Showing posts with label emily dickinson. Show all posts
Showing posts with label emily dickinson. Show all posts

Saturday, April 22, 2023

Day 22 ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2023


Maureen Thorson’s NaPoWriMo prompt: “Find an Emily Dickinson poem – preferably one you’ve never previously read – and take out all the dashes and line breaks. Make it just one big block of prose. Now, rebreak the lines. Add words where you want. Take out some words. Make your own poem out of it!”

Robert Lee Brewer’s Poem-a-Day prompt: “take the phrase ‘What (blank),’ replace the blank with a new word or phrase, make the new phrase the title of your poem, and then, write your poem. Possible titles might include: ‘What Are You Doing Here,’ 'What a Great Time,’ ‘Whatever You Say,' and/or ‘What Kind of Poem Are You Going to Write?’”


The Dickinson poem I'm altering is "Wild nights - Wild nights! (269)." Again, both prompts, slapstick.

What Greens?

Wild lettuce, wild spinach!
If there are no croutons
Our wild salad could use
Fritos or Funyuns!

Where are the forks?
All in the dishwasher?
Done with silverware,
Full disclosure!

Let’s use our hands,
Damn the blue cheese!
A loaf of bread, a jug
Of wine, and fingers — jeez!

—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

The Dickinson poem Alan is working with is Come slowly - Eden! (205). About his poem today, Alan says “Dickinson's ‘Come slowly — Eden!’ mistakenly refers to the worker bee as a male. This poem addresses that error.”

What Did Dickinson Know?

Misgendering
the worker bee
in verses kept
in privacy,

or sublimating
private hour
thoughts of nectars
from full flower?

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Here's a little caricature of how I imagine Emily Dickinson might look if she could read our alterations of her poems. This is based rather loosely on the only authenticated photograph of her.


Wikipedia has a list of all Emily Dickinson's poems, almost 1800 of them: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Emily_Dickinson_poems Have fun checking them out!


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Friday, April 23, 2021

Day 23 ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2021


Robert Lee Brewer’s Poem-a-Day prompt: Write “an appointment poem. My first thoughts with appointments conjure up visions of doctors, dentists, and parent-teacher conferences. But there are also business meetings and romantic dates.”

Maureen Thorson’s NaPoWriMo prompt: “Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that responds, in some way, to another. This could be as simple as using a line or image from another poem as a jumping-off point, or it could be a more formal poetic response to the argument or ideas raised in another poem. You might use a favorite (or least favorite poem) as the source for your response.”


Mashing up both prompts today in a small ditty after Emily Dickinson (Johnson 927). Here I'm using her go-to, common meter, either hymnal stanza or ballad. Her poem that begins "Absent place — an April Day —" is written in hymnal stanza, slant rhymed, but I'm employing a ballad, more fully rhymed.

In the Katoski Greenbelt
— beginning with a line
     from Emily Dickinson
Absent place — an April day
without one appointment.
No class, no Zoom, no doctors —
just the present moment.

Here, in these quiet woods
I have an appointment —
meeting a sprawl of wild bluebells
chorusing an indigo chant.

—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

I actually did go for a walk this morning in the Katoski Greenbelt, a park in Waterloo, Iowa, and shot this photo as well as many others of the bluebells I found there.


Alan worked with both prompts today, responding to "Under Ben Bulben" by William Butler Yeats with an acrostic Petrarchan sonnet. The line he's playing with is the last bit in the poem, and conceivably the speaker's very last stone utterance.

Horseman

Considering his soul secure in Christ,
Assuming his salvation was secure
Since ministers had told him he was pure
Through his repentance, sins he sacrificed
Against his inclinations; what enticed
Could trap him, he was careful. He was sure
Of every temptation that might lure,
Lamenting the restraint he exercised.
Dying before he died by many years,
Erroneously thinking joy is sin,
Yet going through the motions of the good:
Engagement, marriage, even fatherhood
Of reservation; he could not begin,
Never loving fully, hellbent in fears.

