At the end of the book, the author says that it took her two weeks to write this book, and man oh man does it show. The biggest travesty of the book iAt the end of the book, the author says that it took her two weeks to write this book, and man oh man does it show. The biggest travesty of the book is the lack of depth of writing, character development and exploration of emotions and feelings. As we go through life with 295, she never goes into deep thoughts. The lack of world building and plot development was another huge issue. We never got a clear picture on what everyone looks like, or how they behave during conversations. We never really go to see or feel the shifter side of her. Have no idea what the campus looks like. Have no idea what anyone really looks like or any building. This could have been an amazing plot, but the lack of maturity in the writing stunted the development process. The writer also was a fan of The Blackened Blade as many scenes from Buried Secret were inspired from BB. ...more
While I never want to accuse a writer of using AI (or being AI) without definitive proof, there was something off with the writing and the world. Too While I never want to accuse a writer of using AI (or being AI) without definitive proof, there was something off with the writing and the world. Too many scenes were copy-cat of others, the writing wasn't in-depth and a lot of the conversations were missing vital pieces. This could have been an amazing book about finding inner strength, forgiveness, groveling and how to navigate the past but the writing was lackluster. ...more
While I will never accuse an author of using AI to help write a book without proof, what I can say about this book is that there is something oDNF 63%
While I will never accuse an author of using AI to help write a book without proof, what I can say about this book is that there is something off with the writing, verbiage, pace and sentence structure.
A CIA agent was strong until about 20% until she allowed BBS to take over. I had high hopes for the FMC until she went from a scared woman who thought she was going to be SA (FMC was crying, shaking, clearly fearful) to a woman following her desire in less than 2 seconds. It was shameful.
The order of events were weird; the dialogue was also strange and oftentimes didn't make sense.
There was an attempt at worldbuilding, but not enough for me to connect to the world or the characters.
The most unbelievable aspect? The children. ...more
One of the biggest crimes of this book is the glaring plot hole around the 60-98% mark. (view spoiler)[If the father knew that the traffickers were geOne of the biggest crimes of this book is the glaring plot hole around the 60-98% mark. (view spoiler)[If the father knew that the traffickers were getting close (because of the news report), WHY DIDN'T HE SAY SOMETHING? WHY DIDN'T HE LEAVE A NOTE WITH THE FOOD HE DROPPED OFF? (hide spoiler)] But of course he couldn't do that, or we wouldn't have the cliffhanger (that we all saw coming) happen.
Another unfortunate issue with the writing of the book: all of the MMC's were the same, even the father's POV. No distinct personalities and the glimpses we saw of them, were washed away pretty quickly.
The MMC's all agreed that they will have to grovel, but like it was just ringing the doorbell twice a day?
This new generation of writers has spent too much time reading fanfic and doesn't understand the basic term of endearment format: terms of endearment are not capitalized.
Terms used in this book: little mate, Petal, sweet girl, little love. ...more
PSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." NPSA to the author: Terms of endearment are not capitalized unless their placement in a sentence warrants it. Correct: "Here, drink this sweetheart." Not correct: "Here, drink this Sweetheart." This author, alongside other KU authors refuse to pay for a proper editor are very confused on this very simple rule. If the author cannot afford a good editor, Google exists.
There is nothing new with this book. Corrupt packs, scent matches, escaped omega, scent matched alphas that threaten sexual violence if an omega doesn't conform, scent matched alphas that emotionally abuse an omega while in heat even though she has a history of abuse and excessive use of pet names are all present in this book.
Dumb nicknames used in this book: little Omega, sweetness, honey, little one, baby, baby girl, pet, sparrow, little mouse, love, sunshine, darling, beautiful, and little menace. Twelve out of those are from her scent matches. Does she have twelve mates? Nope.
The one that gets me the most is the FMCs SCENT MATCHED mates refusing to treat her like an adult and still threaten her with violence and controlling behavior. It's as if the author wanted to write an abused woman but didn't actually think about how the men in her life should treat her. ...more
This book had some great ideas, but they were overshadowed by the poor editing and extreme inconsistency in storytelling.
Tempe, Beau, and Meghan are This book had some great ideas, but they were overshadowed by the poor editing and extreme inconsistency in storytelling.
Tempe, Beau, and Meghan are often misspelled; author doesn't know how to use quotation marks correctly; there are words missing from sentences; there's also the prolific amount of typos that riddle this book.
What I am trying to figure out is that this book was published in 2022, so how hasn't the author fixed these errors?
