE. Second, no player is vaulting over the plexiglass to get to the stands. Third, THE BLADES WOULD BE DULL OR BUSTED if he spent that amount of time walking on concrete. Fourth, THERE WOULD BE MASSIVE FINES for not only punching his teammate but leaving the ice AND removing his jersey. MMC's punishment? One period bench. No. Just no.
And the first time the MC's were intimate came out of left field and was 100% not believable. It was so cringe. ...more
This would have been a 3.5 star rating, but the ebook copy has some formatting and plot errors.
PSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalThis would have been a 3.5 star rating, but the ebook copy has some formatting and plot errors.
PSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart." This author, alongside other KU authors refuse to pay for a proper editor are very confused on this very simple rule. If the author cannot afford a good editor, Google exists.
The ending was 100% not believable and was soooooo dumb of the FMC.
What I really liked about this RH was the communication about relationships from everyone. Even though the MC's are all around 19-21, they communicated and set boundaries in a respectful and healthy way. ...more
Evelyn (Eve) was the victim of a college school shooting where the shooter killed twenty plus people, but came for her specifically. FMC sustained a nEvelyn (Eve) was the victim of a college school shooting where the shooter killed twenty plus people, but came for her specifically. FMC sustained a nasty gunshot wound to her back and almost died. She then transferred to a prestigious university where royals, diplomat children and other VIP's attend for a huge price. There, she meets five men and through events she now has to live with them.
Man, Jaymine Eve cannot write an original FMC for the life of her. I could easily put Eve in any of her other books and no one would notice.
There were so many problems with not only the FMC, but the plot and even the men.
The FMC's whole personality was this: I have PTSD and I refuse to look deeper into anything that is happening because I have PTSD.
The authors also refused to do any kind of deep research into individuals with C-PTSD. How do we know the FMC has PTSD? She has nightmares and suffers from panic attacks that only happen when convenient to the plot. There was a scene where the FMC was in the cafeteria and she even says “being around loud noise with a bunch of people is a trigger for me.” One would expect the FMC to flee or begin a panic attack, but that's not what happened at all! FMC all of a sudden is over her PTSD and goes chasing after her friend. The next day does the FMC suffer from any side effects for her “episode?” Nope. All is good.
The men also follow the standard RH tropes and it was so disappointing. There is, of course, the one MMC who hates the FMC for [insert dumb reason here]. And this is his dumb reason: “It’s not what you’ve done now—it’s what you’re going to do. You’re trouble, Evelyn. The others might want to play happy families and pretend you’re not our downfall, but I know fucking better.” That's right, he hates the FMC due to events that haven't even happened, may not even happen and he is holding her responsible for how the other men will treat her. It's 2025, let's leave the misogyny in the 90's, hmm?
And the nicknames are TERRIBLE. Our FMC already shortens her name, from Evelyn to Eve. Is that respected? Nope. Everyone pretty much refuses to call her by her preferred name and she only pushes back once. Here are the nicknames: babe, Cinderella, sweetheart, Evie babe, Evie, baby girl, new girl, sunshine, Lilith, baby, beautiful, little Lilith, brat, and filthy little Lilith. Keep in mind that only three of the five men talk to her on a consistent basis; which means three men gave her fourteen nicknames. PICK A FUCKING NAME AND STICK WITH IT.
Also, brat wasn't said with any kind of love or affection. Does the FMC push back? Nope. She answers to him and starts to develop a crush on the guy that is just jaw dropping mean to her. Cause, why have strong women in 2025? That is just silly.
Let's start off with the really asinine nicknames that were given to the FMC. Princess and baby girl. *eye rolls* So original. The FMC only had two inLet's start off with the really asinine nicknames that were given to the FMC. Princess and baby girl. *eye rolls* So original. The FMC only had two interactions with fang, and in those three chapters, we heard the word Princess fifty-two times. However, the author decided to follow in Kristen Ashley's footsteps, and the FMC repeats tyhe MMC's names like every two paragraphs. Fang is said around 160 times, Kieran 308 times, Mike 299 times, Laina around 190 times. We get it. We know their names by now. And we have another dark romance writer who refuses to have their characters suffer any kind of traumatic repercussions from their abusive past. FMC is in the hospital and NO ONE knows what she has been through, and everyone is always touching her and coming close to her. Does the FMC stop any of this? No, of course not. FMC is as strong as a walmart pickle. She has zero character growth in the story. She also makes some really TSTL decisions. Fang's whole personality can be boiled down to two sentences. "Princess looks like cotton candy. I want to eat her up." That's it. Cause that's all he can say. Oh, he also says princess like every other line. This whole book could have been 150 pages, that's how much nothing happened. Oh, and the "cliffhanger?" Saw that one coming a mile away. Wondrak has a formula she likes to stick with, and she didn't break the mold when it came to this book. At least in this book the men and the FMC suffer from BBS. Oh, man the biggest pet peeve? Kieran. He's supposed to be 28 years old, but he is sooooo very immature. He actually pouts - MULTIPLE TIMES - when someone else is assigned to be FMC's bodyguard. He whines, makes things more difficult and becomes too possessive. Someone who is 19 years old, has to put him in his place. How embarrassing for him. ...more
At the end of the book, the author says that it took her two weeks to write this book, and man oh man does it show. The biggest travesty of the book iAt the end of the book, the author says that it took her two weeks to write this book, and man oh man does it show. The biggest travesty of the book is the lack of depth of writing, character development and exploration of emotions and feelings. As we go through life with 295, she never goes into deep thoughts. The lack of world building and plot development was another huge issue. We never got a clear picture on what everyone looks like, or how they behave during conversations. We never really go to see or feel the shifter side of her. Have no idea what the campus looks like. Have no idea what anyone really looks like or any building. This could have been an amazing plot, but the lack of maturity in the writing stunted the development process. The writer also was a fan of The Blackened Blade as many scenes from Buried Secret were inspired from BB. ...more
PSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." NotPSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart." This author, alongside other KU authors refuse to pay for a proper editor are very confused on this very simple rule. If the author cannot afford a good editor, Google exists....more
While I will never accuse an author of using AI to help write a book without proof, what I can say about this book is that there is something oDNF 63%
While I will never accuse an author of using AI to help write a book without proof, what I can say about this book is that there is something off with the writing, verbiage, pace and sentence structure.