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

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Tuesday, April 14, 2020

Day 14 ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2020


Robert Lee Brewer’s Poem-a-Day prompt is the usual "Two for Tuesday":
1. Write a form poem.
2. Write an anti-form poem.
Maureen Thorson’s NaPoWriMo prompt: “write a poem that deals with the poems, poets, and other people who inspired you to write poems. These could be poems/poets/people that you strive to be like, or even poems, poets, and people that you strive not to be like. There are as many ways to go with this prompt as there are ways to be inspired.”


Alan today satisfies both prompts with a Petrarchan sonnet. Bravo!

I find my Jackself, Father Hopkins, here


I find my Jackself, Father Hopkins, here
beneath the lip of concrete walk, the nest
that’s blown from that whipped cherry tree, the best
that I can tell, some feathers still stuck there
where hatchlings fouled then flew and now somewhere
begin their nests and broods. What downy breast,
what shelter, wing or setting hen, professed
through watchful action God’s own watchful care?
Now watch me care, inadequate and lost,
just housed, just fed, not comforted but kept
away from friends and music. If I brood,
then I am selfish, focused on the cost
of keeping others from me safe; accept,
O Lord, my shame, my penitential mood.

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]



Check out Alan's book on Gerard Manley Hopkins, The Fire That Breaks: Gerard Manley Hopkins's Poetic Legacies, edited by Daniel Westover and Thomas Alan Holmes.


My poem today addresses all three prompts, the two form/not-form prompts and also the poet tribute prompt.

The Ballad of Emily and Walt:
Synergic Sonnet Not-Sonnet


Walt, you Granite huge Grizzly
    of a Man – your Pen swirls
through air and over Paper — truly
    and widely Transcendental!

Ah yes, Emily, Amherst's resident angel, your pen adorned with feathers plucked
    from an amorous swan, floating and swimming in these American continental
    waters, your pen streams a flowing yawp of illumination, energy, and spark

Through heaven's firmament, the moon's curling path through the stars, the swash
    and buckle of the planets, great wanderers through the obsidian bowl of the sky,
    the grand orbit of Apollo and his chariot as the almighty sun,

Through the sweeping vistas of the expansive prairies and massive mountains
    of this superlative land, the eagles, and the passenger pigeons, flying across the
    cerulean dome of the Divine's aerial dominion, the birds of the ground, the ostrich
    and the penguin, the hummingbird and the hawk, the nightingale and the lark,

Through the aquamarine and indigo depths of the seas and lakes, the swirling schools
    of finned creatures, the shark, the albino whale, the miniature minnow, the
    many-tentacled octopus, the serpent-bodied and sinuous eel, the folk of the
    burbling creeks, the swift rivers, the broad Mississippi, the ocean.

Yes, the bobolink my Diva
    sings in your Honor,
and the owl – Omnipotent chanter –
    croons a tune of Dolor.

The many and varied peoples of this vast republic extol bright praises to your verse,

The regalia-bearing Indians in their verdant woodland, the Irish blacksmith hammering
    blades in his forge on Long Island, the German farmers toiling in the black soil of the
    Middle West, the Chinese forty-niners in San Francisco all laud your words, from the
    rough-hewn cedar cradle to the gold-leaf filigree of the Stygian horse-drawn
    ultimate hearse.

—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]


The way the form/not-form aspect of my poem works is like this: the form vibe is represented by the Dickinsonian hymnal stanzas, while the not-form feeling resides in the Whitmanesque long lines of free verse. If you consider the paragraph-like long lines as each one long line, then you'll see that the poem is a Shakespearan sonnet, sans meter.


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Saturday, April 29, 2017

Day 29 ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2017


29 is where I live.

That's an interesting sentence, isn't it? Translation: I live in the state of Iowa, which is the 29th state in the US, admitted to the Union in 1846.

Maureen Thorson’s NaPoWriMo prompt: "Today, I’d like to challenge you to take one of your favorite poems and find a very specific, concrete noun in it. For example, if your favorite poem is this verse of Emily Dickinson’s, you might choose the word 'stones' or 'specter.' After you’ve chosen your word, put the original poem away and spend five minutes free-writing associations — other nouns, adjectives, etc. Then use your original word and the results of your free-writing as the building blocks for a new poem."

