I have a self-imposed ban on reading any book that includes the words "knot" or "pucking" because it's low hanging fruit, ya know. And the books are uI have a self-imposed ban on reading any book that includes the words "knot" or "pucking" because it's low hanging fruit, ya know. And the books are usually predictable and full of errors. But I broke that ban with this book because I had hopes that this would be the one FMC that held strong in her beliefs as an Omega. I should have known better; I should have stuck with the ban.
There is nothing unique or noteworthy about this book. The FMC comes from a troubled place that hates Omegas, she escapes, her suppressants run out (oh no! Who saw that coming?) and bam! she finds her scent matches and she is magically healed from 5+ years of abuse over two weeks. Oh and, the world gets saved. *rolls eyes* This is the same plot that cane be found in any other Omega + schooling novel.
The author does SOOOOO much telling and not enough showing, and then decides to summarize the same conversation and observations chapter after chapter. This book could have easily been 200 pages.
Most wet paper towels are stronger in their belief system than this FMC.
The MMC's have no distinct personality. The one MMC has to stay away from the FMC because of [insert dumb reason here] and is magically fixed after one boxing session.
There are A LOT of plot holes and general inconsistencies throughout this book. The first major one, the MMC's state that they back legislation to bring rights back to Omegas. Yet, they don't do anything proactive about it. They also believe that Omegas should have the right to choose anything they wish. Yet, they go back on that "revolutionary" thinking by not giving the omega choice in what to wear, what she should eat, when she should eat, almost never calling her by her name (only by designation)having her beg for anything sexual, and the greatest crime is when they infantilize her with her dumbass nicknames. Another inconsistency that was very prominent is with the MMC's inability to form a complete sentence. The author is trying to get us to believe that these three MC's, who own a billion dollar company, are unable to complete a full sentence or thought? They also don't listen to their instincts when it comes to Elliot even when they lecture the FMC on how she should listen to her instincts. The FMC's body also showcased another plot inconsistency: she went from skin and bones, being able to count the vertebrae on her spine, collarbone sticking out; then magically, two weeks later one of the MMC's says that she "has curves in all the right places." IN TWO WEEKS? But that is later cleared up by a different MC when he says "she is still too skinny." Well, which one is it?
Maybe the rules how how to format terms of endearments are different where the author lives, but in most cases terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart."
The author chose the latter when using the dumbass nicknames for the FMC: Sweetness, Baby Girl, Little One, and Little Mouse. *rolls eyes* Really? Little one and baby girl? Or anything "little?" They treat her like such a child that it almost makes me wonder if the MCs have a problem with the FMC being 23-25 years old. The author credits three editors for this book, but how did they allow such flagrant abuse of ellipses, commas and hypes to pass the final round of edits? There are over 270 errors, from incorrect capitalization, to egergerious (and incorrect) ellipses use, and many comma splices all of which have been reported to Amazon.
Unfortunately, this author chose to use deceptive book stuffing practices for this novel. Each chapter begins with an image and the chapter title that takes up either ALL of that page or 95% of the page leaving a lot of white and unused space. So, on Amazon the page number is listed at 397, but due to the way that the author chose to book stuff, the page count should really be around 340-345 pages.
Because of the chapter book stuffing, formatting errors and grammar issues, I reported the full book to Amazon due to low quality. ...more
I picked up this book because I thought the idea of a blood kin curse sounded interesting. However, the plot didn't move. Like, at all. Once we made I picked up this book because I thought the idea of a blood kin curse sounded interesting. However, the plot didn't move. Like, at all. Once we made it to the academy, I think 1-2 weeks passed. I found myself skimming from 60% on due to the lack of plot and character development.
I think I have to toss in the towel with this author as her books are SO VERY formulaic and she takes A LOT of "inspiration" from other places.
For example, see if you can guess the original source material from these books elements: * Magical Academy * Four Houses * Magical grounds * A MC who had a poor upbringing and is full of wonder for the world * A sorting ceremony * The sorting ceremony has an enchanted goblet
The men were also very formulaic and it's getting predictable with the "bullying" in all of Kean's work.
Kean also doesn't listen to her editors as I am sure they have tried to correct how she types out terms of endearments, but she refuses to grow as a writer. There were A LOT of comma splices in this manuscript as well.
There is a note from the author in the back of her book that states that this is the first time she is writing a novel where the FMC doesn't start off as strong, and I was very confused by that statement. None of her FMC's are strong; they are all weak willed, physically deficient, and suffer from intense bouts of body betrayal syndrome. ...more
NO TW/CW PAGE EXISTED FOR THIS BOOK AS OF 02/28/2025. TW: Rape, abuse, attempted rape, forced breeding/heat
As soon as I read that the FMC was raped byNO TW/CW PAGE EXISTED FOR THIS BOOK AS OF 02/28/2025. TW: Rape, abuse, attempted rape, forced breeding/heat
As soon as I read that the FMC was raped by one of the side characters and NO warning was given, the book deserved it's one star review.
This book had promise, but failed in its execution. It felt like the author wanted to write about a dystopian world, but didn't put any thought into the people besides borrowing cliches from other series.
PSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart." This author, alongside other KU authors refuse to pay for a proper editor are very confused on this very simple rule. If the author cannot afford a good editor, Google exists.
The author has a very toxic relationship with ellipses. Someone should tell the author that it's okay to use correct punctuation for a sentence.
Here are the REALLY dumb nicknames used: sweet girl (which appears as Sweet girl, sweet girl, Sweet Girl), good girl, baby (which appears as Baby), beautiful, honey and Cherry Red. Why are RH authors so unable to use a characters name? Why do they insist on not following the standard editing policies?...more
This book was 95% dialogue. What does the FMC's apartment look like? We'll never know. What does the surrounding city look like? Who knows. WhaDNF 66%
This book was 95% dialogue. What does the FMC's apartment look like? We'll never know. What does the surrounding city look like? Who knows. What are some of the nervous ticks she has? That's not part of speaking, so we dont know.
There is SOOOO much telling in the story and not enough showing. Just one example: we're told that the MMC has bags under his eyes. And then we're also told that the bags are there because he isn't rested.
The MMC sexually assaults the FMC (twice) and thinks its okay because they are fated mates.
FMC is weak, very weak. She capitulates to everything the MMC says or does. She refuses to stand up to him and hold her ground.
FMC's "best friends" are terrible human beings.
The writing was borderline sophomoric and reads like a 9th graders creative writing project and not a published work.
The typeset also extends the books page count. The type is bigger than normal, the space between each sentence is extended, PLUS the double space between each paragraph all enables the author to get more pages read, which means more money from Amazon. If the author had more confidence in her craft, she wouldn't have to resort to tactics like that in order to make a living.
Book is listed at 552 pages, but due to the book stuffing techniques the author chose to use, the book should really be around 400 pages. ...more
One of the reasons why I DNF'd the book was due to the nicknames of the FMC. Her name is Lillianna. Here are some of the names we heard her being callOne of the reasons why I DNF'd the book was due to the nicknames of the FMC. Her name is Lillianna. Here are some of the names we heard her being called in the first 19%: lilly, lills, Flower, baby, babe, il mio cuare, baby girl, dirty girl, shorty and lillypad.
There was WAY TOO much dialogue. Not enough scene building.