A CIA agent was strong until about 20% until she allowed BBS to take over. I had high hopes for the FMC until she went from a scared woman who thought she was going to be SA (FMC was crying, shaking, clearly fearful) to a woman following her desire in less than 2 seconds. It was shameful.
The order of events were weird; the dialogue was also strange and oftentimes didn't make sense.
There was an attempt at worldbuilding, but not enough for me to connect to the world or the characters.
The most unbelievable aspect? The children. ...more
Over 30 errors were reported to Amazon as the author doesn't know how to format her manuscript properly. Once I hit 30 errors in 15%, I stoppedDNF 15%
Over 30 errors were reported to Amazon as the author doesn't know how to format her manuscript properly. Once I hit 30 errors in 15%, I stopped reading.
The writing itself was simplistic; dialogue unbelievable; and the character interactions were all cookie cutter.
I hope that the author starts to have confidence in her writing so she doesn't need to use book stuffing techniques in order to pad her pages. ...more
In order to read this book you have to check your feminism at the door, because the FMC agrees to get abused in order to curb her wild ways. "No one eIn order to read this book you have to check your feminism at the door, because the FMC agrees to get abused in order to curb her wild ways. "No one else has ever cared for my safety like Jaret." THATS HOW SHE THINKS. I think this book was written for trad wives and women who haven't evolved in the last 100 years. ...more
Currently 26% in: In the beginning, I really admired the way that the FMC was written; strong, resilient, and intelligent. However, she is beginning toCurrently 26% in: In the beginning, I really admired the way that the FMC was written; strong, resilient, and intelligent. However, she is beginning to lose that independence and making very dumb decisions. Her inner monologue: "I don't want anything to do with my scent matches." What she does instead: surrounds herself with their business and submits to their (the mates) proposals. It was nice to have hope that we would get a strong female lead, but that hope is slowly eroding. So far the dumb ass nicknames are: omega, little omega, lamb, kid, and pretty girl. Also, the formula for RH mates is also present in this book: the dominate one (who is probably into BDSM, that's a prediction on my end), the golden retriever and the one who hates the FMC for [insert dumb reason].
53% in: Only about 4 or 5 days have passed since Emme was caught, and everyone in her life has betrayed her so far. She keeps saying things like "I can't trust them or their actions" yet she simpers to them (her mates) every single interaction. I miss the strong FMC from the first ten pages. Where did she go?
Completed Well, I saw that cliffhanger coming from a mile away. Also saw Finley saying the "she is toxic and will tear us apart so I have to stop her from bonding with my mates" line because this book follows the formulaic shifter RH men trend. Ya know, it's okay if not all men want to bond to an omega, but give actual reasons not imaginary ones. The first 90% or so of the book, 5-6 days had passed since Emme arrived at the compound. THen all of a sudden a week flies by. I said it earlier, and it bears repeating: I missed the Emme from the first chapter. She had personality, spunk and seemed like a fun girl. However, she was lost and her personality never returned.
Updated list of very dumb and not at all original nicknames: little omega, omega, pretty girl, lamb, darlin' girl, freckles, sunshine, shortcake, sweet omega, baby, my sweet omega.
I'm pretty sure that Fin and Hunter don't even know Emme's name. They just call her by her designation, as if that is all she is. ...more
This book is about 150 pages too long...and it DRAGGED in so many places.
While there was character growth, I felt like the setting lacked details andThis book is about 150 pages too long...and it DRAGGED in so many places.
While there was character growth, I felt like the setting lacked details and experiences. When the players were on the pitch, I didn't feel the tension, the anticipation of a goal or any kind of excitement. London was the location, but it easily could have been any other place across the pond. I didn't get the big city feeling or joy. Plus, a London cabbie getting lost? Please. There's a test that cabbies have to take in order to be a driver in London or they can have their privilege's revoked. It's incredibly toxic to have an ADULT woman and an ADULT man hiding their relationship from a brother. Like, grow up. ...more
There was way too much dialogue and not enough story, instead we get scene after scene.
MMC didn't grow enough towardBook stops at 87% on the kindle.
There was way too much dialogue and not enough story, instead we get scene after scene.
MMC didn't grow enough towards the end and Addie stayed in the worst of the abused mindset: needing to apologize and make herself meek for others. ...more