Robert Lee Brewer’s Poem-a-Day prompt: "write a metric poem. Most of the world uses the metric system to measure things out; not so much in the States. But there are meters and liters, and the occasional millimeters. Also, poetry uses metrics (the study of meter in poetry). And metrics, in a general sense, can measure various things by a common denominator — even inches and/or teaspoons."


Today, Alan and I are both using Maureen's example poem above, [One need not be a Chamber — to be Haunted —], Johnson # 670 / Franklin # 407; we are both riffing on the word "Revolver" from that Emily Dickinson poem.

Revolver

When I was 9 my prized possession was
a Mattel Colt .45 Peacemaker,
a Marshal Matt Dillon chrome revolver,
a smokin’ cap gun brought by Santa Claus.

I didn’t know about that other Colt
.45, the semi-automatic,
magazine-fed, recoil-operated, bolt-
action pistol used by American

troops in the Philippine-American war.
It was invented to kill Filipinos!
In the ’80s, the DOD changed over
to 9mm weapons like NATO’s.

But 9mm or .45 inch
can still kill my people. Just a hunch.


—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

There you go, a sonnet starting with the idea of the revolver, moving from inches to metric. Two kinds of metric because the poem is also in pentameter. The abbreviation "DOD" stands for Department of Defense. I assume you all know what "NATO" is.

For those who nerd out on poetics, in lines 2 and 4 of the second quatrain, I'm using enjambed rhyme. The ic-n in "American" (line 4) is rhymed with the ic/m in the middle of the phrase "semi-automatic / magazine" split by a line break (line 2). Fun, huh?


Here's Alan's intro to his "revolver" poem today: "Well, the creepy thing is that 'One need not be a chamber to be haunted' got me thinking about gun puns, and the tone of it reminded me a bit of 'Eleanor Rigby' from the Beatles' Revolver album, and I had trouble disconnecting the two, so here we are."

Cylinder

One need not be a Chamber — to be loaded.
Where do they all come from?
One need not be surrounded — to be goaded
Where do they all belong?

Could she be hungry, picking up rice,
Given to clean,
Returning home where she takes off her face,
Living in dreams?

Far safer, through an Abbey gallop,
The Stones a’chase
To follow greatness, Pepper’s wallop,
Request all waste?

But, earlier, she dies alone
To face the world
With her jarred face slightly undone,
Its edges curled.

The Beatles bestow a Revolver
That aims and spins
At precisely thirty-three and one third
RPMs.

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Great poem, Alan, thank you. A marvelous Dickinson imitation. Gentle readers, I hope you enjoyed our widely different approaches to that same word revolver. I hope too you got Alan's Abbey Road and Satanic Majesty play.

Incidentally, Alan also used enjambed rhyme in the last stanza. The ird in the ending word "third" (line 3) is rhymed with er/th in the phrase "Revolver / That" split by a line break (line 1). So cool that both of us employed enjambed rhyme today.


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Friday, April 24, 2015

Day 24 ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2015


Day Twenty-Four. Today is the first day, not of the rest of your life, as some say (though I suppose that's true enough), but rather the first day of the last week of National Poetry Month. Counting today, you could write seven poems more.

As a kid, I was enchanted by 24: the numbers 6 and 4 can be multiplied to make 24, and the number 4 is not only one of those two factors but also one of the digits in 24 . . . plus the other factor, 6, could be parsed into 2+4, the very digits in 24. Fun, eh? Yeah, I was a weird kid.

Maureen Thorson's NaPoWriMo prompt: "I challenge you to write a parody or satire based on a famous poem. It can be long or short, rhymed or not. But take a favorite (or unfavorite) poem of the past, and see if you can’t re-write it on humorous, mocking, or sharp-witted lines. You can use your poem to make fun of the original (in the vein of a parody), or turn the form and manner of the original into a vehicle for making points about something else (more of a satire — though the dividing lines get rather confused and thin at times)."