Unfortunately, we do have the men in her harem that hate her for [dumb reason here]. ...more
This book is held together by clichés, string, hopes and prayers.
Ya know what kills me, is when any MMC finds out that his mate/wife/GF has been abusThis book is held together by clichés, string, hopes and prayers.
Ya know what kills me, is when any MMC finds out that his mate/wife/GF has been abused so heavily THAT SHE HAS A HOLE IN HER BODY, he sexually assaults her, physically assaults her, threatens sexual punishment if she doesn't conform, and BULLIES her.
The story had so much potential, but it was written by an author who didn't know how to make characters well rounded or have the characters THINK about their actions.
Currently 26% in: In the beginning, I really admired the way that the FMC was written; strong, resilient, and intelligent. However, she is beginning toCurrently 26% in: In the beginning, I really admired the way that the FMC was written; strong, resilient, and intelligent. However, she is beginning to lose that independence and making very dumb decisions. Her inner monologue: "I don't want anything to do with my scent matches." What she does instead: surrounds herself with their business and submits to their (the mates) proposals. It was nice to have hope that we would get a strong female lead, but that hope is slowly eroding. So far the dumb ass nicknames are: omega, little omega, lamb, kid, and pretty girl. Also, the formula for RH mates is also present in this book: the dominate one (who is probably into BDSM, that's a prediction on my end), the golden retriever and the one who hates the FMC for [insert dumb reason].
53% in: Only about 4 or 5 days have passed since Emme was caught, and everyone in her life has betrayed her so far. She keeps saying things like "I can't trust them or their actions" yet she simpers to them (her mates) every single interaction. I miss the strong FMC from the first ten pages. Where did she go?
Completed Well, I saw that cliffhanger coming from a mile away. Also saw Finley saying the "she is toxic and will tear us apart so I have to stop her from bonding with my mates" line because this book follows the formulaic shifter RH men trend. Ya know, it's okay if not all men want to bond to an omega, but give actual reasons not imaginary ones. The first 90% or so of the book, 5-6 days had passed since Emme arrived at the compound. THen all of a sudden a week flies by. I said it earlier, and it bears repeating: I missed the Emme from the first chapter. She had personality, spunk and seemed like a fun girl. However, she was lost and her personality never returned.
Updated list of very dumb and not at all original nicknames: little omega, omega, pretty girl, lamb, darlin' girl, freckles, sunshine, shortcake, sweet omega, baby, my sweet omega.
I'm pretty sure that Fin and Hunter don't even know Emme's name. They just call her by her designation, as if that is all she is. ...more
This book is a quick read, nothing complex about the characters, plot or world. Which isn't a bad thing, but don't go in expecting a well crafted storThis book is a quick read, nothing complex about the characters, plot or world. Which isn't a bad thing, but don't go in expecting a well crafted story or deep character driven actions.
The characters, plot and the writing are VERY YAL.
It's unfortunate the author chose to follow the overdone RH gaggle of mates, as in we get one man who hates her because he can't have her so he's mean to her for really dumb reasons. *eye roll* ...more
This author has a toxic addiction to italics and ellipses and her editors don't have the gumption to say to the author "you need to break up with themThis author has a toxic addiction to italics and ellipses and her editors don't have the gumption to say to the author "you need to break up with them." I'm astounded that the author has a catalog such as hers, and yet she is making errors that 8th and 9th graders make re: formatting, dialogue, proper noun capitalization and character development. Two stars were deducted due to the terrible use of ellipses, italics and the blatant book stuffing techniques that existed in this book.
The MMC's are supposed to be HUNDREDS of years old, yet they don't remember their second in command saying her mind was warped? And what happened to the witch that was supposed to come and check the FMC out?
The book had a unique story and some unique elements, but the author published a rough first draft and it was off putting.
At present time, this is a MFM book, and there are an OBSCENE number of nicknames for the FMCV. Keep in mind that most of them are in the book and do not following proper grammar formatting. Nicknames: little one, sweetheart, Firefly, Peaches, little Peach, Pet, little one, sweet Nessa, sweet little Nessa, babe, pretty girl, baby, Little Firefly, sweet girl, little drunk girl, perfect little treasure, little Love, beautiful, Love, girl, baby girl, and sweetness.
TWENTY-TWO NICKNAMES BETWEEN TWO MEN FOR ONE WOMAN. And someone should tell the author that putting "little" in the terms of endearment doesn't make it original or good.
Man, this story held such promise but the authors editors did the story dirty. ...more