Willow Madison's Reviews > Reign

Do you remember the emergency drills you had at elementary school? The ones where you had to tuck your head down and use your arms for cover? That's what I want to do with writing this review...

I'll start with the positive:
-- The characters: Reign, Summer, Cash, Wolf, Lo -- loved them.
-- The sex scenes: There were really only 2 that I'd consider fully developed, but they were pretty steamy and Reign was the right balance of brute beast and yumminess for me.

And now for the part that has had me debating with myself as to whether I should write a review at all, aka, the not-so-good:
-- Errors: everywhere. Most of the variety that was the wrong word but spelled correctly, so a simple spellcheck wouldn’t catch it. Any reader would, because it became seriously annoying as they added up and continued to throw me out of the story while my brain had to figure out what was supposed to be the word. It would be like me writing this review and saying that it was the host annoying think about it ;)

-- Writing style: juvenile and repetitious in a non-effective manner. I get that Summer is a relatively sheltered young woman and her inner monologue might be directed toward a juvenile vent. I could live with this. But Reign’s was too. In fact, other than his cursing more in his head, there really wasn’t much of a difference between their POVs, yet I was subjected to repeated scenes from both angles.
Also, the repetition of words or phrases to create emphasis or comedic pauses lost its efficacy with overuse. (One of many examples from the book: Reign inner monologue “I laughed. Laughed. I never fucking laughed. But I laughed.”)
And last, but not least on the topic of writing style, there was the repetition of sentence structure that was just…well, see for yourself… (One of many examples from the book: Summer inner monologue
“Oh
my
god.” Followed by about a page and a half, then
“Oh
my
god.
No.” There were also “Oh, god” and “Oh lordy” and “Oh my god” in the same few pages with these.)

-- Plot development: Not plausible. The only way I can explain this without giving any plot away is to say that it had the feel of Super Crime Villains living in a tranquil suburban environment with nary a hint at their underbellies or consequences. Plot twists and machinations were oddly forced and then wrapped up in a bow before they could be explained into any form of plausibility.

I do think this book has potential. With a solid editing that would include a keen eye toward plot clarity, this would be a good read.