Robert Lee Brewer's PAD prompt: "write a moment poem. The moment can be a big moment or small moment; it can be a good moment or horrible moment; it can affect thousands or matter to just one person. Some moments happen in crowded rooms; some happen in the most quiet of spaces. Find yours and write a poem."

I'm combining the NaPoWriMo parody prompt with Robert Lee Brewer's PAD prompt for a moment poem. Playing around with Dickinson's "Wild nights - Wild nights!" (shown below on the right).

Mild moments - Mild moments!
— with apologies to
Emily Dickinson
Mild moments - Mild moments!
Were I eating mushroom soup
Mild moments would be
A whoop.

Mushrooms - in cream -
Could play the part -
Of poor man’s Alfredo -
And later a f— . . . fiddle!

So boil up some Pasta -
Ah - Fetuccine!
Might I but mushroom - tonight -
In thee!
                      Wild nights - Wild nights!
by Emily Dickinson
(Franklin 269)
Wild nights - Wild nights!
Were I with thee
Wild nights should be
Our luxury!

Futile - the winds -
To a Heart in port -
Done with the Compass -
Done with the Chart!

Rowing in Eden -
Ah - the Sea!
Might I but moor - tonight -
In thee!

Draft by Vince Gotera
[Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Click on the image for more information.
Here, on the right, is a photograph of the original manuscript of this Dickinson poem in her own handwriting.

You probably know that in the early book publications of Dickinson's work, which appeared after her death, editors removed the dashes she used in most of her poems. To the readers of her own time, the dashes could have been too unusual and even shocking. When I first encountered Dickinson's poems in school as a child, there were no dashes, I'm pretty sure. It was not until quite some time after those early books that scholarly editors editing the poems to be studied re-inserted the dashes.

An interesting fact about Dickinson's dashes is that they are not uniform. She used several different kinds of dashes, if that's indeed what they are. In this single handwritten manuscript, we can see at least two distinctly varying kinds. Most resemble hyphens, though they are different lengths. The marks after "Futile" and "winds" in line 5 are shorter than the ones in the middle of line 1 and the end of line 9. Notice, though, that the mark after "Ah" in line 10 is more vertical and not dash- or hyphen-like at all to my eye. It's more like an apostrophe, don't you think? But the various scholarly editors have all rendered that mark as a dash. It's a tough call. The dash has become the consensus among Dickinson experts, but really we don't know with certainty how she herself might have had those marks rendered in print as opposed to handwriting.

Okay, on to our good friend Alan. "The combined prompts call for a parody and an important moment," he says. "I have been working with both Flannery O'Connor and Gerard Manley Hopkins lately (there's a project I'm perhaps participating in), and it just struck me that there is a moment in 'Good Country People' that could fit the dual prompts. One character in the story is named 'Manley Pointer.' I think you have an idea of where I am going."

The Wooden Leg
— Gerard Manley Pointer
              To Joy Hopewell

I’d brought along this morning my valise
because you just can’t tell what you might need
when courting. So, I let you take the lead,
and you believed you’d use me for release,
but you are all the same, as dumb as geese;
you think my ignorance is guaranteed,
but my fake name’s protection. Beg and plead —
there’ll be no point in calling the police.

And, all this time, I thought you were some girl
with no beliefs in anything. You beg
and whimper, helpless, skittish as a squirrel,
because your learning’s weaker than your leg,
my trophy I’ll keep precious as a pearl
beside a glass eye smooth as a boiled egg.

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Again a Petrarchan sonnet. Bravo, Alan. I'm impressed at how you can spin out these rhymed and metered forms so easily and gracefully. And I love the Gerard Manley ____  jest, as you surely knew I would, right? You capture well Flannery O'Connor's signature weird humor.

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Wednesday, April 8, 2015

Day Eight ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2015


Day Eight. Playing more with fractions and percentages, remember how yesterday we weren't quite at 1/4th of the month gone? It was 23%, actually. Well, today we exceeded 1/4. Today 27% of National Poetry Month is gone . . . but that means we still have 73% left. Lots of poetry yet to come. Keep writing, friends.

