One of the reasons why I DNF'd the book was due to the nicknames of the FMC. Her name is Lillianna. Here are some of the names we heard her being callOne of the reasons why I DNF'd the book was due to the nicknames of the FMC. Her name is Lillianna. Here are some of the names we heard her being called in the first 19%: lilly, lills, Flower, baby, babe, il mio cuare, baby girl, dirty girl, shorty and lillypad.
There was WAY TOO much dialogue. Not enough scene building.
This author has a toxic addiction to italics and ellipses and her editors don't have the gumption to say to the author "you need to break up with themThis author has a toxic addiction to italics and ellipses and her editors don't have the gumption to say to the author "you need to break up with them." I'm astounded that the author has a catalog such as hers, and yet she is making errors that 8th and 9th graders make re: formatting, dialogue, proper noun capitalization and character development. Two stars were deducted due to the terrible use of ellipses, italics and the blatant book stuffing techniques that existed in this book.
The MMC's are supposed to be HUNDREDS of years old, yet they don't remember their second in command saying her mind was warped? And what happened to the witch that was supposed to come and check the FMC out?
The book had a unique story and some unique elements, but the author published a rough first draft and it was off putting.
At present time, this is a MFM book, and there are an OBSCENE number of nicknames for the FMCV. Keep in mind that most of them are in the book and do not following proper grammar formatting. Nicknames: little one, sweetheart, Firefly, Peaches, little Peach, Pet, little one, sweet Nessa, sweet little Nessa, babe, pretty girl, baby, Little Firefly, sweet girl, little drunk girl, perfect little treasure, little Love, beautiful, Love, girl, baby girl, and sweetness.
TWENTY-TWO NICKNAMES BETWEEN TWO MEN FOR ONE WOMAN. And someone should tell the author that putting "little" in the terms of endearment doesn't make it original or good.
Man, this story held such promise but the authors editors did the story dirty. ...more