DNF 15% MMC threatens to kill the FMC's kid and rape the FMC and the FMC's body betrays her and she gets horny. Nope.
Nicknames/terms of endearments: PrDNF 15% MMC threatens to kill the FMC's kid and rape the FMC and the FMC's body betrays her and she gets horny. Nope.
Nicknames/terms of endearments: Princess (which is not formatted correctly), sweetheart
As with most KU authors, this author doesn't know how to format terms of endearment correctly. PSA to the author: terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this princess." Not correct: "Here, drink this Princess."...more
11% in - From the description, I was expecting a woman that could hold her own; that was intelligent, strong, and mentally capable of holding her own i11% in - From the description, I was expecting a woman that could hold her own; that was intelligent, strong, and mentally capable of holding her own in a room full of powerful men. Instead, there is a girl who allows two men in her life to order her around (father and Viper), allows the men to call her derogatory nicknames, allows someone to threaten sexual and physical violence against her for not complying and bows down to all of their demands with only a whisper of resistance.
Oh, and of course - "good girl" makes an appearance. It's so predictable, boring and clichéd.
13% in - With every spoken and unspoken thought from Viper, he reminds us that he doesn't see Ven as a person, just an object. "You're not just a pretty face with a nice rack, are you wildcat?" Every interaction, he reminds her that she is powerless, a toy and reduces her down to what she is - a girl with daddy issues. We have also met someone called Blake who sees her the same way. Not as a person, but someone who can further his empire.
DNF 20%
I've never been so disappointed in a FMC so very quickly. SHE CALLS HIM DADDY? JFC. She has zero spine.
Dumb nicknames so far: Princess, girlie, wildcat...more
11% in - From the description, I was expecting a woman that could hold her own; that was intelligent, strong, and mentally capable of holding her own 11% in - From the description, I was expecting a woman that could hold her own; that was intelligent, strong, and mentally capable of holding her own in a room full of powerful men. Instead, there is a girl who allows two men in her life to order her around (father and Viper), allows the men to call her derogatory nicknames, allows someone to threaten sexual and physical violence against her for not complying and bows down to all of their demands with only a whisper of resistance.
Oh, and of course - "good girl" makes an appearance. It's so predictable, boring and clichéd.
13% in - With every spoken and unspoken thought from Viper, he reminds us that he doesn't see Ven as a person, just an object. "You're not just a pretty face with a nice rack, are you wildcat?" Every interaction, he reminds her that she is powerless, a toy and reduces her down to what she is - a girl with daddy issues. We have also met someone called Blake who sees her the same way. Not as a person, but someone who can further his empire.
DNF 20%
I've never been so disappointed in a FMC so very quickly. SHE CALLS HIM DADDY? JFC. She has zero spine.
Dumb nicknames so far: Princess, girlie, wildcat...more
Currently 14% in - Not super jazzed about the way the men are treating the FMC. Also, we have our first instance of BBS and it was very predictable andCurrently 14% in - Not super jazzed about the way the men are treating the FMC. Also, we have our first instance of BBS and it was very predictable and annoying.
17% in - She keeps saying that she will lull the guys into a false sense of security, but she does nothing but contradict herself. The men have shown her time and time again that they hate her, but she still guards them. I wish the FMC was written with more grit.
18% - First threat of sexual violence (out loud) against the FMC.
20% - FMC is not being strong in character or mind, in fact she is acting like a child. Another instance of BBS. The guys are still abusing her. Really? An image of the FMC getting tattooed is included?
27% "I don't blame you for treating me like a piece of shit." How unbelievably weak minded. One "I'm sorry" and she's fawning over the MMC's lap and showering him with kisses? Be fucking for real.
DNF 39%
No groveling before they fell into bed again. No...nothing. ...more
Once the MMC became a Dom and the FMC succumbed to BBS, I DNF'd. She was weak.
The author also doesn't know the difference between your and you'DNF 17%
Once the MMC became a Dom and the FMC succumbed to BBS, I DNF'd. She was weak.
The author also doesn't know the difference between your and you're. Several mistakes were made which leads me to believe that the author doesn't have a good editing team behind them....more
It's the wild wild west of grammar, punctuation and sentence structure in this book. At 11% in, I reported thirty-five errors to Amazon.
There DNF 11%
It's the wild wild west of grammar, punctuation and sentence structure in this book. At 11% in, I reported thirty-five errors to Amazon.
There are some basic rules the author doesn't understand: First, any number under 100 is typed out (exceptions exist). Second, the author doesn't understand how to format terms of endearment correctly. And third, this author hasn't met a comma splice that she doesn't love.
And don't even get me started on the very stupid nicknames that the MMC's give the FMC after only being in her presence for like two minutes. I've started to realize that the less mature authors use nicknames as crutches and this book further solidifies that point.
The places, people, and city weren't developed. I didn't feel like I was seeing London from the FMC's eyes. While the FMC was working, I didn't feel like I was with her. There was a lack of depth, imagery, and maturity in the writing.
Oh, and within thirty seconds of meeting the FMC, one of the MMC's threatens sexual punishment against her.
As a new author, Elizabeth fell into the trap of not knowing how to move the plot forward without rewinding the chapter. For example, if we read a scene from the FMC's POV, we had to relive that scene from one of the MMC's POVs. It was unnecessary. ...more
One star was deducted from the rating because everyone who talked to the FMC had a nickname for her: mouse, little one, pet, little girl, kulka, precioOne star was deducted from the rating because everyone who talked to the FMC had a nickname for her: mouse, little one, pet, little girl, kulka, precious, shorty, sunshine, girl, viper, baby, doll, small stuff, babe, dearest, lovely, bokkie, little one, my dear, lutkica, sweet girl, sweetheart, and short stuff. Yes, those are all of the nicknames/terms of endearments that the FMC was gifted from EVERYONE SHE MEETS. FMC has nicknames for the MMC: sweetie, honey, baby
An additional deduction in rating was considered because there are POV's in this story, not from the MC's that didn't add anything to the plot. And there was barely any plot to be spoken of.
There wasn't any real drama, no angst, nothing to really fuel why this book was written in the first place.
There was too many chapters from Mina's POV; not enough growth from Mina; and the Sasha hate was undeserved. ...more
Even though this is supposed to be a standalone, I felt like there was too much missing background info for the plot to make seDNF around the 30% mark
Even though this is supposed to be a standalone, I felt like there was too much missing background info for the plot to make sense (I didn't read books 1-3). Some of the animosity between the two families didn't really resonate because I didn't understand what was happening.
The FMC is also weak as all hell and couldn't be mature if her life depended on it.
I also felt like a lot of the movements and action weren't described well enough; it felt like people teleported around. ...more
This started off as being a refreshing take on mafia princesses, but quickly devolved into a boring, miscommunication and body betrayal syndrome book.This started off as being a refreshing take on mafia princesses, but quickly devolved into a boring, miscommunication and body betrayal syndrome book. The FMC decided to give into her husbands manipulations around the 20% and it was so disappointing to see. The most interesting parts of the story were the sisters and their relationships. I ended up skimming from 70% on. ...more
While this is billed as a story that contains a strong female lead, she is anything but. She succumbs to BBS often and is a terrible hit woman.DNF 23%
While this is billed as a story that contains a strong female lead, she is anything but. She succumbs to BBS often and is a terrible hit woman. She makes so many mistakes that she is a child playing an adult game.