Maureen Thorson's NaPoWriMo prompt: "I challenge you to write a palinode. And what’s that? It’s a poem in which the poet retracts a statement made in an earlier poem. . . . It could be anything from how you decided that you like anchovies after all to how you decided that annoying girl was actually cool enough that you married her."

Robert Lee Brewer's PAD prompt: "write a dare poem. This poem could be written as a dare to someone. It could make a daring proclamation. It could involve a dare that someone has accepted . . . or refused. In a way, each day of this challenge is a dare to write a poem."

Today, I'm merging the prompts with a meditation on palinodes and dares. And working from a comment that reader vstefani, a former colleague, left on yesterday's blog post. To get some order into this surmisal, I'm using haiku stanzas, in form but not in substance. You could think of them as 5-7-5 bottles I'm filling with language, always striving for productive line breaks.

Palinode Dare

On yesterday’s poem,
my ole friend Vicki wrote, “Great
images — now how

do I get them out
of my head?” Vicki, you know,
I just kinda let

that guy talk and I
wrote it down. It was fun. But
I’m no Bukowski.

I don’t want to load
my readers’ and friends’ heads up
with unneeded crap.

But then do I dare
retract? Write a palinode?
Say that guy’s not me,

I’m not that speaker,
didn’t mean to trouble you?
Is that cowardly?

Doesn’t that reject
what poetry is and does,
insulting the Muse?

What I know is this:
my responsibility
to my characters

is a sacred trust.
They live because of my breath
and I can’t say words

to kill them. So no
palinode from me today.
Dare or no dare. Nope.

—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Here's the good Doctor Holmes's intro today: "I took on the task of combining two poetry prompts again today. The first is to write a palinode, which, in spite of its looking as if it is supposed to be a dumb poem that sounds as if it were written by a former candidate for vice president, is actually a poem that refutes an assertion made by another poem. So, for example, if one were to write a love sonnet that asserts that the beloved is not, in fact, "more temperate and beautiful" than a summer's day, that would suit the definition.

"My other prompt was to write a dare poem, and this poem today includes the action of a dare in it. I am returning to the idea of what would happen if Emily Dickinson were to offer versions of works by other poets. I hope that you all enjoy this one."

[Beneath the fantail sheet she lies]


Beneath the fantail sheet she lies,
                 Her horny feet — exposed
Asserting to our witness eyes
                 What real supplants supposed.

The cigar roller, whipping curds,
                 The boys, the wenches, all,
The flowers wrapped in printed words
                 Defy death through life’s call.

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Ah, very nicely done. I won't reveal who the other poet is, but if you need another hint, gentle readers . . . "concupiscent." And "fantail" in the Dickinson-style poem above is also a revealing hint. Those should help ID the poet, I think.   
Vince:  Alan, I'm fascinated by these Dickinson re-visionings you're doing. I think it's something new. I've never seen this approach to poetry writing before. Can you say more about what you were trying to do here?

Alan:  I am applying this notion of Dickinson's version of the other poet's specific poem to illustrate something I discuss when teaching that poem to my students, the importance of juxtaposition. In the original poem, we see a room full of life, so full that it spills out into the street. However, in the second stanza the poem directs our attention to the dead woman in the other room, suggesting that for all the life elsewhere, the end is the same. If, however, we began in the bedroom and moved outward, the narrative progression would indicate that life goes on. In that sense, my offering for today is a palinode that refutes the argument of the original poem. I decided to take the "Dickinson revision" tactic to reduce the original poem to key argument and imagery.

Vince:  Everyone, did you figure out who the poet is? And the poem at hand? Here's the solution to the riddle! Just for fun, here's an illustration of this poem by Anthony Ventura (evolve-r.com).

Anthony Ventura, "The Emperor of Ice Cream" (source)

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Sunday, April 5, 2015

Day Five ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day 2015


Day Five. Easter and also Passover. And 1/6 of the way through National Poetry Month. The fractions are moving quickly: two days ago, 1/10; yesterday, a little under 1/7; and now 1/6. If you prefer percentages, 10% of the month gone on day three, 13% on day four, and today 17% (with a little rounding).

Maureen Thorson's NaPoWriMo challenge today is for us to alter a Dickinson poem: "Find an Emily Dickinson poem — preferably one you’ve never previously read — and take out all the dashes and line breaks. Make it just one big block of prose. Now, rebreak the lines. Add words where you want. Take out some words. Make your own poem out of it!"

At PAD headquarters, Robert Lee Brewer suggests "a vegetable poem. . . . If you want to write a poem about a specific vegetable, go for it. If you want to write a poem that just has a vegetable mixed in somewhere, go for it. If you want to praise or curse vegetables, go for it. If you want to play with the idea of vegetables, including a vegetable mental state, couch 'potato,' and so on — well, you know, go for it."

I started off by making a list of vegetables with my girlfriend's help — Kathy's eminently better with flora than I. I noticed that the mushroom names were pretty interesting. A little googling revealed that the edible mushrooms include not just the familiar button mushroom and truffle, but also wild varities that have, forgive me, wild names! Shaggy Inkcap, Ox Tongue, Velvet Shank, Sulphur Shelf.

Then I chose a Dickinson poem to play with. ("Fr" below refers to the so-called "Franklin numbers" . . . in 1998 editor R. W. Franklin assigned numbers to her poems to indicate the order he thinks she wrote them. This adjusts (is that the right word?) the "Johnson numbers" assigned by editor Thomas H. Johnson in 1955 corresponding to his theory about composition order. On Wikipedia — ya gotta love Wikipedia — an article lists all Dickinson poems (almost 1800); you can sort it by Franklin numbers,  Johnson numbers, alphabetically by first line, order of publication, and Dickinson's own sorting into packets. Click here to browse that list; it's pretty damn impressive.

Banish Air from Air   (Fr 963)
by Emily Dickinson
Banish Air from Air —
Divide Light if you dare —
They'll meet
While Cubes in a Drop
Or Pellets of Shape
Fit —
Films cannot annul
Odors return whole
Force Flame
And with a Blonde push
Over your impotence
Flits Steam.

I wasn't very good at following directions today, I'm afraid. I merged the Dickinson revision idea with the vegetable prompt, but I didn't alter the dashes and line breaks as Thorson suggested. I did an Oulipo-style exercise with the nouns . . . well, you'll see.

’Shrooms and Corn Smut
After [Banish Air from Air]
by Emily Dickinson (Fr 963)
Banish Chanterelles from Chanterelles —
Divide Portobellos if you dare —
Giant Puffballs will meet
While Saffron Milkcaps in a Lawyer’s Wig
Or Horns of Plenty
Fit —
Shiitakes cannot annul
Snakehead Morels return whole
Force Fairy Ring Champignon
And with a Beefsteak Polypore push
Over your Dryad’s Saddle
Flits El Huitlacoche.
                                                         
Chanterelle Mushrooms
—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

And then I thought of another way to alter, play with, the Dickinson poem. Again no relineations but I did "take out" the dashes and some words as Thorson suggested.

Darkness Tempts
Erasure from Emily Dickinson's
[Banish Air from Air] (Fr 963)
Banish Air from Air —
Divide
Light if you dare —
They'll meet
While Cubes in a Drop
Or Pellets of
Shape
Fit —
Films
cannot annul
Odors
return whole
Force Flame

And with a Blonde push
Over your impotence
Flits Steam.

—Draft by Vince Gotera    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

Well, I hope those two were fun even though they're not really fully developed as poems of my own. I didn't quite, as Thorson put it, "Make your own poem out of it!"

Alan also merged prompts today. Here's how he tells it: “Well, this one was a puzzle for a while, because we received the challenge to rewrite a Dickinson poem and to write a vegetable poem as well. I started thinking that if Emily Dickinson were to rewrite Andrew Marvell’s ‘To His Coy Mistress’ (‘my vegetable love would grow’) that the argument would be both more direct and more abstract. So the following is my taking the passion of her ‘Wild Nights!’ and filtering it through Marvell.”

My Coy One

My coy one, time runs swiftly past —
I’d want — a glacial rate —
We’d roam the world with handclasps — chaste —
Before our final fate —

Devouring time has its demands —
And ripeness falls — to rot
And Nature’s made — by more than hands —
In copse and grove — and grot

Our vegetable love may grow
In cycles — in our Earth —
But spirits learn from spring — and know
We challenge death — through birth

—Draft by Thomas Alan Holmes    [Do not copy or quote . . . thanks.]

I really appreciate how Alan merges the two poets' sensibilities so well. The line "Nature's made — by more than hands" is SO Dickinson-sounding. And I learned a new word: "grot"; I'll let you have the google bliss of finding out what that is. Great work, Alan.

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Friday, May 31, 2013

Wild Nights, Wild Nights


First poem after April's poem-a-day hullabaloo. Dedicated to Kathy Lawrence, my lovely muse.   ;-)




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Again a terzaiku sonnet: haiku stanzas rhymed in terza rima. Many thanks to Emily Dickinson for the post title I nicked.

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Tuesday, April 10, 2012

Day Ten ... NaPoWriMo / Poem-a-Day


Today, Robert Lee Brewer once again offers a “Two-for-Tuesday” set of prompts: "forest poem" or "tree poem." Do one or the other, he says, "Or you can dive right into the metaphor separating the two."

Catherine gives us a clever little send-up of Emily Dickinson's "I never saw a moor" today; her poem even sports its own fake Johnson number, no less. And, of course, there's a tree!

10.

I didn't do my chores
Instead I climbed a tree
And when my mother came to look
She quickly spotted me.

I found it very odd
Since I was only seven
That she thought I should be taught
To clean the dirty kitchen.

—Draft by Catherine Pritchard Childress     [do not copy or quote ... thanks]

Over at NaPoWriMo.net Maureen Thorson mentions "a quote usually attributed to T. S. Eliot: Good poets borrow; great poets steal." For Day Ten then, she says, "let's stick to plain old stealing by writing poems with their first lines lifted from other poems."

Maureen bringing up that Good Poet / Great Poet business reminds me that this quote (which isn't exactly what Eliot really said) leaves out perhaps the most important category: the Bad Poet. And even more important than that: the VERY Bad Poet.

So, in honor of all BAD POETS and VERY BAD POETS, I offer this little ditty neither Maureen nor Robert probably saw coming. (Or maybe they saw it coming all too well.)

In Memoriam My Dog Edgar Allan
With sincerest apologies to Joyce Kilmer and
the Little Bunny hopping through the forest
I think that I shall never see
A poem lovely as a tree.

But I know I have seen a bee
That chased my dog right up a tree.

Now, he was tough, that little bee,
And I was glad it wasn't me

But Edgar Allan foo-foo'd, see?
And THAT, my friends, is Poe-in-tree.

—Draft by Vince Gotera     [do not copy or quote ... thanks]

Didja notice how I got both "tree" and "forest" in there? Whoo-eeee! Not to mention of course stealing Joyce Kilmer's most popular opener. I was almost tempted to sprinkle in some dashes and capitals to mash up Dickinson with Poe, Kilmer, and Little Bunny Foo-Foo! But even I have my limits — though I can imagine some people saying they wouldn't have thought so.

Our featured blog today is No Vacation from Speculation by Jessica McHugh. On April 5, an enterprising facebook member created "Bad Poetry on Facebook Day." Jessica pounced on this opportunity to use "bad poetry" as her prompt for Day Five and wrote several hilarious Bad Poems, some on the facebook event page and others on the blog. Classic. Jessica is a well-known speculative fiction writer who has written horror fiction, alternate history, and epic fantasy, publishing ten books in the last three years. As you will see from her blog, Jessica is also a fine poet . . . she doesn't only write bad poems!


Okay, friends, we're 1/3 through the month. Who'd a-thunk it? Leave a comment below, won't you? I got rid of that word verification malarkey today, so it's much easier to comment. Ingat.


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